Metamorphosis
Nature's precarious path - hanging in balance27 total reviews
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting nature poem. It also could be a metaphor for isolation. Secluding for self-reflection, the dangers of outside forces which you cannot control, and eventual outcome good or bad. The poem meets the criteria. The flow is good. The picture works well with the words.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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An interesting nature poem. It also could be a metaphor for isolation. Secluding for self-reflection, the dangers of outside forces which you cannot control, and eventual outcome good or bad. The poem meets the criteria. The flow is good. The picture works well with the words.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind rating and very interesting comments. This is all much appreciated. Take care Debbie
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You are welcome.
Comment from Emerie Mao
I really enjoyed reading your poem. I do believe that it will do well in the contest. Best of luck to you, I hope you have a great rest of your day! :D
- Emerie
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. I do believe that it will do well in the contest. Best of luck to you, I hope you have a great rest of your day! :D
- Emerie
Comment Written 01-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely rating and comments! Sadly I got beaten:( Take care Debbie
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done poem comparing the Metamorphosis of a butterfly to nature's lottery. I also like the use of the words triumphant emergence or
tragic ensnarement
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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nicely done poem comparing the Metamorphosis of a butterfly to nature's lottery. I also like the use of the words triumphant emergence or
tragic ensnarement
Comment Written 31-May-2023
reply by the author on 31-May-2023
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Thank you so much Jake! Your rating and comments are greatly valued. Take care Debbie
Comment from Debra White
Hello Debbie :)
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem - I like the triumph/tragedy balance and the author notes are so informative - I didn't know all that... I thought the caterpillar went through it's transformation to butterfly and then flew away and lived happily ever after - I didn't realise it was such a risky business - and such a short life span...
That you for the lesson!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
ps: I'm confused by the categorisation of your poem - it's down as general flash fiction rather than poetry!
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Hello Debbie :)
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem - I like the triumph/tragedy balance and the author notes are so informative - I didn't know all that... I thought the caterpillar went through it's transformation to butterfly and then flew away and lived happily ever after - I didn't realise it was such a risky business - and such a short life span...
That you for the lesson!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
ps: I'm confused by the categorisation of your poem - it's down as general flash fiction rather than poetry!
Comment Written 28-May-2023
reply by the author on 28-May-2023
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Messed up again I'm afraid and I did ask Tom to change it (because I can't) and he said he did but obviously didn't! Thank you once again for being so observant. And thank you for this kind feedback which is so appreciated. It is in fact a fascinating transition because the caterpillar actually turns to liquid inside the crysalis and by some incredible feat it transforms into a butterfly/moth with so short a lifespan and such vulnerability to start the whole cycle all over again. Take care Debra and speak soon. Debbie. PS I'm on to Tom again!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is well done but I need to suggest that you have put a poem under story and I think you might want to place it under poetry instead. Otherwise, you may have to forfeit the contest you have entered.
Jesse
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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This is well done but I need to suggest that you have put a poem under story and I think you might want to place it under poetry instead. Otherwise, you may have to forfeit the contest you have entered.
Jesse
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Jesse, for your kind rating and thoughtful comments. Thank you also for your observation. I actually got in touch with Support to change that because for some bizarre reason you can't do it yourself. They told me they'd done it. But, in any event, the contest is over. However, I didn't realise it was that critical and I'll be much more cautious next time. Take care Debbie
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Glad I could help you, Debbie.
Take care as well,
Jesse
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I never thought about this before, but what a simple way of explaining the potential tragedy that awaits the butterfly/moth.
I like the way this is presented - the words underneath the picture with no box like you usually get with poems on this site. How did you do that? It makes the poem more effective, I think.
Good luck in the contest - I think this will stand out for its presentation as well as its words.
Pam
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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I never thought about this before, but what a simple way of explaining the potential tragedy that awaits the butterfly/moth.
I like the way this is presented - the words underneath the picture with no box like you usually get with poems on this site. How did you do that? It makes the poem more effective, I think.
Good luck in the contest - I think this will stand out for its presentation as well as its words.
Pam
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Pam, thank you so much for your lovely rating and comments, all so valued. I'm afraid the presentation was nothing to do with me -it decided things for itself- and I really felt the poor relation compared to everyone else's! But I'm so pleased that you appreciated it. (I had the same thing happen again with another entry and then things returned to normal!) Take care Debbie
Comment from Ric Myworld
A picture and poem combination of few words that share and say a whole lot. The ugliest and most beautiful elements of life intertwined in the future's survival. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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A picture and poem combination of few words that share and say a whole lot. The ugliest and most beautiful elements of life intertwined in the future's survival. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind rating and lovely, thoughtful words! Much appreciated. Debbie
Comment from jbannon
Great little poem and interesting information! I did not know about the liquid needed to help with the butterfly wings. WelI done. I couldn't write a poem to save my life, lol
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Great little poem and interesting information! I did not know about the liquid needed to help with the butterfly wings. WelI done. I couldn't write a poem to save my life, lol
Comment Written 22-May-2023
reply by the author on 22-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind rating and comments which are greatly valued. Best wishes Debbie
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You're most welcome!
Comment from Regina Elliott
Hi! This is a brilliant 5-7-5
poem. The poem is honest
about the births in nature and
it's beauty, but also the hazards. It is like a lottery.
My very best wishes for the
contest. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Hi! This is a brilliant 5-7-5
poem. The poem is honest
about the births in nature and
it's beauty, but also the hazards. It is like a lottery.
My very best wishes for the
contest. Blessings ~
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Regina. Your rating is so kind and your comments are truly valued. Best wishes Debbie
Comment from Ricky1024
This is about metamorphosis.
The emergence of a monarch butterfly from its chrysalis.
The chrysalis hangs off the milkweed plant where it was developed and the caterpillar had lived.
I personally broke off a small piece of the milkweed plant.
Carefully placed the Chrysalis in a jar.
And, in my house.
(over 60 years ago)
I watched and learned about the process.
Thanks for sharing this memory.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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This is about metamorphosis.
The emergence of a monarch butterfly from its chrysalis.
The chrysalis hangs off the milkweed plant where it was developed and the caterpillar had lived.
I personally broke off a small piece of the milkweed plant.
Carefully placed the Chrysalis in a jar.
And, in my house.
(over 60 years ago)
I watched and learned about the process.
Thanks for sharing this memory.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 20-May-2023
reply by the author on 20-May-2023
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Thank you Ricky for your kind rating and lovely feedback. It's all truly fascinating as the caterpillar turns into liquid and is then recreated into such beauty that lasts only 1-2 weeks. Best wishes.
