Plastic
A student's perspective of his fake teacher.9 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Congratulations! This is an excellent milestone post! Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Congratulations! This is an excellent milestone post! Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very well done. This seems way worse than getting caught passing love notes in class. Ha!
This was very interesting, Elizabeth. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Very well done. This seems way worse than getting caught passing love notes in class. Ha!
This was very interesting, Elizabeth. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol this is a very funny story you have written about a teacher who appears false like a Barbie doll. I'm assuming this story is the essay she snatches from your grasp. Very amusing!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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Lol this is a very funny story you have written about a teacher who appears false like a Barbie doll. I'm assuming this story is the essay she snatches from your grasp. Very amusing!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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I wasn't the student in the story, but it would be cool if the teacher snatched this essay! I taught for 26 years and the teacher in my story was actually based on an assistant principal at my school. She always wore ridiculous high heels. One time she was observing me in my special education classroom. I had a student who somehow managed to get herself stuck in the garbage can! The observation ended with the high-heeled AP pulling on one end of the garbage and me pulling on the student. I can still see her wobbling on her high heels as she pulled. My observation ended and I got all high marks across the board. Her comment to me was: "If you can handle this class, you can handle anything!"
Comment from AudreyRose
Great detail work!! Your metaphors and similes allowed such a picture to be painted, I can see it all perfectly. The emotions came through clear as a bell too. I feel that there could be a pair piece with this, maybe the teachers point of view on the children.
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Great detail work!! Your metaphors and similes allowed such a picture to be painted, I can see it all perfectly. The emotions came through clear as a bell too. I feel that there could be a pair piece with this, maybe the teachers point of view on the children.
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Funny, I had someone else want me to tell "more of the story". Maybe I should :-) Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have drawn us into your classroom where each student awaits execution. Your description of Miss Collins makes us want to hate and fear her as well. This is great writing. Will you continue this story? I'm hooked.
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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You have drawn us into your classroom where each student awaits execution. Your description of Miss Collins makes us want to hate and fear her as well. This is great writing. Will you continue this story? I'm hooked.
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Thank you for the exceptional review. I should continue the story :-)
Maybe I will!
Comment from Elena Deas
I love how I can imagine this scene through your writing. I feel we've all experienced someone providing "constructive criticism", yet you can see it's a way to feed their insecurity. It reminds me how important it is to keep moving forward with your gift. All those critics is just showing how intimidated they are by your excellence. Much love and blessings!!
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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I love how I can imagine this scene through your writing. I feel we've all experienced someone providing "constructive criticism", yet you can see it's a way to feed their insecurity. It reminds me how important it is to keep moving forward with your gift. All those critics is just showing how intimidated they are by your excellence. Much love and blessings!!
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you so much for the exceptional review. I once had a college professor who told me I was one of the worst writers she ever had in class! This isn't about her, though. She reminded me more of a witch and not a Barbie doll!
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Omg! I'm so sorry for what you went through. A teacher telling a young student that just shows how intimidated that teacher felt. She saw a writer in you, a young person, all this talent. Unfortunately, the teacher reacted through fear and bullied a young artists for his/her insecurity. You write amazingly and hope I can read more words from you. Much love and blessings
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Thank you, Elana. That's so sweet of you to reply! It was that teacher that made me the writing I am today. Without her criticism, I wouldn't have been so determined to prove her wrong!
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Thank you for your time on replying as well Elizabeth! In my opinion, just what I've read by you elevated my mind. I think you already proved her wrong just by her reading your work. Her criticism, already identifies the insecurity she held so near. Keep on writing, your words light a fire of hope for us all inside. Much love and blessings!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You can't hide from some teachers as they notice everything and this teacher sounds like quite a challenge here! Love you rich descriptions of this scary teacher! You might not get top marks for this post when she read it though, ha ha. ha, a fun post Elizabeth, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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You can't hide from some teachers as they notice everything and this teacher sounds like quite a challenge here! Love you rich descriptions of this scary teacher! You might not get top marks for this post when she read it though, ha ha. ha, a fun post Elizabeth, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you, Dolly. I wrote this with my class as a creative writing lesson. It actually describes one of the teachers in our school. Hopefully, it wasn't about me! I never wore high heels, though :-)
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This was a descriptive post that reminded me strongly of the character of Dolores Umbridge in the Harry Potter literature, except for the very high stilt heels and the Barbie doll looks. In that sense, it reminds me of Rita Skeeter, the lipsticked, curly-coiffed reporter.
Here are some fantastic details:
Her skin is tanned, and turkey basted to a perfect roasted brown.
(I think you can take out the comma after tanned.)
Her lips bleed rose-red to match her perfectly shaped fingernails giving the impression they've been stained by the raw red meat she just tore apart.
(I would suggest putting a comma after fingernails.)
It sounds like this student narrator is doomed!
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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This was a descriptive post that reminded me strongly of the character of Dolores Umbridge in the Harry Potter literature, except for the very high stilt heels and the Barbie doll looks. In that sense, it reminds me of Rita Skeeter, the lipsticked, curly-coiffed reporter.
Here are some fantastic details:
Her skin is tanned, and turkey basted to a perfect roasted brown.
(I think you can take out the comma after tanned.)
Her lips bleed rose-red to match her perfectly shaped fingernails giving the impression they've been stained by the raw red meat she just tore apart.
(I would suggest putting a comma after fingernails.)
It sounds like this student narrator is doomed!
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Once again, your suggestions are right on the money! I will make those changes. Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a wonderfully expressed piece of writing with every sentence oozing life into this unpleasant-sounding teacher! No wasted words, just perfectly and assiduously crafted prose conveying this evocative scene. Excellent! Thanks for sharing, Elizabeth. Debbie
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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What a wonderfully expressed piece of writing with every sentence oozing life into this unpleasant-sounding teacher! No wasted words, just perfectly and assiduously crafted prose conveying this evocative scene. Excellent! Thanks for sharing, Elizabeth. Debbie
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thank you, Debbie. I truly appreciate your review.
