2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Infinite Blue Sea"-
8 total reviews
Comment from aryr
This was a great tanka, Gypsy. I liked the dual pictures, they were very interesting, of the ocean and the back yard. Your words were simple and direct. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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This was a great tanka, Gypsy. I liked the dual pictures, they were very interesting, of the ocean and the back yard. Your words were simple and direct. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, my friend, I hope you are having a wonderful day. I appreciate that you read and reviewed my poem. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
We are simply a small part of the universe, and the ocean is a great reminder of that. Our past is covered by sand if we don't dig it up again. Your presentation is beautiful.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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We are simply a small part of the universe, and the ocean is a great reminder of that. Our past is covered by sand if we don't dig it up again. Your presentation is beautiful.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, my friend, I hope you are having a wonderful day. I appreciate that you read and reviewed my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from JSD
You write so much, and this is another beautiful one. Love the use of sand for time. Wondered about glass instead of clock, for hour glass which would then half rhyme. But this is gentle and evocative. Such talent. X
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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You write so much, and this is another beautiful one. Love the use of sand for time. Wondered about glass instead of clock, for hour glass which would then half rhyme. But this is gentle and evocative. Such talent. X
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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I got rid of hourglass, it was not necessary
Thank you very much, my friend, I hope you are having a wonderful day. I appreciate that you read and reviewed my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your modern tanka poem - interesting picture presentation- make me dizzy- suggest - clock covers my past' 5 syllables? Poem has good flow in the single sentence- good job AP
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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I like your modern tanka poem - interesting picture presentation- make me dizzy- suggest - clock covers my past' 5 syllables? Poem has good flow in the single sentence- good job AP
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you, ap. :) looks better.
Thank you very much for your, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
i wonder where that second pic was taken...
totally looks like san clemente
anyway, a great tanka
reminds me of the song 'i hope you dance'
may you still feel small beside the ocean...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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i wonder where that second pic was taken...
totally looks like san clemente
anyway, a great tanka
reminds me of the song 'i hope you dance'
may you still feel small beside the ocean...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Beautiful words photo and presentation! Time can heal and wash away past pain and your presentation uses personification to say that. Excellent! Another Gypsy Masterpiece!! x
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Beautiful words photo and presentation! Time can heal and wash away past pain and your presentation uses personification to say that. Excellent! Another Gypsy Masterpiece!! x
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, my friend, I hope you are having a wonderful day. I appreciate that you read and reviewed my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from patcelaw
This is very nicely worded, and I enjoyed reading it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Your present things beautifully, and they are challenged when it comes to understanding what you're talking about. Patricia
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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This is very nicely worded, and I enjoyed reading it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Your present things beautifully, and they are challenged when it comes to understanding what you're talking about. Patricia
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
The great ocean does make us feel small in the vastness of the universe. Also the sands of time covering our past life make us feel so ephemeral in the scope of eternity. Beautiful presentation!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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The great ocean does make us feel small in the vastness of the universe. Also the sands of time covering our past life make us feel so ephemeral in the scope of eternity. Beautiful presentation!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister, I appreciate that you read and reviewed my poem.
Love,
MariVal
