Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Orange Crush"Book 3 of assorted poems
8 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your orange crush seems to be an ode to the Almighty Autumn that is just across the corner. I particularly like it this stanza:"Black, brown profound deathly blight
Indifferent hand
Thoughtless toss plan
Orange peel land" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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Your orange crush seems to be an ode to the Almighty Autumn that is just across the corner. I particularly like it this stanza:"Black, brown profound deathly blight
Indifferent hand
Thoughtless toss plan
Orange peel land" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much Iza I'm glad you liked it! Thank you your insight and kind words. Have a great night!
Comment from Bryce 1
Thank you for this. What a creative way to talk about a forest fire. The imagery is elevated with every line and the poem flows well throughout nearly all of it.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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Thank you for this. What a creative way to talk about a forest fire. The imagery is elevated with every line and the poem flows well throughout nearly all of it.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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Thank you Bryce for your kind review! I'm glad you liked it! I appreciate your thoughts and time. Thanks again!
Comment from Faith Williams
There is some great description in your minute poem of 'the land recoils' and 'hot air floats black.' An apt title for your piece. Though I think you will need to check your rhyme scheme. I believe the minute poem calls for an aabb, ccdd, eeff rhyme scheme. Yours is an abbb, accc, addd rhyme scheme. I also suggest checking your meter as it should be iambic throughout. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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There is some great description in your minute poem of 'the land recoils' and 'hot air floats black.' An apt title for your piece. Though I think you will need to check your rhyme scheme. I believe the minute poem calls for an aabb, ccdd, eeff rhyme scheme. Yours is an abbb, accc, addd rhyme scheme. I also suggest checking your meter as it should be iambic throughout. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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I thank you so much for your comments and for your kind review, and for your advice. Does it does not need to follow the lambic meter? Specifically, only that it carries 60 syllables and that it rhymes.
Check, thank you very much for that and also thank you for your kind rating. I hope that your day is amazing!
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Sorry. I checked about the meter, and you are correct. It does not require the iambic meter. Even though I've read it now a few times, I'm still not sure about the rhyme. I will change your rating though.
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Thank you so much I will look into the rhyming. Have a great day ty!
Comment from JSD
Another one! Just brilliant, tight use of language. This, for me, is what poetry should do. Easy, unforced use of the rhyme and the form. Some phrases that absolutely stick in the gut. I think 'tree blood quick boils' is my favourite. Thank you. John
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Another one! Just brilliant, tight use of language. This, for me, is what poetry should do. Easy, unforced use of the rhyme and the form. Some phrases that absolutely stick in the gut. I think 'tree blood quick boils' is my favourite. Thank you. John
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Thank you you're so kind John and wow thank you for your attention to my work. i'm very glad it thank you so much!
Comment from Angel Debbie
Great write about a forest fire and all that it does to life. Very sad that people are so careless about this Earth and it creatures. So Sad. Great write. Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Great write about a forest fire and all that it does to life. Very sad that people are so careless about this Earth and it creatures. So Sad. Great write. Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your review. I'm understanding enter inside very much appreciated by me. I also thank you for your time and your kind comments and I hope you have a great night!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiment here Lea carelessness causes fires. You need to check the rhyme scheme as I believe it s AABB for the contest, so your poem will need an adjustment, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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I enjoyed the sentiment here Lea carelessness causes fires. You need to check the rhyme scheme as I believe it s AABB for the contest, so your poem will need an adjustment, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Contact said that we didn't have to follow it but as long as we had rhyme and that we followed the strict syllable count. I mean I'll already read it and have a check. Thank you for blooking up for me I appreciate it! Thank you for your review. Hope the sun's out where you are!
Comment from Regina Elliott
Dear poet, this is a well penned poem about a tragic
forest fire that happens too
often. California also has
tragic fires. It seems never-
ending. I'm so saddened for the
loss of trees and many
animals. My very best wishes
for the contest. Blessings ~
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Dear poet, this is a well penned poem about a tragic
forest fire that happens too
often. California also has
tragic fires. It seems never-
ending. I'm so saddened for the
loss of trees and many
animals. My very best wishes
for the contest. Blessings ~
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you Regina for your kind and insightful have watched California's devastation over the years and watch it come to us too. It's a nasty pattern nur seeing globally in many waystronger storms drier droughts hotter days bigger fires the year after the fire happened here. All of our highways washed out you're stuck all over the problems not being able to move. All 5 major highways washed out with no roots to hold the soil. The soil slips off the earth like an orange peel takes everything with it as it goes. Thank you again Regina for your time and for your thoughtful comment. I hope all is well for you in california have a great day!
Comment from JT traveller
Fantastic poem once again. The colour scheme is spot on and the last line is so unique, "orange peel land", how very poetic. Your poem reminded me of the frequent bushfires we have here in Australia. Thank you for sharing Lea. Jacqueline xx
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Fantastic poem once again. The colour scheme is spot on and the last line is so unique, "orange peel land", how very poetic. Your poem reminded me of the frequent bushfires we have here in Australia. Thank you for sharing Lea. Jacqueline xx
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you again. Thank you so much happy and proud to receive your receipt as always and here's what unique and offer perspective. I like it I like it. I'm glad you like them too. I hope that all is well with you and your family back home. Thank you again all the best
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As well as can be. I have my husband and a few close friends. They make me happy. Flying to Amritsar in one week. So excited 😊
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I hope you have a wonderful time!
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