Underpass
Sometimes it just ends7 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word story, Underpass, has the proper word count and takes a moment to witness a death in the gutter of the person forgotten and thrown away. Sad.
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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This fifty-word story, Underpass, has the proper word count and takes a moment to witness a death in the gutter of the person forgotten and thrown away. Sad.
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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It is very sad. Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from lancellot
This is interesting. The concept of a presumably homeless person will be very emotionally appealing to the members. You painted a moving scene. I'm not sure if this has a resolution. But this was a smart contest idea.
Good luck to you.
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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This is interesting. The concept of a presumably homeless person will be very emotionally appealing to the members. You painted a moving scene. I'm not sure if this has a resolution. But this was a smart contest idea.
Good luck to you.
Comment Written 25-May-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The flash fiction story grabbed my interest and the dialogue is believable. It's a good entry for the 50 Word Flash writing prompt contest. It's kind of creepy.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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The flash fiction story grabbed my interest and the dialogue is believable. It's a good entry for the 50 Word Flash writing prompt contest. It's kind of creepy.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 25-May-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Sugarray77
You have done a good job in developing a vivid and interesting piece for this 50 Word Flash. Hard to do with such constraints. Well done and I wish you good luck in the contest!
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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You have done a good job in developing a vivid and interesting piece for this 50 Word Flash. Hard to do with such constraints. Well done and I wish you good luck in the contest!
Melissa
Comment Written 25-May-2023
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Thank you
Comment from LJbutterfly
Interesting commentary, but what happened? The story is titled "Underpass." Did May run out into traffic on the "overpass?" Was May in a car crash? May had regrets. Had she made an unfortunate decision that brought her to this point? Was the dirty tarp already in May's car, or did she find it on the wet ground? There are many possibilities. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Interesting commentary, but what happened? The story is titled "Underpass." Did May run out into traffic on the "overpass?" Was May in a car crash? May had regrets. Had she made an unfortunate decision that brought her to this point? Was the dirty tarp already in May's car, or did she find it on the wet ground? There are many possibilities. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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I love that you have so many questions.
Comment from royowen
Poor May, she's trying to make her last hours as comfortable as possible, I think we would all suffer regret if our impending demise was earlier than we anticipated, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Poor May, she's trying to make her last hours as comfortable as possible, I think we would all suffer regret if our impending demise was earlier than we anticipated, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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Thank you.
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Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your poem. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like it. Interesting. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-May-2023
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I have enjoyed reading your poem. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like it. Interesting. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-May-2023
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Thank you
