Metamorphosis
Nature's precarious path - hanging in balance27 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
A miracle indeed and your I admire your choice of the word 'lottery' to describe both the inherent danger and potential glory of the pupal stage of the butterfly.
Good luck in the contest with this wee gem. May it hatch into something beautiful.
Steve
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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A miracle indeed and your I admire your choice of the word 'lottery' to describe both the inherent danger and potential glory of the pupal stage of the butterfly.
Good luck in the contest with this wee gem. May it hatch into something beautiful.
Steve
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Steve, for your kind rating and comments. I love your words, particularly the last sentence. Best wishes Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I'm not quite sure why it's not on the poetry side, but I enjoyed reading. Yes, it is a lottery when metaphor this happens.
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I'm not quite sure why it's not on the poetry side, but I enjoyed reading. Yes, it is a lottery when metaphor this happens.
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and helpful comments, so valued and appreciated.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a really creative entry for the challenge Debbie! Regretfully I only have five stars to give. I think the title is clever and the words you use are very clever. I like anything that turns prospective upside down, cuz I feel you've done in your poem. Excellent Exceptional Writing! :) Alex
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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This is a really creative entry for the challenge Debbie! Regretfully I only have five stars to give. I think the title is clever and the words you use are very clever. I like anything that turns prospective upside down, cuz I feel you've done in your poem. Excellent Exceptional Writing! :) Alex
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Alex, for your lovely rating and feedback which is all so greatly valued. Debbie
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem. What a perilous position this cacoon is in. The poor butterful may never get the chance to fly. Nature's lottery is great way to put it. What a gamble. Nature can seem cruel.
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem. What a perilous position this cacoon is in. The poor butterful may never get the chance to fly. Nature's lottery is great way to put it. What a gamble. Nature can seem cruel.
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Beth, for your lovely rating and feedback all so greatly valued. Debbie
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Debbie. I liked the contrast
in your words. You gave readers much to think about.
Which way will this event end? I liked the way line
2 and 3 used words that began with 't' and 'e'.
The picture was a perfect addition.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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You did a great job, Debbie. I liked the contrast
in your words. You gave readers much to think about.
Which way will this event end? I liked the way line
2 and 3 used words that began with 't' and 'e'.
The picture was a perfect addition.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Thank you so much Jan for your lovely rating and feedback, all so valued. Best wishes Debbie
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have used the literary technique of alliteration. With the t's it makes the suggestion of a tut tut, tsk or a clock ticking. There is a strong example of juxtaposition which carries the meaning of the poem.
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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You have used the literary technique of alliteration. With the t's it makes the suggestion of a tut tut, tsk or a clock ticking. There is a strong example of juxtaposition which carries the meaning of the poem.
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind rating and very helpful comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes.
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Comment from Spitfire
Excellent. What a great comparison. The caterpillars' cocoon does look like a death trap. But what emerges is so beautiful. nice alliteration with triumphant and tragic.
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Excellent. What a great comparison. The caterpillars' cocoon does look like a death trap. But what emerges is so beautiful. nice alliteration with triumphant and tragic.
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your very generous and much valued rating and feedback. Best wishes
Comment from Niki Marie
Possible it's both? Highly probable actually. I do wonder.. it's sometimes nice to ponder. Nicely done.
Good luck to you(.such a short lifespan for such a lovely being.love the backstory)
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Possible it's both? Highly probable actually. I do wonder.. it's sometimes nice to ponder. Nicely done.
Good luck to you(.such a short lifespan for such a lovely being.love the backstory)
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Hi Niki, could I just enquire about 'good' rating? Was there anything I should improve and, if so, possibly, get it moved up? Many thanks for your feedback.
Thank you Niki. Much appreciated.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
That's very true. I would venture to say that it's more often tragic than successful. Even at hatching, only 1-4% of the eggs become butterflies. We humans are using so much pesticides, nature takes its part, predators the rest...the result is grim.
Thanks for sharing this piece for reflection!!
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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That's very true. I would venture to say that it's more often tragic than successful. Even at hatching, only 1-4% of the eggs become butterflies. We humans are using so much pesticides, nature takes its part, predators the rest...the result is grim.
Thanks for sharing this piece for reflection!!
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind rating and very thoughtful comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes.
Comment from royowen
I love this short form work. It captures one of the great things that happens in nature, in a sense the demise of one thing, giving way to the creation of new life. Beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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I love this short form work. It captures one of the great things that happens in nature, in a sense the demise of one thing, giving way to the creation of new life. Beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind rating and feedback. Much appreciated.
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Most welcome
