Blue Haiku
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Comment from Mario PIERRE
Good haiku conforms to the haiku format requirement. I suggest you try using stronger words to express the characteristics of nature or other because in 17 syllables we need to make an impact. Also, I suppose you made a slight typo there ( began instead of begin...?)
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reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Good haiku conforms to the haiku format requirement. I suggest you try using stronger words to express the characteristics of nature or other because in 17 syllables we need to make an impact. Also, I suppose you made a slight typo there ( began instead of begin...?)
Thanks
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you for the review and the "stronger words" comment
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Welcome to the Fanstory community of writers. We are glad you have joined us. Congratulations on this your first post. I like that you have titled your poem Blue Haiku, to matching the color of the waves as they begin to roll. I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Welcome to the Fanstory community of writers. We are glad you have joined us. Congratulations on this your first post. I like that you have titled your poem Blue Haiku, to matching the color of the waves as they begin to roll. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Blue Haiku, has the proper formatting and does seem like a cool haiku per se, but perhaps not entirely aligned with the faith theme. ....................................................
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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This 5-7-5, Blue Haiku, has the proper formatting and does seem like a cool haiku per se, but perhaps not entirely aligned with the faith theme. ....................................................
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thank you for your words
