A little white lie
Had to be done12 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Ha! Ha! that old fella has definitely got the right idea, might as well get more out of a relationship if you know you are going to pay for it later, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Ha! Ha! that old fella has definitely got the right idea, might as well get more out of a relationship if you know you are going to pay for it later, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Thank you my friend
Comment from PoemsOfDD
LOL - this is a great entry for the 80 word flash story. It is well written, engaging and entertaining. I had a chuckle at the end of the story. The thing is - it happens. Some people are so sad. Well done on writing a fun piece. I think it will do very well.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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LOL - this is a great entry for the 80 word flash story. It is well written, engaging and entertaining. I had a chuckle at the end of the story. The thing is - it happens. Some people are so sad. Well done on writing a fun piece. I think it will do very well.
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you so much for the really great review and the super shiny stars.I am so glad that you liked it. Jen. X
Comment from Mary Shifman
This gave me a chuckle. No question why she married him. I guess there are people who really go into relationships for the economic gain, but I think it could certainly be a miserable experience. Nice bit of flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This gave me a chuckle. No question why she married him. I guess there are people who really go into relationships for the economic gain, but I think it could certainly be a miserable experience. Nice bit of flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thanks MaryThanks Ginda.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is such a fun flash fiction. The witty ending is a twist, and the perfect response. This a good entry for the flash fiction contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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This is such a fun flash fiction. The witty ending is a twist, and the perfect response. This a good entry for the flash fiction contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thanks Ginda
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, Jen. Great contest entry with a fun twist, though
Bob stretched the truth a bit. You did a great job packing
a lot of information into your short work (as required).
Bob, a 70 year old[ 70 year-old ] very wealthy business man(,) turned up one day at the country club[ businessman. club. ]
with a young and beautiful sexy blonde hanging on his arm.
"Wow, how did you manage to get such a young and gorgeous girlfriend? asked Ted" [ quotation marks after the word girlfriend," asked Ted? ]
"She's not my girlfriend(,) she's my wife"[ wife," answered Bob.
" Really? How did you get her to marry you?"
"I lied about my age" [ age." ]
"Did you say you were only fifty?"
"No(,) I said I was ninety".
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Haha, Jen. Great contest entry with a fun twist, though
Bob stretched the truth a bit. You did a great job packing
a lot of information into your short work (as required).
Bob, a 70 year old[ 70 year-old ] very wealthy business man(,) turned up one day at the country club[ businessman. club. ]
with a young and beautiful sexy blonde hanging on his arm.
"Wow, how did you manage to get such a young and gorgeous girlfriend? asked Ted" [ quotation marks after the word girlfriend," asked Ted? ]
"She's not my girlfriend(,) she's my wife"[ wife," answered Bob.
" Really? How did you get her to marry you?"
"I lied about my age" [ age." ]
"Did you say you were only fifty?"
"No(,) I said I was ninety".
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thanks for the great review and I really appreciate your taking the time to correct my peice. Have a nice day. Jen.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, Jen, my dear, thanks for sharing some very fine wisdom. Things aren't always as they seem, and many times the real truths that are opposite of what we might think. LOL. It's always a pleasure to read your writing! :-)
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Yes, Jen, my dear, thanks for sharing some very fine wisdom. Things aren't always as they seem, and many times the real truths that are opposite of what we might think. LOL. It's always a pleasure to read your writing! :-)
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks Ric my lovely friend. I hope you are well and happy. X
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Subterfuge by whom? The wife in thinking his wealth will be hers and not much later, and by Bob possessing a well-built morsel intent on purposes for galavanting through the night. I get it.
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Subterfuge by whom? The wife in thinking his wealth will be hers and not much later, and by Bob possessing a well-built morsel intent on purposes for galavanting through the night. I get it.
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks Tom.
Comment from Ricky1024
This contest entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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This contest entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks Ricky
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, loved the humour here Jen as this girl is obviously a gold digger waiting for this guy to pop his clogs! A fine flash fiction and I am still smiling, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Ha ha ha, loved the humour here Jen as this girl is obviously a gold digger waiting for this guy to pop his clogs! A fine flash fiction and I am still smiling, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks Dolly. X
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! So the pretty, young thing was thinking her "ninety-year-old" husband was going to leave her a big inheritance soon. Well told in 80 words! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Lol! So the pretty, young thing was thinking her "ninety-year-old" husband was going to leave her a big inheritance soon. Well told in 80 words! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-May-2023
reply by the author on 11-May-2023
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Thanks Helen.
