Lazy Mind, Hazy Soul
Reading a book in nature on a summer afternoon.16 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
puts the poem all together! The words the author chose create a scene, for me, that is breathtaking! The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem. Hope you are having a great Sunday!...Maria
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
puts the poem all together! The words the author chose create a scene, for me, that is breathtaking! The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem. Hope you are having a great Sunday!...Maria
Comment Written 21-May-2023
reply by the author on 21-May-2023
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Thank you, Maria!!! I'm Mario, I can reveal my name now that the contest is over. Thanks for your positive review!!
Comment from lyenochka
This haiku has the seasonal reference of summer and satori ending of the page turning that refers back to the "lazy" feeling of the first line, leaving the breeze to turn the page. It makes me think that the narrator feels a peace with life to move forward. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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This haiku has the seasonal reference of summer and satori ending of the page turning that refers back to the "lazy" feeling of the first line, leaving the breeze to turn the page. It makes me think that the narrator feels a peace with life to move forward. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you for your review!!
Comment from royowen
I think that's the ultimate in being laid back, having the breeze to turn the pages of a book, I dint think even in my widest dreams could I imagine the wind fulfilling that function...except turning to the wrong page, a beautifully written entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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I think that's the ultimate in being laid back, having the breeze to turn the pages of a book, I dint think even in my widest dreams could I imagine the wind fulfilling that function...except turning to the wrong page, a beautifully written entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thanks so much Roy!!!
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A pleasure Mario
Comment from jessizero
I liked this poem. You did a great job with the syllable count. It's a funny thought to be so lazy while reading that you'd like the wind to turn the page. LOL. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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I liked this poem. You did a great job with the syllable count. It's a funny thought to be so lazy while reading that you'd like the wind to turn the page. LOL. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thanks for the encouraging review, Jessi!!!!!
Comment from Regina Elliott
Dear Poet, this lovely summer
poem takes me dreamily
back to my childhood summertides. I'm almost 66
years old, and this gentle
haiku is reminiscent of an
almost carefree life filled
with fun and adventure in
summer. School was out
for almost 3 months so there
was bicycle riding, camping,
beaches, the 1964-1965
World's Fair in N.Y., the list
was long. Thank you for
taking me back there. My
very best wishes for the
contest!
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Dear Poet, this lovely summer
poem takes me dreamily
back to my childhood summertides. I'm almost 66
years old, and this gentle
haiku is reminiscent of an
almost carefree life filled
with fun and adventure in
summer. School was out
for almost 3 months so there
was bicycle riding, camping,
beaches, the 1964-1965
World's Fair in N.Y., the list
was long. Thank you for
taking me back there. My
very best wishes for the
contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Wendy G
Very nice 5-7-5 or Haiku. Not sure why "lazy" has a capital letter but otherwise it is an excellent entry for the contest. Sending best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Very nice 5-7-5 or Haiku. Not sure why "lazy" has a capital letter but otherwise it is an excellent entry for the contest. Sending best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Before anything else, CONGRATULATIONS on your recent win. I've been following the contest and rooted for you! Unbridled talent...!!!!
Thanks for your kind review, you are the only one to point out the capital L.... I missed it..
Thanks so much again!!!
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind words! I wonder who you are! Lol.
Wendy
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You know me very well, Wendy. I'm so wanting to disclose my name but it's a blind contest, and I need to go by it. What I can legally say is read all of them and do vote for the best there. I know I'm not in the first, but so many times I get lots of wonderful reviews, including ' exceptional' like last time, and the results was I was the only one to vote for my work..LOL...!!!
CHEERS!
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I always vote for the one I think is best, but sometimes it is hard to choose if there are a few good ones.
Comment from Julie Lau
Now that is the absolute epitome of lazy - when you are too sleepy to turn the page. At home, I know when that is the time to surrender to sleep. In an outdoor situation with a balmy breeze, how very pleasant! A lovely haiku; well done.
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Now that is the absolute epitome of lazy - when you are too sleepy to turn the page. At home, I know when that is the time to surrender to sleep. In an outdoor situation with a balmy breeze, how very pleasant! A lovely haiku; well done.
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and the generous stars!! Really appreciate it!!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Being lazy makes the summer days boring and long. But then there are times when we need to rest and enjoy the beauty around us, like this young boy.
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Being lazy makes the summer days boring and long. But then there are times when we need to rest and enjoy the beauty around us, like this young boy.
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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That's so true!!
Thanks for the review!!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Haiku Poem writing prompt contest. It's nice to see a poet's well constructed haiku, you understand the form, rules, and put it all together so well.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Excellent entry for the Haiku Poem writing prompt contest. It's nice to see a poet's well constructed haiku, you understand the form, rules, and put it all together so well.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you Gypsy!!!! Really appreciate your thorough review!!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
this was a fun haiku. You used much imagery just a few words. Your personification of the wind was effective, and light hearted. Thd anticipation of Summer was very well described. Excellent writing
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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this was a fun haiku. You used much imagery just a few words. Your personification of the wind was effective, and light hearted. Thd anticipation of Summer was very well described. Excellent writing
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you very much Alexandra!!
