The Stranger
Who will make first contact?28 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Beautiful! I love the words you've chosen, throughout! I feel the 4same and I trust that God is always with
us. Excellent writing!! Best wishes!! ;)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Beautiful! I love the words you've chosen, throughout! I feel the 4same and I trust that God is always with
us. Excellent writing!! Best wishes!! ;)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thanks, Alex. This was a special one.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you have 6 votes now!
I enjoyed your entry about Jesus and I agree he will look sad for too many of His cherished children have lost their way.
You are the only one that used poetry ... which in my eyes was challenging yet the result is praiseworthy.
I really love your closing stanza.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Ciao mystery poet, you have 6 votes now!
I enjoyed your entry about Jesus and I agree he will look sad for too many of His cherished children have lost their way.
You are the only one that used poetry ... which in my eyes was challenging yet the result is praiseworthy.
I really love your closing stanza.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thanks for the review and support, tempeste. I seem to do better with poetry father than prose. When I got near the end, that last stanza just jumped right out at me.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is a beautiful verse, and exactly how I imagine Jesus would look and be if He were to return among us today. We could easily pass this stranger by, if we were not alert and our hearts open.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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This is a beautiful verse, and exactly how I imagine Jesus would look and be if He were to return among us today. We could easily pass this stranger by, if we were not alert and our hearts open.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Ginda. You are right. We will have to pay attention.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well done, my fellow follower, I assume. That's something He would never do. Assume. Neither should I, for simply believing is rather deceiving considering not everyone will rise like cream to the top.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Well done, my fellow follower, I assume. That's something He would never do. Assume. Neither should I, for simply believing is rather deceiving considering not everyone will rise like cream to the top.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the review, Tom. Always look forward to your unique reviews.
Comment from Wendy G
A very well written poem but He won't be trying again. His work of salvation was offered the first time He came and culminated in His death in our place. When He returns it will be in judgment and will establish His reign of justice and peace. However your poem is very well written with excellent rhyme, flow and metre and is presented beautifully. I send you very best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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A very well written poem but He won't be trying again. His work of salvation was offered the first time He came and culminated in His death in our place. When He returns it will be in judgment and will establish His reign of justice and peace. However your poem is very well written with excellent rhyme, flow and metre and is presented beautifully. I send you very best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Wendy. At Gethsemane, I feel that Jesus was asking for more time to carry out his teachings. God felt that Jesus's death, at this time, would be the way to go.
Comment from karenina
Very thoughtful I always figured Jesus would be found among the poor, the homeless, and the needy ~~ not in some elite country club shaking hands with the bigwigs. Your stanzas are humble and true. Your rhyme is spot on and this flows very well. True to the theme and full of faith! Great job!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Very thoughtful I always figured Jesus would be found among the poor, the homeless, and the needy ~~ not in some elite country club shaking hands with the bigwigs. Your stanzas are humble and true. Your rhyme is spot on and this flows very well. True to the theme and full of faith! Great job!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Karenina. I'm sure when He shows up, it will not be with the elite or politicians. I'm sure that there are a few more categories that He will avoid.
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True that!
Comment from Barbara H.
Very moving poem. I question using the words drifting stray, but it does stand out very effectively. Using first person is successfully accomplished. The description of the clothing he wore was done well. Not fancy and in style were added bonuses.
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Very moving poem. I question using the words drifting stray, but it does stand out very effectively. Using first person is successfully accomplished. The description of the clothing he wore was done well. Not fancy and in style were added bonuses.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the review, Barb. I used those words to enhance the effect of the Holy discovery.
Comment from nomi338
Unlike Thomas the doubter, I would be convinced by his words, the compassionate look in his eye, the gentleness of his manner. Many today meet his representatives and do not recognize them. He once stated that when we are kind to those in need, we are in fact being kind to him.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Unlike Thomas the doubter, I would be convinced by his words, the compassionate look in his eye, the gentleness of his manner. Many today meet his representatives and do not recognize them. He once stated that when we are kind to those in need, we are in fact being kind to him.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the review, Nolan. Great observations.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your poem is a great entry for the contest. You are so right that one of the greatest ways we would recognize Jesus is by the wounds in His hands. He is alive and well, and although we may not see Him with our natural eyes, His presence in this world, manifested in the lives of those who love and serve Him.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Your poem is a great entry for the contest. You are so right that one of the greatest ways we would recognize Jesus is by the wounds in His hands. He is alive and well, and although we may not see Him with our natural eyes, His presence in this world, manifested in the lives of those who love and serve Him.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the review, Anne. Jesus is going to find this place pretty mixed up.
Comment from w.j.debi
I wish I had a six left. This is a touching poem. Your theme is well developed with excellent for shadowing of who it is you are speaking to.
Impactful ending.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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I wish I had a six left. This is a touching poem. Your theme is well developed with excellent for shadowing of who it is you are speaking to.
Impactful ending.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thanks, debi. This poem was most interesting in its development. It took a great deal of time to get started, but then everything just fell into place.
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Looks like spellcheck changed foreshadowing, but I guess you picked up the meaning.
