Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This story was hilarious! I like the note he wrote for the bank - that was quite an ending! Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 27-May-2023

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reply by the author on 27-May-2023

Thanks, Jessizero

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

A fun entry into the 80-word flash fiction contest. Very entertaining, here a man seems to live very quietly and orderly. Then the kicker at the end. He note to rob the bank.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thanks, Mary

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

This is a humorous eighty word flash fiction contest entry. It starts with the mystery of what Amos had to write. The story develops with the memory of the lawn service and the postal carrier. Finally...the unexpected twist. Amos plans to rob a bank. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thanks, LJ

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Heh heh, boy from a letter to the gardener, our forgetful, and possibly a dementia sufferer, decides to write a short to the bank, saying, STAY CALM! THISCISCA ROBBERY, good advice, if it's possible to stay calm, excellent post Bill, blessings and good luck, Roy

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thank you, Roy

reply by royowen on 27-May-2023

Most welcome

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

AS timely message and warning about losing focus. Though you meant no harm, "Someone is going to get a big hurt!" In the words of comic Russel Peters. It pays to pay attention. I'm talking to you Bill Schott!

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Okay, okay. Amos was me. I did remember to go to the bank, but when I sent the note through the pneumatic tube all they did was laugh.

reply by nomi338 on 26-May-2023

This is a case where being a laughing stock did not hurt.

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello Bill :)
Amos is such a busy bloke writing complaint letters, that he almost forgot the most important note and that he had a bank to rob! Love it!
I enjoyed reading your flash fiction post. It's well written, engaging and humorous. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thank you, Debra

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I wish Amos good luck with that robbery. He is going to need it with a memory like he has. He is likely to forget to take the cash and flee. Maybe once he gets to jail there will be poeple to tell him what to do next. LOL

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

He may forget about the bank altogether.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I'm assuming Amos has an issue with his memory, as you reference at the beginning of the story. Hopefully, he forgets the way to the bank and doesn't get himself arrested!

Clever story - the judges like twists at the end:-) Good luck.

Pam

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thanks, Pam.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

You pack a lot of narrative into this shortie, Bill, while giving us an interesting portrait of Amos. He seems to be a senior citizen who can be persnickety about his lawn and mail, yet a bit forgetful. I'd love to see you extend this story and tell us what happens when he delivers that note to the bank cashier.
Rod

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

I will do that, Rod. Thanks.

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

This is an entertaining flash fiction. This seemingly reasonable man, who sends out polite messages to bring order to his life, goes off the rails with a note to rob the bank. I wonder how often this happens as I suppose it does. Good flash. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thank you, Ginda.