The Fisherman and the Whale
A Modern Fable30 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your fable worked well with the whale being the granter of wishes. A good moral to your story, and one that many people don't understand until itbis too late as in this case.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Your fable worked well with the whale being the granter of wishes. A good moral to your story, and one that many people don't understand until itbis too late as in this case.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks for your review Valda, be well!
Comment from royowen
Yep, but it doesn't mean one can't be happy and have lots of money too, there are stories of generous rich men that have/give away 90% of what they earn. It's really only the love of money that does that. But your story is great, the fisherman deserved what he got, blessings Roy
People always get the proverb wrong the Bible says, "Money is the root of all KINDS of evil" 1Timothy 6:10, there are lots of evil things that don't involve money.
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Yep, but it doesn't mean one can't be happy and have lots of money too, there are stories of generous rich men that have/give away 90% of what they earn. It's really only the love of money that does that. But your story is great, the fisherman deserved what he got, blessings Roy
People always get the proverb wrong the Bible says, "Money is the root of all KINDS of evil" 1Timothy 6:10, there are lots of evil things that don't involve money.
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Roy, that has been and is, proven everyday. Sadly.
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Well done
Comment from mermaids
Love your whale tale and the greedy fisherman. Life is not about material possessions, wealth or the young wife. I like the talking whale, maybe we need to listen more to the whales. Excellent writing here that flows smoothly and holds the reader's interest. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Love your whale tale and the greedy fisherman. Life is not about material possessions, wealth or the young wife. I like the talking whale, maybe we need to listen more to the whales. Excellent writing here that flows smoothly and holds the reader's interest. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you so much! Wow! Unexpected sixer. THANK YOU!
Comment from Wendy G
Well done. An excellent fable which is very relevant for today, and the pleasure seekers always wanting more, bigger and better. The story is well written and clearly expressed. Best wishes for your contest entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Well done. An excellent fable which is very relevant for today, and the pleasure seekers always wanting more, bigger and better. The story is well written and clearly expressed. Best wishes for your contest entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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My best regards. Thank you!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I get what you're going for here but I don't think you've quite pulled it on. It's a rehash of many old fable - salmon of knowledge, wish fish etc.
Also the greed is the root of evil isn't proven here. The only aspect of the moral that's true is that possessions don't make you happy.
The writing though is on par and flows well.
All the best
GMG
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Hi there,
I get what you're going for here but I don't think you've quite pulled it on. It's a rehash of many old fable - salmon of knowledge, wish fish etc.
Also the greed is the root of evil isn't proven here. The only aspect of the moral that's true is that possessions don't make you happy.
The writing though is on par and flows well.
All the best
GMG
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-May-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How so very true these words are and so many wish for wealth to make them happy when happiness is born within us and it can never be bought, much enjoyed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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How so very true these words are and so many wish for wealth to make them happy when happiness is born within us and it can never be bought, much enjoyed, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from BermyBye50
This is an interesting and creative modern fable about wanting more and the desire for wealth. Well done.
Please note my entry was temporarily disqualified by the CEC for not starting the last sentence "And the moral of the story is."
I corrected the last sentence of my entry to match this requirement. You may want to do the same.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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This is an interesting and creative modern fable about wanting more and the desire for wealth. Well done.
Please note my entry was temporarily disqualified by the CEC for not starting the last sentence "And the moral of the story is."
I corrected the last sentence of my entry to match this requirement. You may want to do the same.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Hi Eugene, same hallnes here, I appreciate your trying to help. I will see if I fixed it in time.
Comment from Spitfire
This is what I keep telling my young friend who bemoans his small paycheck and tells me all the things he would buy if he won the lottery. I like your explanation of how these wishes made his life miserable.
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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This is what I keep telling my young friend who bemoans his small paycheck and tells me all the things he would buy if he won the lottery. I like your explanation of how these wishes made his life miserable.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A fine tale which would be good for children as well as adults. It is well-written, has pace and of course a moral at the end which is a strong one regarding the fact that greed in its turn can bring misery. Excellent presentation with good clear font and spacing between paragraphs; also fun image. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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A fine tale which would be good for children as well as adults. It is well-written, has pace and of course a moral at the end which is a strong one regarding the fact that greed in its turn can bring misery. Excellent presentation with good clear font and spacing between paragraphs; also fun image. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you Debbie!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is true. What a waste of three wishes, I wish I could meet someone who would give me three wishes! This is an excellent contest entry, written in so few words. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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That is true. What a waste of three wishes, I wish I could meet someone who would give me three wishes! This is an excellent contest entry, written in so few words. Well done and good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you, Sandra.
