Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Debra,
These few words tell of a woman rediscovering herself after getting lost in all her new titles and duties as wife and mother. This seems to happen a lot.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing third in the contest,
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you, Joan, for your kind feedback and message of congratulations :)
Best wishes, Debra

reply by dragonpoet on 05-Jul-2023

You're welcome on both accounts, Debra.
Joan

Comment from pome lover

Exceptional

Well, Miss Debra,
That is very thought provoking. It sounds a bit to me, like a "smothered mother" who might need a vacation with friends.
I don't mean to be presumptive - which I guess I am being, but it was my reaction after reading your really well done poem.
Whether is is or not what you meant, I do think sometimes moms need to take a break with friends (not fam) and though you'd most probably still worry about things at home, a fun, laughing time-out might be a needed reprieve.
If I'm out of line, I apologize. I have gotten to the age where I sometimes says things I shouldn't. I'm just thinking of you.
I do think your poem is excellent, whatever the reason. And I wish you the best in the contest, and in finding your cute self.
Katharine

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you, Katharine, for your kind feedback and generous feedback!
I appreciate your thoughts. You're very perceptive - no need for apologies whatsoever x
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

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 Comment Written 19-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2023

Thank you so much, Tom :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

We are right where we left her selves. Enjoyed your pool very much I wish you the very best in the contest. Have a blessed evening and a God continue to use you in your writing. Patricia

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thank you for your kind feedback, Patricia :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Debra,
Very nice! And don't worry. You might feel buried, neglected, lost. But you aren't. I see you. And I know your family sees you, too. Sometimes we feel used, taken for granted perhaps. But you are a good mother, wife, pet owner, teacher, poet, and loved by God and all your family and friends.
My favorite words in your 20-syllable poem,
" 'neath layers of
motherhood and matrimony"

Take time to breathe. Take time for you!
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thank you so much, Kimbob, for your kind words of encouragement and care. I appreciate you x

Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Debra,

Great imagery to go with your biography. As a big fan of alliteration, your second line really fits my preference.

I will suggest a small edit: "right where I want to be."

Mark

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 25-May-2023

Thank you for your kind feedback, Mark :)
Best wishes, Dera

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and presentation, Debra.
-You have used your 20 syllables well with a good topic.
-A good opening line and effective imagery and
alliteration in the second line that shows
the roles you have fulfilled.
-I like your closing line very much because
it shows you are happy with who you are.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 25-May-2023

Hello Pam :)
Thank you so much for your great feedback.
I always appreciated your thorough and thoughtful breakdown.
Best wishes as always, Debra x

reply by Pam (respa) on 25-May-2023

You are very welcome, Debra.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

And I'm sure you are the best mother and wife your family could wish for, Debra. I love this little poem, especially that last line, right where you left yourself, that is a true statement of all you are, my friend. Very well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 25-May-2023

Aw, thank you, Sandra :) I do my best!
Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Hope you are continuing to recover xx

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I know what you mean. You're so busy being wife and mother and looking after the needs and interests of others that it's hard to remember your own identity. But you are still you - and all these years of giving develops your special uniqueness even more. Beautifully said!

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 25-May-2023

Thank you so much, Helen :)
I've reached a point where I need to try and find me again, as much as I love Shaun and the kids!
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Debra,

Excellent entry for the 20 Syllable Poem contest. I love the words imagery and beautiful presentation. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 24-May-2023

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reply by the author on 25-May-2023

Thank you so much, Gypsy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra