Hollow Words
For animal lovers10 total reviews
Comment from Laurie Holding
Ooh, you win the six from me on this one. So well done. They all desperately need advocates who will be their voices, don't they? Thank you for your work on this one; your rhyme scheme was good, your subject is more than worthy. I think the only thing I'd change is the order of your stanzas; your accompanying artwork is cows, and for a moment there I thought, "Hm. This is odd. Why a poem about dogs if I'm looking at cows?" I hope you win! Good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Ooh, you win the six from me on this one. So well done. They all desperately need advocates who will be their voices, don't they? Thank you for your work on this one; your rhyme scheme was good, your subject is more than worthy. I think the only thing I'd change is the order of your stanzas; your accompanying artwork is cows, and for a moment there I thought, "Hm. This is odd. Why a poem about dogs if I'm looking at cows?" I hope you win! Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for the wonderful rating and very kind comments. Yes, the voiceless need voices :) Funny, I thought the same thing about the picture, but didn't do anything about it. Now you've convinced me I should have.
Comment from Lisasview
My sentiments exactly....
Very good poem about betray and a good contender for the Betrayal contest.
I wish you the very best of luck..........
Lisa, new to this site.........
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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My sentiments exactly....
Very good poem about betray and a good contender for the Betrayal contest.
I wish you the very best of luck..........
Lisa, new to this site.........
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Lisa. I'm grateful for the kind comments and glad you agree.
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You are most welcome
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You are quite welcome
Comment from Wendy G
Congratulations on a wonderful poem very well expressing our daily betrayal of animals. Very thoughtfully written and creative. It's a winner for me.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Congratulations on a wonderful poem very well expressing our daily betrayal of animals. Very thoughtfully written and creative. It's a winner for me.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Wendy, for the delightful comments and very generous rating.
Comment from Kate McLennan
This is a very emotive and reflective poem, so beautifully written. It is very true and I love that you explored betrayal through the eyes of a beautiful horse. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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This is a very emotive and reflective poem, so beautifully written. It is very true and I love that you explored betrayal through the eyes of a beautiful horse. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the delightful comments, Kate. Much appreciated.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Stark..but deservedly so. What a brilliant, albeit sobering, lesson this is. A calling out of humans on the animals with whom they have relationships. Like any GOOD writing, this is most thought-provoking piece. I bet we'll see it in the winner's circle. Good luck to you!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Stark..but deservedly so. What a brilliant, albeit sobering, lesson this is. A calling out of humans on the animals with whom they have relationships. Like any GOOD writing, this is most thought-provoking piece. I bet we'll see it in the winner's circle. Good luck to you!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I'd be surprised, but thank you anyway for the very lovely comments, and the good luck wishes :)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Excellently said and skilfully conveyed in this flowing verse that obliges the reader after each six line stanza to think about the cruel hypocrisy of our attitude to animals. A very strong and heartfelt concluding stanza that should make anyone feel ashamed. Fits the brief of betrayal originally and well. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Excellently said and skilfully conveyed in this flowing verse that obliges the reader after each six line stanza to think about the cruel hypocrisy of our attitude to animals. A very strong and heartfelt concluding stanza that should make anyone feel ashamed. Fits the brief of betrayal originally and well. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for the kind words and the good wishes, Debbie. They are both very much appreciated.
Comment from Eleri
This is a great poem showing how we have betrayed and continuing to betray the other species on this planet. As a vegan I full agree with the sentiment expressed throughout. The structure and rhyming in the poem is great and I hope you win the contest.
Eleri
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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This is a great poem showing how we have betrayed and continuing to betray the other species on this planet. As a vegan I full agree with the sentiment expressed throughout. The structure and rhyming in the poem is great and I hope you win the contest.
Eleri
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Eleri, for the lovely comments and the good wishes. Thank you too, for your decision to respect all sentient life.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I also love cows and never eat them. I enjoyed your powerful write about the rights of animals and I champion your cause here and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I also love cows and never eat them. I enjoyed your powerful write about the rights of animals and I champion your cause here and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind words and the good luck wishes, Dolly. I'm glad to hear you don't cause harm to those beautiful, sentient creatures.
Comment from JSD
Hard-hitting and hurtful. Fitting cleverly into the theme of the contest. I like the structure and the simple rhyme which is almost childlike to each the innocence of the animals. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Hard-hitting and hurtful. Fitting cleverly into the theme of the contest. I like the structure and the simple rhyme which is almost childlike to each the innocence of the animals. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind words and wishes. Much appreciated.
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That should have said, 'to match the innocence'. Fat fingers!
Comment from Peitho
What a pendulum swing of feel good smile to instant feel sad frown. I appreciate the emotional whip lash!
I love that it is written from a dogs perspective. If humans would listen, perhaps the world would be a better place. I enjoy how you worked in some humor. Which to me, highlighted the ridiculousness of human behavior.
Favorite poem I read today! Thanks for sharing!
PS My dog says hi! Lol
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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What a pendulum swing of feel good smile to instant feel sad frown. I appreciate the emotional whip lash!
I love that it is written from a dogs perspective. If humans would listen, perhaps the world would be a better place. I enjoy how you worked in some humor. Which to me, highlighted the ridiculousness of human behavior.
Favorite poem I read today! Thanks for sharing!
PS My dog says hi! Lol
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thanks for the lovely comments and the generous six stars :) I hope your dog has a great day/evening, and you too!