The Forest
It was peaceful.14 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
I liked this immersive description of experiencing a forest. You engaged the senses, and ended with a positive note. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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I liked this immersive description of experiencing a forest. You engaged the senses, and ended with a positive note. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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You're welcome. Three-way tie for fourth place.
Comment from Paul McFarland
I just found this, Darla. It must have been one of your older ones. This is very good - one of your better ones. I hope you have had this experience in real life.
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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I just found this, Darla. It must have been one of your older ones. This is very good - one of your better ones. I hope you have had this experience in real life.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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No I have not, fourth place.
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Congratulations on your fourth place finish. This must be one of your best results.
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Second and third is.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
This is a theme dear to me . I love to be cradled in mother nature's loving arms.
Your pic looks just like my pine forest.
No wonder my favourite hue is green.
The forest is a feast for our senses.
Leaves and twigs that crunch
The scent of damp wood and soil
That peculiar scent when rain falls on dry soil. (Petrichor)
Pic of my valley and church.
https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=1055941
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Ciao !
This is a theme dear to me . I love to be cradled in mother nature's loving arms.
Your pic looks just like my pine forest.
No wonder my favourite hue is green.
The forest is a feast for our senses.
Leaves and twigs that crunch
The scent of damp wood and soil
That peculiar scent when rain falls on dry soil. (Petrichor)
Pic of my valley and church.
https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=1055941
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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It got fourth place.
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Please read my 353 poem.
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What has that got to do with the six star review I gave your poem?
It was not a consolation prize.
Beside your poem there was another one I loved.
So, you got the 6 star review and the other got my vote.
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Ok.
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You usually tell me who you voted for.
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word story, The Forest, has the proper word count and gives the readers a quick description of what we would see in a scene such as this. Nice.
One note: In the second sentence you use "tree" and then "trees". I suggest changing one of those to another tree-related word. "...heard the wind whistle through the branches."
Happy day.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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This fifty-word story, The Forest, has the proper word count and gives the readers a quick description of what we would see in a scene such as this. Nice.
One note: In the second sentence you use "tree" and then "trees". I suggest changing one of those to another tree-related word. "...heard the wind whistle through the branches."
Happy day.
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Oh - It would be nice to be able to conjure such a dream up every night. I suppose one could try in meditation. This is a descriptive entry of a peaceful forest walk for the 50 words flash contest. Thank you for sharing this soothing read. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Oh - It would be nice to be able to conjure such a dream up every night. I suppose one could try in meditation. This is a descriptive entry of a peaceful forest walk for the 50 words flash contest. Thank you for sharing this soothing read. Best of luck.
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thanks!
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Thanks, please take time to v----
Comment from Wendy G
A very descriptive piece of writing for the flash fiction contest. You have engaged all the senses in your piece. Best wishes for your entry in the contest. Wendy
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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A very descriptive piece of writing for the flash fiction contest. You have engaged all the senses in your piece. Best wishes for your entry in the contest. Wendy
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!
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Three senses
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Precisely.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, You do a great job a painting a beautiful and tranquil scene. Now, I suppose one could say this is a true story of nature, and the scene itself tells a story.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Hmm, You do a great job a painting a beautiful and tranquil scene. Now, I suppose one could say this is a true story of nature, and the scene itself tells a story.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from LisaMay
All the sensory descriptions of enjoying your peaceful encounter in a dream are appealing. I hope you are also able to enjoy waking moments in a real forest and experience all those lovely sensations. At first I thought the writer must be blind, as 'felt', 'smelled', and 'heard' are the verbs used, with no mention of 'seeing'.... and now I perhaps am confused because it didn't say you 'saw' the rainbow, only that it was there. How did you know? It's a wonder you could tell there was a rainbow with all those trees in the way!
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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All the sensory descriptions of enjoying your peaceful encounter in a dream are appealing. I hope you are also able to enjoy waking moments in a real forest and experience all those lovely sensations. At first I thought the writer must be blind, as 'felt', 'smelled', and 'heard' are the verbs used, with no mention of 'seeing'.... and now I perhaps am confused because it didn't say you 'saw' the rainbow, only that it was there. How did you know? It's a wonder you could tell there was a rainbow with all those trees in the way!
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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This isn't my dream, but it is my story. I saw the rainbow.
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I have never been to a forest.
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You need to get out more.
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? I live in an apartment complex. I don't live near a forest.
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I am sorry for your small world, one of the drawbacks of our modern lives with people jammed in together and removed from nature. May your imagination always be able to take you to magical places.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Great poetic style for a prose fiction!! Your narration forces the reader to use all their senses and thus allowing us to be part of that beautiful dream.
Very well done!!
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Great poetic style for a prose fiction!! Your narration forces the reader to use all their senses and thus allowing us to be part of that beautiful dream.
Very well done!!
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks! It is worth six stars!
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All but two of their senses (taste and touch). I think my poem is the best of the bunch. Did you read them all and v----?
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Yeah, I always read every entry before voting. You are right in the top 2 now!!!
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Yes!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The flash fiction story grabbed my interest and the dialogue is believable. It's a good entry for the 50 Word Flash writing prompt contest. It's rich in nature imagery.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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The flash fiction story grabbed my interest and the dialogue is believable. It's a good entry for the 50 Word Flash writing prompt contest. It's rich in nature imagery.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks!
