Hey! Let's Pretend!
A far fetched heavenly togetherness poem.42 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
This would make an excellent children's book. I hope you do follow through on it and then let us know. I have nieces and nephews I could read it to.
This would be a great poem to have in your poet and share, especially with children. Good luck in the contest.
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This would make an excellent children's book. I hope you do follow through on it and then let us know. I have nieces and nephews I could read it to.
This would be a great poem to have in your poet and share, especially with children. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-May-2023
Comment from royowen
My imagination takes me as far as being able to do without air, and the ability to translate me between not only galaxies but across the universe, much faster than the speed of light to see wonders human eyes have never seen, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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My imagination takes me as far as being able to do without air, and the ability to translate me between not only galaxies but across the universe, much faster than the speed of light to see wonders human eyes have never seen, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thanks Roy, I use to dream I could fly when I was younger, now I think my weight is holding me down. lol Thanks for the review, I appreciate it!
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Heh heh
Comment from shelley kaye
Is so exciting <-- typo? it's?
very cool magical imagination poem
the fantasy of flying through space is quite interesting...
a great poem for your pocket!
only suggestion i have is maybe try a black background to blend with the totally cool pic? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Is so exciting <-- typo? it's?
very cool magical imagination poem
the fantasy of flying through space is quite interesting...
a great poem for your pocket!
only suggestion i have is maybe try a black background to blend with the totally cool pic? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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I thank you for your advice, and that's what I just did. I hope that will help emphasize it more. I appreciate your encouragement and review! Thanks again Shelley!
Comment from james stockton
This would make a good children's book. I can see each line winding through an illustration. I see two people on the on the first page. The second page has your picture. The third page has two hands over a night sky with a full moon. The next page has the milky way galaxy. That is as far as I will go. I tried to picture your book as I thought it would look as I was reading it to my classroom (I used to teach). Find yourself a good illustrator and put it out there! Another idea - have a group of children draw for you and use their illustrations,
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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This would make a good children's book. I can see each line winding through an illustration. I see two people on the on the first page. The second page has your picture. The third page has two hands over a night sky with a full moon. The next page has the milky way galaxy. That is as far as I will go. I tried to picture your book as I thought it would look as I was reading it to my classroom (I used to teach). Find yourself a good illustrator and put it out there! Another idea - have a group of children draw for you and use their illustrations,
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Darn! I was hoping you were the illustrator I needed. Your descriptions are somewhat similar to mine. You sure have me thinking on those children drawing their thoughts. Two of my nieces are teaching grade school and that sure is a great idea you have given me. I've used blueberry illustrations in the past but nothing better than a child's rendition! Thank You so much for your review!
Comment from Rosemarie L Tharp
This is a very cute and whimsical poem. Carrying a tone of play, this poem conveys of an exciting trip around the stars through the act of pretend - in which anything possible. How often I've longed to be able to explore the stars and fly free. This poems taps into that and allows to it breathe. Much luck on your children's book and the contest.
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This is a very cute and whimsical poem. Carrying a tone of play, this poem conveys of an exciting trip around the stars through the act of pretend - in which anything possible. How often I've longed to be able to explore the stars and fly free. This poems taps into that and allows to it breathe. Much luck on your children's book and the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from playinaround
I enjoyed this fantasy. Love the picture that goes perfectly with the poem. Imaginative writing and an adventure to read. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
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I enjoyed this fantasy. Love the picture that goes perfectly with the poem. Imaginative writing and an adventure to read. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from Wendy G
A very nicely written poem for developing the imagination of a child. It rhymes well but (perhaps deliberately) has no meter. Well done, and I send you best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Suggestions: "Such is the view of Saturn's rings" could perhaps be "Such AS the view of Saturn's rings", and I did wonder if "Oh, My" needs capitals.
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A very nicely written poem for developing the imagination of a child. It rhymes well but (perhaps deliberately) has no meter. Well done, and I send you best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Suggestions: "Such is the view of Saturn's rings" could perhaps be "Such AS the view of Saturn's rings", and I did wonder if "Oh, My" needs capitals.
Comment Written 02-May-2023
Comment from Cathy M
I enjoyed this poem. It was a very lighthearted whimsical poem. I did feel the following section started off in the same flow and then ended abruptly. This section is why I gave it four stars.
Gathering dust from the Diamond Star,
In our golden jar,
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I enjoyed this poem. It was a very lighthearted whimsical poem. I did feel the following section started off in the same flow and then ended abruptly. This section is why I gave it four stars.
Gathering dust from the Diamond Star,
In our golden jar,
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Author,
it's always a nice thought to dream and let our minds pretend.
You have penned a wonderful lingering thought on a journey within the mind. Your rhyme and approximate rhyme held strong and worked in its intent.
All the very best wishes in this contest Author.
With our thoughts we create...
limitless vision.
Kind regards,
James.
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Hi Author,
it's always a nice thought to dream and let our minds pretend.
You have penned a wonderful lingering thought on a journey within the mind. Your rhyme and approximate rhyme held strong and worked in its intent.
All the very best wishes in this contest Author.
With our thoughts we create...
limitless vision.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a fun poem about something most of us would like to do even though it may take a long time. Your choice of artwork is good.
I found one error. It should be Our journey joy or journey. Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck with the contest.
Joan
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This is a fun poem about something most of us would like to do even though it may take a long time. Your choice of artwork is good.
I found one error. It should be Our journey joy or journey. Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck with the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 01-May-2023
