Storm of Anger
A dangerous emotion.12 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is excruciatingly well-done. Striking words and images unleashed throughout made for stark realizations. Especially brilliant was the stormy metaphor and the play on words at the end about his "rain" being over.
Classic LisaMay writing talent.
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This is excruciatingly well-done. Striking words and images unleashed throughout made for stark realizations. Especially brilliant was the stormy metaphor and the play on words at the end about his "rain" being over.
Classic LisaMay writing talent.
Comment Written 23-May-2023
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad "his rain/reign is over." She chose mental and emotional health and safety and that's a wonderful thing. So few take that step and suffer being abused and internalizing those storms.
Best wishes in the contest!
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I'm glad "his rain/reign is over." She chose mental and emotional health and safety and that's a wonderful thing. So few take that step and suffer being abused and internalizing those storms.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Storm of Anger, bring the various metaphors of spousal abuse to create a "climate" of 'had it up to here' which makes moving to better weather the next thing to do.
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This poem, Storm of Anger, bring the various metaphors of spousal abuse to create a "climate" of 'had it up to here' which makes moving to better weather the next thing to do.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A stunning entry. Words can do as much damage as physical blows. A Great play on words between "rain" and the "reign"
With this contest entry, I hope you keep rolling along and win with this poem.
Best wishes,
Mary
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A stunning entry. Words can do as much damage as physical blows. A Great play on words between "rain" and the "reign"
With this contest entry, I hope you keep rolling along and win with this poem.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Wow. This is a very well written poem, detailing what the storm of words feels like. How they wound. But you show us wisdom and strength in your knowing that there is a safe haven from the storm and you are going to seek it. Praise worthy in every way.
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Wow. This is a very well written poem, detailing what the storm of words feels like. How they wound. But you show us wisdom and strength in your knowing that there is a safe haven from the storm and you are going to seek it. Praise worthy in every way.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from royowen
What a great piece of wording. "His rain is over" yep, if we keep being offended goby deliberately adverse words. God will keep offending us until we stop being offended, there have been some marvellous examples to guide us, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
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What a great piece of wording. "His rain is over" yep, if we keep being offended goby deliberately adverse words. God will keep offending us until we stop being offended, there have been some marvellous examples to guide us, beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from patcelaw
This is a wonderful poem about domestic abuse. My own mother went through domestic abuse for many years. The thing that finally brought her to her senses was when my dad almost beat my youngest brother to death. She finally had the nerve to get up and cause him to have to go out because she was leaving him. Patricia.
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This is a wonderful poem about domestic abuse. My own mother went through domestic abuse for many years. The thing that finally brought her to her senses was when my dad almost beat my youngest brother to death. She finally had the nerve to get up and cause him to have to go out because she was leaving him. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an interesting and enjoyable free verse packed full of weather imagery as a metaphor to express the hurt that has been encountered in her life. The verse ends on a note of optimism with sunshine replacing the rain, her mantra of "Words can't hurt me" winning through. Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
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This is an interesting and enjoyable free verse packed full of weather imagery as a metaphor to express the hurt that has been encountered in her life. The verse ends on a note of optimism with sunshine replacing the rain, her mantra of "Words can't hurt me" winning through. Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I know these feelings and it is such a relief when the last goodbye is said in these circumstances. Words can indeed cut deep and hurt as much as physical pain. I loved the play on the word rain in the last line, your free-verse is powerful and resonating, a fine free write Lisa, love Dolly x
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I know these feelings and it is such a relief when the last goodbye is said in these circumstances. Words can indeed cut deep and hurt as much as physical pain. I loved the play on the word rain in the last line, your free-verse is powerful and resonating, a fine free write Lisa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-May-2023
Comment from Michele Harber
Very powerful, Lisa May, and you are a master of metaphor! I love your sticking to your storm metaphor with the wonderful pun in your last line: "His rain is over." My favorite phrase, though, was not a metaphor but an alliteration with a very strong image: "shivers and shrivels." "Shrivels" is such a demeaning word, so indicative of the way abusive people so often take their victims' pride and strength, and make them shrink within themselves. Once again we're up against each other with two very good and very different poems. Best of luck to both of us!
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Very powerful, Lisa May, and you are a master of metaphor! I love your sticking to your storm metaphor with the wonderful pun in your last line: "His rain is over." My favorite phrase, though, was not a metaphor but an alliteration with a very strong image: "shivers and shrivels." "Shrivels" is such a demeaning word, so indicative of the way abusive people so often take their victims' pride and strength, and make them shrink within themselves. Once again we're up against each other with two very good and very different poems. Best of luck to both of us!
Comment Written 21-May-2023
