Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Mother's Child"Book 3 of assorted poems
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
You were a very pretty child and no doubt attractive as an adult :-). I enjoyed reading this rhyming poem entry. It paints a sad picture of a young child feeling neglected or missing love and wanting the embrace of their mother.
On a personal observation - the last two lines did not seem to fit well to conclude the poem using the end words of - close and most. The repeat of blue fingers blue hand may not be the answer.
(close / dose - most / boast / ghost)
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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You were a very pretty child and no doubt attractive as an adult :-). I enjoyed reading this rhyming poem entry. It paints a sad picture of a young child feeling neglected or missing love and wanting the embrace of their mother.
On a personal observation - the last two lines did not seem to fit well to conclude the poem using the end words of - close and most. The repeat of blue fingers blue hand may not be the answer.
(close / dose - most / boast / ghost)
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind compliment and for your suggestion for edit which I used right away. Thank you so much for that too. Because it is gold to me. It is how we learn or how I learn anyway. I thank you and appreciate your review. You're rating your time have a great evening!
Comment from Wendyanne
OMG what a very sad poem! Where is the mother? I'm assuming that mother is out somewhere, maybe at work trying to support her child but she needed to be at home with her daughter. It's a very well written piece of poetry with a tragic end. Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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OMG what a very sad poem! Where is the mother? I'm assuming that mother is out somewhere, maybe at work trying to support her child but she needed to be at home with her daughter. It's a very well written piece of poetry with a tragic end. Good luck!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked this poem. Yes, unfortunately it does have a tragic end. But I think poems like this, it reminds us to keep an eye out for our loved ones. Thank you for your kind review of emperor kind writing and your wonderful comments. I appreciate so much I hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from w.j.debi
Such a sad story for this little girl. Where is her mother? Why is there no one to hear her pleas? It reminds me of "The Little Match Girl". No one cared until it was too late.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Such a sad story for this little girl. Where is her mother? Why is there no one to hear her pleas? It reminds me of "The Little Match Girl". No one cared until it was too late.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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I was the little girl. Very strong memory for me and was almost too late. But I remember. Thank you for stopping by for read. I appreciate it I appreciate them as well. Have a great day!
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I'm so glad they found you before it was too late.
Comment from royowen
I just released a rispetto about this very thing Lea, those poor dear ones. The criminals are getting younger, 11,12, and 13, why? They should be home in bed. This is beautifully written Lea, you've done a great job, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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I just released a rispetto about this very thing Lea, those poor dear ones. The criminals are getting younger, 11,12, and 13, why? They should be home in bed. This is beautifully written Lea, you've done a great job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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Thank you again, Roy, I'm really glad you're pleased with it. Yeah, these kinds of things are going on way too much, right? They should be home in bed.
Thank you, Roy for stopping in and reading. I appreciate your kind comments as always and happy to see your name come up! I hope you enjoy your day!
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Well done
Comment from Enrico Langfordino
WOW Lea, this is most effective in its chilling direction. The poem as a whole is succinct and complete. It draws in the reader instantly and carries them to the dumpster without hesitation. Frightening !
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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WOW Lea, this is most effective in its chilling direction. The poem as a whole is succinct and complete. It draws in the reader instantly and carries them to the dumpster without hesitation. Frightening !
Comment Written 03-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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Again i'm so glad you like this thank you so much for your fine review!
Comment from Lisasview
It seems I have read nearly all your work listed... So I will be going back to your portfolio to find older ones that are not shown on the Fan Story page...
This is another fabulous poem and deserves a 6 Star!!!!!!!
Lisasview............
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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It seems I have read nearly all your work listed... So I will be going back to your portfolio to find older ones that are not shown on the Fan Story page...
This is another fabulous poem and deserves a 6 Star!!!!!!!
Lisasview............
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Again thank you for your wonderful review advisory I am humbled by your expression thanks and have a great night!
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Your deserve it... Lisa
Comment from JSD
Fantastic use of natural, unforced rhyme. Such a moving story and the last stanza rams the message home. Painful to read. Economy of suggestion makes this even more effective. The 'small covered mound' says enough to cause tears. Excellent.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Fantastic use of natural, unforced rhyme. Such a moving story and the last stanza rams the message home. Painful to read. Economy of suggestion makes this even more effective. The 'small covered mound' says enough to cause tears. Excellent.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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That's great i'm awesomely glad you like it! I like the rhyming birth the Rhyming versus and free verse especially!
Thank you again so much rock and roll gonna go read yours now!
Comment from Lobber
hello my friend,
Your face and eyes are hauntingly beautiful, no matter what age, or whether they are remastered or not.
In addition your poem is a cryptic revelation into your past, present snd future - there is no denial. I promise, I will be with you til the end.
Also, you are so brave to share so much and more! Please stop while you are still ahead.
With kind affection,
Lobber aka Jer
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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hello my friend,
Your face and eyes are hauntingly beautiful, no matter what age, or whether they are remastered or not.
In addition your poem is a cryptic revelation into your past, present snd future - there is no denial. I promise, I will be with you til the end.
Also, you are so brave to share so much and more! Please stop while you are still ahead.
With kind affection,
Lobber aka Jer
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Thank you again Jerry very touching and very much appreciated!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is very eerie, very scary to think of a young girl, out in the dark searching for her mother. Your descriptions really put me out there with this small frightened girl, curled up, cold. Great rhyming poem Lea,
good luck in the contest.
Cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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This is very eerie, very scary to think of a young girl, out in the dark searching for her mother. Your descriptions really put me out there with this small frightened girl, curled up, cold. Great rhyming poem Lea,
good luck in the contest.
Cheers,
valda
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Valda thank you again i'm truly honored!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like you were hiding outside in the cold here Lea and it sounds like a terrifying experience for you as a young child, a poignant poem, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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It sounds like you were hiding outside in the cold here Lea and it sounds like a terrifying experience for you as a young child, a poignant poem, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Thank you dolly thank you for your insight and for your keen understanding. I thank you for your reviews for your time as always. Appreciate you! Have a great evening!
