Wanting You So
Two lovers, separated, desperately yearn to be One.7 total reviews
Comment from Julie Lau
Unusual, passionate, intense... and how effective is the black and white film clip! I feel you have fulfilled the requirements of the brief most effectively. Congratulations and all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Unusual, passionate, intense... and how effective is the black and white film clip! I feel you have fulfilled the requirements of the brief most effectively. Congratulations and all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 14-May-2023
reply by the author on 14-May-2023
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Julie,
Thank you so kindly for your review.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I would like to read this poem of love, but the font and its dark color are impossible to read against an equally dark background. Maybe no one has pointed this out. I hope you will correct it so that Fanstorians can read your verse.
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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I would like to read this poem of love, but the font and its dark color are impossible to read against an equally dark background. Maybe no one has pointed this out. I hope you will correct it so that Fanstorians can read your verse.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
reply by the author on 13-May-2023
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Made some edits and forgot to return my font color to the original. Thanks for the notice.
Try again, please.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
That's passion, all right. Plenty of innuendo to go around!
Only thing I would change is your word 'black' in the third email to 'dark' and 'blackness' to 'darkness'.
Good luck in the contest.
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That's passion, all right. Plenty of innuendo to go around!
Only thing I would change is your word 'black' in the third email to 'dark' and 'blackness' to 'darkness'.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from royowen
I love the clever way you have skirted that border and line between the warning on this poem and the contest conditions, it's smoking hot still, writing between the lines is a skilful grammatical pursuit, and you've done this well, beautifully written, good luck, well done, blessings Roy
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I love the clever way you have skirted that border and line between the warning on this poem and the contest conditions, it's smoking hot still, writing between the lines is a skilful grammatical pursuit, and you've done this well, beautifully written, good luck, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from Ricky1024
"Wanting You So" was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
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"Wanting You So" was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sensual and intimate write about a deep and meaningful love between two people here and their separation is unbearable for them, a fine deeply moving post, love Dolly x
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A sensual and intimate write about a deep and meaningful love between two people here and their separation is unbearable for them, a fine deeply moving post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This does all of the requirements necessary to be an entry to the love poem in black and white. It is passionate without being vulgar and sweetly lovable without being harsh. I love the little moving picture at the bottom where he kisses your ear tenderly. This speaks for the lovers in us all who might be separated by time zones in our relationship.
Thanks for attending the love festival of our lives.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This does all of the requirements necessary to be an entry to the love poem in black and white. It is passionate without being vulgar and sweetly lovable without being harsh. I love the little moving picture at the bottom where he kisses your ear tenderly. This speaks for the lovers in us all who might be separated by time zones in our relationship.
Thanks for attending the love festival of our lives.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you for your cultivated review. I especially enjoyed your "love festival of our lives."
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You are welcome. The last phrase is a little something I thought up while reading your poem.