The Matchmaker
A conversation at the concert.16 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
This is very cute, Lisa May, and you certainly nailed the character of a curmudgeonly old man. Your dialogue is relatable, in that we've all met someone like that who just won't give us the time of day. This was a fun read -- and I expect a follow-up about Todd and the girl's first date!
Congratulations on your well-deserved win.
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This is very cute, Lisa May, and you certainly nailed the character of a curmudgeonly old man. Your dialogue is relatable, in that we've all met someone like that who just won't give us the time of day. This was a fun read -- and I expect a follow-up about Todd and the girl's first date!
Congratulations on your well-deserved win.
Comment Written 13-May-2023
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Lisa, hello.
I loved this story and the conclusion's twist.
Congrats on your win!
It really is a nice entry.
Have a nice weekend, Lisa.
Blessings,
Cindy
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Lisa, hello.
I loved this story and the conclusion's twist.
Congrats on your win!
It really is a nice entry.
Have a nice weekend, Lisa.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Congratulations on your well deserved win of the Dialogue Only contest. Your story is short, direct, and to the point in less than a thousand words. The dialogue is realistic and intriguing as the grumpy old man plays word games with the young lady. The end is satisfying, as the young lady will end up with two new friends.
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Congratulations on your well deserved win of the Dialogue Only contest. Your story is short, direct, and to the point in less than a thousand words. The dialogue is realistic and intriguing as the grumpy old man plays word games with the young lady. The end is satisfying, as the young lady will end up with two new friends.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This dialogue story, The Matchmaker, is well-made for this challenge, as works in the author's use of grammar and the overarching goal of the main character's nephew meeting someone nice. Funny.
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This dialogue story, The Matchmaker, is well-made for this challenge, as works in the author's use of grammar and the overarching goal of the main character's nephew meeting someone nice. Funny.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from Debra White
Hi LisaMay, I enjoyed reading your post.
You nailed the brief and I can see why you won the contest! Congrats :)
There's always at least one smart-arse waiting in the wings to make our day that bit more interesting!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
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Hi LisaMay, I enjoyed reading your post.
You nailed the brief and I can see why you won the contest! Congrats :)
There's always at least one smart-arse waiting in the wings to make our day that bit more interesting!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from Wendy G
Well done. I like this one because it has humour and a little twist at the end. The characters do seem realistic. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Well done. I like this one because it has humour and a little twist at the end. The characters do seem realistic. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-May-2023
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, arranging and matchmaking haven't gone out of fashion after, Here it is on that threshold, adding coincidental appointments, almost like the divine types, funny about that. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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Heh heh, arranging and matchmaking haven't gone out of fashion after, Here it is on that threshold, adding coincidental appointments, almost like the divine types, funny about that. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-May-2023
Comment from w.j.debi
Great job with the dialog. The old man loves playing with language and making people work for the correct outcome. Yes, it does appear the old man is playing match maker, too. He seems to like the girl enough to get her to meet his nephew.
Good luck in the contest with this charming story.
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Great job with the dialog. The old man loves playing with language and making people work for the correct outcome. Yes, it does appear the old man is playing match maker, too. He seems to like the girl enough to get her to meet his nephew.
Good luck in the contest with this charming story.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very clever, funny and quite tire-screeching start!!! Loved it. The dialogue is spot on and has punch, the storyline is solid and I kind of expected the end, though I thought he would say: he's my son...
I really enjoyed it. Short and sweet.
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Very clever, funny and quite tire-screeching start!!! Loved it. The dialogue is spot on and has punch, the storyline is solid and I kind of expected the end, though I thought he would say: he's my son...
I really enjoyed it. Short and sweet.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks for your reviewing comments. Actually, I did originally have ''He's my son'', but then I thought the reader might query why the old man wasn't sitting with him if they went to the same concert. Of course, fathers and sons don't always know exactly what each other are doing or where they are going, but I thought it easier to say he was the nephew.
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It's great with the nephew too, it's just my mind was going forward and that thought came to me. Great story. I voted!!!!
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You must've been on the same wavelength. Thanks for voting!!
Comment from pome lover
that's cute. She sure had a lot of patience with "His Grumpiness" - but at least he recognized that he was and became friendly enough to suggest she go meet his nephew.
Who knows, she may end up marrying the nephew and the uncle would be correcting her grammar forever.
neat dialogue.
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that's cute. She sure had a lot of patience with "His Grumpiness" - but at least he recognized that he was and became friendly enough to suggest she go meet his nephew.
Who knows, she may end up marrying the nephew and the uncle would be correcting her grammar forever.
neat dialogue.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
