Forgive Anyway
Potlatch Poetry Club ~ Canzonetta ~ week of 6-17-20 2340 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
A little more complicated than my small mind could grasp but it did have beautiful flow and and extolled the wonderful virtue of forgiveness which I think we all struggle with!
Well done!
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A little more complicated than my small mind could grasp but it did have beautiful flow and and extolled the wonderful virtue of forgiveness which I think we all struggle with!
Well done!
D
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
Comment from lancellot
This is very well crafted. I think this poem, which is listed as general fiction can apply to many people in real life. Forgiveness may be godly, and therapeutic, but it isn't easy to give.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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This is very well crafted. I think this poem, which is listed as general fiction can apply to many people in real life. Forgiveness may be godly, and therapeutic, but it isn't easy to give.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Well said. Thanks so much!
Comment from leather
This is well-written and shows that when one forgives, they have achieved a measure of control over their situation or oppressor. Forgiveness is a tricky issue, but this poem sheds a little more light on the benefits gained from it.
Thanks for writing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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This is well-written and shows that when one forgives, they have achieved a measure of control over their situation or oppressor. Forgiveness is a tricky issue, but this poem sheds a little more light on the benefits gained from it.
Thanks for writing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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I am so sorry for my delayed reply. Thank you so much for your kind words and feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Terry Broxson
Jessica, this is a well-written poem full of pathos. If I am interpreting the poem right, it concerns a young girl who was neglected by one of her parents. If I interpreted it wrong, then what I'm about to suggest will be irrelevant.
Just food for thought. If the poem concerns either a mother or father's neglect. Consider identifying them with something like, I expected more from a (Mother's or Father's) love, But I will forgive you anyway.
Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Jessica, this is a well-written poem full of pathos. If I am interpreting the poem right, it concerns a young girl who was neglected by one of her parents. If I interpreted it wrong, then what I'm about to suggest will be irrelevant.
Just food for thought. If the poem concerns either a mother or father's neglect. Consider identifying them with something like, I expected more from a (Mother's or Father's) love, But I will forgive you anyway.
Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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I am so sorry for my delayed reply. Thank you so much for your kind words and perceptive feedback.
Your suggestion is very relevant. This concerns a mother's neglect and an abusive stepfather. I still may revise with your suggestion in mind; I found this piece was interpreted many different ways. Thanks so much, Terry.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Jessica.
-I like your poem very much.
-Effective imagery, meter, rhyme, and repeating line.
-You also tell a good story.
-I like the strength you show in verses one and two.
-The next two verses show your view on the person
you are referring to. This person never took a stand,
"And I don't need your love to live."
-You do a good job telling this person what
you want them to understand:
"The hardest hit was your neglect."
-A very good concluding verse and excellent poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Jessica.
-I like your poem very much.
-Effective imagery, meter, rhyme, and repeating line.
-You also tell a good story.
-I like the strength you show in verses one and two.
-The next two verses show your view on the person
you are referring to. This person never took a stand,
"And I don't need your love to live."
-You do a good job telling this person what
you want them to understand:
"The hardest hit was your neglect."
-A very good concluding verse and excellent poem.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Pam thank you so much for your insightful review and kind words. Again, I am so sorry for this delayed response!
Xo
Jessica
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You are very welcome, Jessica. There is no problem about a late reply.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very good Jessica. This is an intense piece of verse. The speaker is forgiving someone. I'm not sure who it is. My first guess is a mother. I hope this is not autobiographical.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Very good Jessica. This is an intense piece of verse. The speaker is forgiving someone. I'm not sure who it is. My first guess is a mother. I hope this is not autobiographical.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Paul. Xo
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your words delve into the depths of hurt and neglect, and the choice to forgive anyway, and you do so with poetic excellence. I love the line you use for your repetition, as it emphasizes this choice being made with confidence and courage. Brava!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Your words delve into the depths of hurt and neglect, and the choice to forgive anyway, and you do so with poetic excellence. I love the line you use for your repetition, as it emphasizes this choice being made with confidence and courage. Brava!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much Ginda, that means the world!
Comment from ESOSTINE
Genuine forgiveness is a gift not many people can offer. Your poem flows smoothly and unforced, indicative of its originality and openness of keeping the past in the past. Unforgiveness is a huge burden which you have chosen to laydown. Well done, well enjoyed. Enjoy your new found peace, dear Jessica.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Genuine forgiveness is a gift not many people can offer. Your poem flows smoothly and unforced, indicative of its originality and openness of keeping the past in the past. Unforgiveness is a huge burden which you have chosen to laydown. Well done, well enjoyed. Enjoy your new found peace, dear Jessica.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, that means a great deal go me! Xo
Comment from jake cosmos aller
powerful and moving poem about suffering domestic abuse and somehow managing to forgive those who treaspassed against you like the last lines the best
The hits I took, not by your hand
But never did you once protect
I only hope you understand
The hardest hit was your neglect
What's done is done; I can't undo
But I won't waste another day
The peace I make won't come from you
And I'll forgive you anyway.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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powerful and moving poem about suffering domestic abuse and somehow managing to forgive those who treaspassed against you like the last lines the best
The hits I took, not by your hand
But never did you once protect
I only hope you understand
The hardest hit was your neglect
What's done is done; I can't undo
But I won't waste another day
The peace I make won't come from you
And I'll forgive you anyway.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Jake!
Comment from Bill Schott
This canzonetta poem, Forgive Anyway, has the proper formatting and alludes, presumably, to one parent not defending a battered child from the other. The choice to forgive and make a break is justified and sane.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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This canzonetta poem, Forgive Anyway, has the proper formatting and alludes, presumably, to one parent not defending a battered child from the other. The choice to forgive and make a break is justified and sane.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much, Bill!
