Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

This was a new form to me, a monchielle. I liked reading it with the technique of that repeating first line. It made it sound more thematically organized that way. The only suggestion I had was to change 'cicada orchestra sing' to 'cicada orchestra sings.' Nice share.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Excellent

Your Monchielle is absolutely soothing and beautiful. I enjoy the simple pleasures and routines of life both in nature and ourselves. Like how you went from birds to flowers to cicadas to us humans. Great repeating line and theme!
Gale

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023

Thank you so much. I'm glad you found it soothing.

Comment from Monica Chaddick

Excellent

I think that this is a very well written piece. I really enjoyed reading it. I liked the picture that you selected, as well. Best of luck to you in this contest and all others.

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

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reply by the author on 31-May-2023

Thank you.

Comment from Lady MJ

Excellent

Very well written. The subject matter and poetic style dance together like Lily pads in a Lily Pond. The pictures fit nicely with the imagery given with the repetitive words that are used (sunup, sundown).

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 31-May-2023

Thank you.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

A lovely Monchielle poem Yvonne and a good choice for your repeat line that gave the scope for it to blend easily with no force. A lovely presentation, Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 31-May-2023

Thank you, Valda. Always good to hear from you.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Well done, I guess. I am glad you ook to the challenge rather than I because ... I would have the first line of the four stanza repeat themselves at the end of each stanza ... and felt d u m b for it, I suspect.
In other words I think you did it!

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 31-May-2023

Thank you. I'm sure you can do it, too.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Well, as you know, I don't know the first things about poetry and it's forms and rules. But It's always a pleasure to read your enlightening verses. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 30-May-2023

Thank you for the lovely comment.

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

Good choices of picture..,I like them.

This is a well written poem showing life activities between sunrise and sunset, especially " how we spend our time
makes every day the best.."

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 30-May-2023

Thank you for reviewing. Much appreciated.

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Hello Yvonne,
I know you like the birds. I guess you like animals in general. Do you plant any sunflowers for the birds to eat. My uncle used to grow huge ones back in Ohio, for the sole purpose of feeding the birds. Great poem gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 30-May-2023

I haven't planted any this year. I've not done any new gardening this time around, and I miss the sunflowers. I buy bird feed.

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is a nicely written poem. It has a great overall presentation background and font. Beautiful breathtaking photos to compliment your words. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 29-May-2023

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reply by the author on 30-May-2023

Thank you.