A Twist of Prayer
Missionary puts himself in grave danger10 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Edge-of-your-seat story done very concisely. Great moral to the story. Good luck in the contest!
Very tiniest of punctuation suggestions:
As it lifted and circled, they could see the natives surrounding Danny who was on his knees praying.
Just put a comma after Danny.
As the natives saw the strange loud bird in the sky, they too fell to their knees, begging for mercy.
Just set apart 'too' with commas like this, and add a comma after strange:
As the natives saw the strange, loud bird in the sky, they, too, fell to their knees, begging for mercy.
One of these days I have to go find a comma book to explain why I suggest things the way I remember from A.P. English in high school, ha ha.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Edge-of-your-seat story done very concisely. Great moral to the story. Good luck in the contest!
Very tiniest of punctuation suggestions:
As it lifted and circled, they could see the natives surrounding Danny who was on his knees praying.
Just put a comma after Danny.
As the natives saw the strange loud bird in the sky, they too fell to their knees, begging for mercy.
Just set apart 'too' with commas like this, and add a comma after strange:
As the natives saw the strange, loud bird in the sky, they, too, fell to their knees, begging for mercy.
One of these days I have to go find a comma book to explain why I suggest things the way I remember from A.P. English in high school, ha ha.
Comment Written 30-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thanks for this Christie. Appreciate you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Being rescued frost he sky sounds like a relief here as these guys are stranded in a war-like situation. A poignant post for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Being rescued frost he sky sounds like a relief here as these guys are stranded in a war-like situation. A poignant post for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thanks so much!
Comment from lancellot
Ha! That's a good one. Kind of reminds me of the 2nd New Star Trek movie. Where the primitive natives of planet were chasing Kirk and Bones, then Enterprise flew overhead, and they started praying to it. Here, in a way, God saved the missionary. He works in strange ways.
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Ha! That's a good one. Kind of reminds me of the 2nd New Star Trek movie. Where the primitive natives of planet were chasing Kirk and Bones, then Enterprise flew overhead, and they started praying to it. Here, in a way, God saved the missionary. He works in strange ways.
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Appreciate how you put that...And didn't know there was a Star Trek movie with that plotting. I am a Shatner fan though...
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a wonderful story. I wish I had a six to give you. This is a touching 80 word flash fiction that shows what God can do through prayer. Thank you for sharing it. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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What a wonderful story. I wish I had a six to give you. This is a touching 80 word flash fiction that shows what God can do through prayer. Thank you for sharing it. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!!
Comment from lyenochka
Great story told in so few words! You got right to the climactic point of the story and the willingness to be sacrificed for the gospel was rewarded by the change of heart of the natives when they saw the plane. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Great story told in so few words! You got right to the climactic point of the story and the willingness to be sacrificed for the gospel was rewarded by the change of heart of the natives when they saw the plane. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What a great story you have crafted for the 80 word flash fiction. Action packed excitement. Will the missionary be martyred? We certainly didn't expect him to be saved by the big bird in the sky. Super ending.
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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What a great story you have crafted for the 80 word flash fiction. Action packed excitement. Will the missionary be martyred? We certainly didn't expect him to be saved by the big bird in the sky. Super ending.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting Flash for the contest I wish for you the very best in the contest. Many of prayer has been answered through the years and I don't think it's a twist of fate. I think it's something that really is important to God and he answers those prayers in the most difficult situation. Treasure
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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This is a very interesting Flash for the contest I wish for you the very best in the contest. Many of prayer has been answered through the years and I don't think it's a twist of fate. I think it's something that really is important to God and he answers those prayers in the most difficult situation. Treasure
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from BethShelby
This was a great little 80 word flash. With a willing to give his life for the gospel, Danny volunteer to be left behind. His life hung in the balance but his prayers were answered when they natives saw something they'd never seen before and in fear joined Danny in begging Gof for mercy.
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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This was a great little 80 word flash. With a willing to give his life for the gospel, Danny volunteer to be left behind. His life hung in the balance but his prayers were answered when they natives saw something they'd never seen before and in fear joined Danny in begging Gof for mercy.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thanks Beth! I'm hoping people appreciate how sometimes God takes unusual ways to message others.
Comment from Ben Colder
I can hear it now. "Shoo Gunna, don't step in it." That big bird did the trick. Amazing how people can be outsmarted by God. LOL. Good one, Bro. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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I can hear it now. "Shoo Gunna, don't step in it." That big bird did the trick. Amazing how people can be outsmarted by God. LOL. Good one, Bro. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thanks brother!
Comment from royowen
At last a story laced with hip, all my readings today have been less than hopeful, well, a couple anyway, I like this, what a testimony to share with fellow believers, well done Stan, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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At last a story laced with hip, all my readings today have been less than hopeful, well, a couple anyway, I like this, what a testimony to share with fellow believers, well done Stan, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thanks!
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