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French Kiss

4 total reviews 
Comment from rhonnie69
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

"My dearest master poet your smooch is my bliss.
Whilst I have nothing against a French kiss like this.
I much more prefer an Italian kiss from an Italian miss."

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2023

reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
    Thank you for reading my wee poem ..it did get one vote in the booth ..so thanks if that vote was yours.

    A second thank you for the six star review....glad my word spiked your ............ interest (biggrin)
Comment from Andrea Kepple
Excellent
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You have used an intriguing word choice to communicate this poem. I feel challenged by your poem into to thinking differently about this subject. Good job.

 Comment Written 27-May-2023

reply by the author on 27-May-2023
    Not sure if you are referring to the shorter format or the French Kiss when you wrote :subject.

    Either way I?m glad my wee poem made an impact on you.

    It only has one vote so far but your comment made my day much brighter.

    PS: personally I love short formats , the challenge is very stimulating.

    Thank you and

    keep safe!



Comment from Sally Law
Excellent
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Wow! Burning down the FanStory house with this hot number, mystery poet. Beautifully written and illustrated in abstract.

Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming vote.
Sally :))

 Comment Written 27-May-2023

reply by the author on 27-May-2023
    Thank you for the enthusiastic review , glad my wee poem made such a strong impact on you.

    I love the shorter formats , love the challenge, I do try to offer something unusual, different , surprising

    Keep safe !

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Oh yes, very passionate, your words skilfully fitting the visual with their excellent imagery. Didn't quite understand the apostrophe after miss which distracted me momentarily from the verse. A strong contender! Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 27-May-2023

reply by the author on 27-May-2023
    I thought in English the s was not placed when there is already an S

    My miss's mouth

    My miss' mouth

    So can you help me please, which is grammatically right in English?

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 27-May-2023
    I'm not sure what you mean by 'miss' - do you mean 'missus' (your wife) now? You're right you can't put another 's' on it and anyway it wouldn't fit with the verse. It might be blindingly obvious here but shouldn't it say 'kiss'? I think that's how I misread it in the beginning.
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
    Miss as lover , girlfriend

    My miss? mouth
    My lover?s mouth
    My girlfriend?s mouth


    In the beginning I had


    French (title)

    Kiss
    A cosmic abyss
    Bliss


    But the second line is only 5 syllables and I could not think of an word / adjective to add

    Vast or huge would just be a repeat seeing I already have have cosmic and abyss

    So I should just leave it as

    My ( tithe)

    Miss?
    Mouth : a cosmic abyss
    Bliss

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 27-May-2023
    I see. I didn't connect 'My' with 'Miss' Back to where you were with an apostrophe. It's your verse and I don't want to interfere. I think you have a great image there with equally strong imagery. I wish you luck!
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
    It s not what I want but what is grammatically correct in English

    I have bothered you enough.

    Thank you , I appreciate your input.

    Keep safe ! 🍀