Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh-oh. But which one? Ralph sounds like he had more experience with the killing. Now what is he going to do with the bodies? Lots of suspense in your 100 word flash!
Congrats on your 2nd place finish!!

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023

Thanks, Helen

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

This is a good entry for the 100 word flash. It has suspense and drama wrapped up in only a short space. The introduction of backdrop to Connor / Ralph works well and the dramatic twist at the end leaves the reader guessing - who survived?! A great short read.

 Comment Written 25-May-2023

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reply by the author on 26-May-2023

Thank you, DD

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A very dramatic and unexpected ending, and I suppose that is a reflection of real life. You wrote well and clearly, and the image was well chosen. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 24-May-2023

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reply by the author on 24-May-2023

Thanks, Wendy

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

It leaves me wanting more, but it is complete in itself. This was a great story with a great (non) ending. Thank you so much for sharing your story, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thank you, Jessizero

Comment from royowen

Excellent

The thought that came to my mind straight away was that justice catches up with one or the other, I think one way or another, we will all make account for the wrong done on this earth, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thank you, Roy

reply by royowen on 23-May-2023

Most welcome

Comment from Doc Fin

Excellent

Nice! You did a great job making the story line clear and easy to follow, and managed to do it in 100 words. I like the bit of ambiguity at the end, too.

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thanks, Doc

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Which one succeded? I guess this is a mystery thriller. Why did the neighbor ask for Richard? Why did the neighbor want to kill him? It's confusing.

Good entry for the 100 Word Flash writing prompt contest. Good flash fiction form and word count. Nice presentation.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thank you, Gypsy. I hoped that the few hints placed Richard as a victim of the government protected nut Ralph, who may soon be a victim of the mob hitman Max.

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 23-May-2023

I would add that information to your author notes, I didn't get any of that from the story. I know it's hard to fit everything in short form.

Comment from Mario PIERRE

Excellent

very good flash. I like short stories when the ending asks for the reader's own imagination to kick in or deduce his own interpretation. Great job!
Good luck with the contest!!

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thank you, Mario

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh my goodness, you managed to tell a murder story in 100 words here and I wish you luck with the contest, a chilling write, perhaps they are both dead? Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thank you, Dolly

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

A great 100 word story Bill and your finish gave me a chuckle. Possibly the witness was not as protected as he thought he was. Great little read, and good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 23-May-2023

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reply by the author on 23-May-2023

Thanks, Valda, for the kind and encouraging review. Bill