Random Rhyme and Petty Prose
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Comment from lyenochka
Um. But do we really know that the guy who "ate the gun" was the one who did the first shot? Maybe it could have been a double suicide? Or maybe it was a very bad game of Russian roulette.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Um. But do we really know that the guy who "ate the gun" was the one who did the first shot? Maybe it could have been a double suicide? Or maybe it was a very bad game of Russian roulette.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Gun to head suicides hardly ever involve barrels on foreheads. I am proceeding on the idea that the first victim was shot point blank, while the second was shot to make it lot like a M/S, but it took two shots to kill him.
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Ah. Okay, you know too much about this stuff, Bill!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The vocabulary used in this short, short story was satisfyingly sophisticated. Except for 'would providing'. I struggled with that. Did you intend to use 'wound providing'? As for the story, I liked very much the inference that advancement in the ranks is associated with denseness of the spirit. kay
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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The vocabulary used in this short, short story was satisfyingly sophisticated. Except for 'would providing'. I struggled with that. Did you intend to use 'wound providing'? As for the story, I liked very much the inference that advancement in the ranks is associated with denseness of the spirit. kay
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Exit wound has been corrected. Thank you, Katherine
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, I like that, the twice fired gun, unless of course he actually missed the first, but what if,,,? I can see it's not an entry in anything, but it would have been a good entry, well done Bill, blessings Roy
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Heh heh, I like that, the twice fired gun, unless of course he actually missed the first, but what if,,,? I can see it's not an entry in anything, but it would have been a good entry, well done Bill, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Roy
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Welcome Bill
Comment from Dick Waters
Details, details. Oops, he didn't mean to do that. Just kidding.
Gave me a chuckle.
Thanks for posting, Bill.
Sorry for not commenting on other posts, but you're not alone.
Dick
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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Details, details. Oops, he didn't mean to do that. Just kidding.
Gave me a chuckle.
Thanks for posting, Bill.
Sorry for not commenting on other posts, but you're not alone.
Dick
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thanks, Dick, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Nicki Nance
I see exit would. Did you mean exit wound? That aside, I think this is great. You put the reader right in the scene, and tell a great story in a few words. Thank you for the great read.
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I see exit would. Did you mean exit wound? That aside, I think this is great. You put the reader right in the scene, and tell a great story in a few words. Thank you for the great read.
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Exit wound has been 'inflicted'. Thanks, Nicki
