Bound By Our Sins
2nd Place34 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Excellent plot. I couldn't stop reading. Seems pussy cat Carl is a serial killer when it comes to bitchy girlfriends. I love that you injected some humor in this too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Excellent plot. I couldn't stop reading. Seems pussy cat Carl is a serial killer when it comes to bitchy girlfriends. I love that you injected some humor in this too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you, my friend! I'm glad you liked my little chiller!
Comment from jessizero
This story was excellent! It was entertaining and captivating. I really did not see that ending coming. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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This story was excellent! It was entertaining and captivating. I really did not see that ending coming. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thanks Jessi! I was going for a twisted ending that people would not guess. I appreciate your awesome review!
Comment from Thesis
You did a great job with this story. I liked how you built up the plot, kept my attention, and let the main character be bullied and belittled by his live-in girlfriend. It all comes together nicely, with her demise and the realization that this was not the first secret he had. Dealing with the caller was well done too.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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You did a great job with this story. I liked how you built up the plot, kept my attention, and let the main character be bullied and belittled by his live-in girlfriend. It all comes together nicely, with her demise and the realization that this was not the first secret he had. Dealing with the caller was well done too.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you, Sir. A fun little story.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Well, well, well, Douglas, this story had me anxious with suspense the whole way through. Excellent!
I enjoyed all the sexual innuendos as well. lol Quiet funny some of them.
I must say, the ending, I definitely didn't see that coming. You should of seen my face when I read he wacked her like a man. hahah, hilarious, she had it coming.
Then, I love your double twisted ending, with additional bodies. Must say, that was clever.
I enjoyed the story immensely.
I wish you luck, you have my vote friend.
Enjoy your day!
~Kerry
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Well, well, well, Douglas, this story had me anxious with suspense the whole way through. Excellent!
I enjoyed all the sexual innuendos as well. lol Quiet funny some of them.
I must say, the ending, I definitely didn't see that coming. You should of seen my face when I read he wacked her like a man. hahah, hilarious, she had it coming.
Then, I love your double twisted ending, with additional bodies. Must say, that was clever.
I enjoyed the story immensely.
I wish you luck, you have my vote friend.
Enjoy your day!
~Kerry
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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This turned out to be a good little read. Thank you for the awesome review. Much appreciated!
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Cathy M
I really loved this short murder mystery. You captured the pushy woman and the brow beat man. I ended up chuckling how he gets even with being pushed around. Too bad he lets it get that far, or maybe he likes being the serial killer. Nice job.
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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I really loved this short murder mystery. You captured the pushy woman and the brow beat man. I ended up chuckling how he gets even with being pushed around. Too bad he lets it get that far, or maybe he likes being the serial killer. Nice job.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you Cathy!
Comment from country ranch writer
Ya never a person do you Really? Here he is a real killer pushed to far by his relationships. Go figure. Greed always finds a sleaze ball like the ones who rob the bank as they say what's good for the goose is also good for the ganger no harm no fowl as ge escapes.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Ya never a person do you Really? Here he is a real killer pushed to far by his relationships. Go figure. Greed always finds a sleaze ball like the ones who rob the bank as they say what's good for the goose is also good for the ganger no harm no fowl as ge escapes.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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True dat! Thanks for your awesome and kind words. I hold you dear.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Carl and the man on the phone are bound by their sins.
You did a great job, Douglas, with your contest entry. It was
well thought out with a smooth flow and great interest. I was
engaged from start to finish. So, Carl was just playing along the
whole time with his girlfriend--manipulating her--into doing what
he needed in order to take the money and run. The note was a
great finale.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Well, Carl and the man on the phone are bound by their sins.
You did a great job, Douglas, with your contest entry. It was
well thought out with a smooth flow and great interest. I was
engaged from start to finish. So, Carl was just playing along the
whole time with his girlfriend--manipulating her--into doing what
he needed in order to take the money and run. The note was a
great finale.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thanks Jan. I really wanted the ending on this one to catch everybody off guard. D
Comment from Ulla
Oh, my my, is just what I wanted to say. This is so very well written, Douglas. I must admit that normally, I find your stories far too long, but this had me spell bound. I loved it. Such a great story and so well written. They all gained but by ill means. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Oh, my my, is just what I wanted to say. This is so very well written, Douglas. I must admit that normally, I find your stories far too long, but this had me spell bound. I loved it. Such a great story and so well written. They all gained but by ill means. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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They all gained, except poor mouth Becky. Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the awesome rating. You are a dear friend!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I knew something was up, but never suspected Carl. I figured Becky would kill Carl. I enjoyed reading and couldn't find any way to improve this entry. Good luck with the contest, but I doubt you'll need it. This is good.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I knew something was up, but never suspected Carl. I figured Becky would kill Carl. I enjoyed reading and couldn't find any way to improve this entry. Good luck with the contest, but I doubt you'll need it. This is good.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thanks, Barbara. means a lot coming from you!
Comment from jenintorre
What a great story. I was on the edge of my seat reading it and didn't guess the ending. Good luck to you in the competition. A great entry. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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What a great story. I was on the edge of my seat reading it and didn't guess the ending. Good luck to you in the competition. A great entry. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thanks, Jen. My goal was to have a very unexpected conclusion. I appreciate you!
