Children And Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Loneliness/Yesterday, Today, Tom"Live the best you can.
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well written poem full of so much truth. It is a six star poem in my eyes. You are very good are rhyming and giving good living advice! I hope your book does really well. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This is a very beautiful and well written poem full of so much truth. It is a six star poem in my eyes. You are very good are rhyming and giving good living advice! I hope your book does really well. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Me too. I am in a Halloween in Spring contest, but the voting goes for two more days.
Comment from Paul McFarland
The meter in the red poem is better than that in the black print. I really like the message that you have in the red poem. You are getting there, Darla.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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The meter in the red poem is better than that in the black print. I really like the message that you have in the red poem. You are getting there, Darla.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thanks!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I enjoyed reading this poem. The first three stanzas makes clear the effect that loneliness can bring. A dark shadow often difficult to shake. The rhyme works well to get the message across. The second half of the poem is more uplifting. I like the change of font - although a more positive colour might work better to match the words ie - green. It will go nicely with the picture. The shift in the remaining - Yesterday, Today, Tomorrow - offers sound advice and a helping hand to guide away from loneliness. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed reading this poem. The first three stanzas makes clear the effect that loneliness can bring. A dark shadow often difficult to shake. The rhyme works well to get the message across. The second half of the poem is more uplifting. I like the change of font - although a more positive colour might work better to match the words ie - green. It will go nicely with the picture. The shift in the remaining - Yesterday, Today, Tomorrow - offers sound advice and a helping hand to guide away from loneliness. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Welcome.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pookietoo,
These poems flow well and use good rhymes. I agree that loneliness can bring on depression and that all feel it at one time or another in their life.
Both adults and children miss lost pets, not just children.
I think the second poem shows a good way to go through life. It may be a road to get through the grief in the first poem. It that why you posted them together and not as separate poem like usual.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Hi Pookietoo,
These poems flow well and use good rhymes. I agree that loneliness can bring on depression and that all feel it at one time or another in their life.
Both adults and children miss lost pets, not just children.
I think the second poem shows a good way to go through life. It may be a road to get through the grief in the first poem. It that why you posted them together and not as separate poem like usual.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I posted them together because I entered this contest late. The only way I can enter 30 poems in this contest by May 2 is to post four poems some days, two in one post, two in another.
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I understand, Pookie. Good luck in the contest.
Joan
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Thanks!