Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Inside Memories "NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
12 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Beautiful Imayo poem, Jessica. Thank you for participating in the Japanese poetry club event. Great entry with a good connection between lines and an imayo poem form. Beautiful presentation.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Beautiful Imayo poem, Jessica. Thank you for participating in the Japanese poetry club event. Great entry with a good connection between lines and an imayo poem form. Beautiful presentation.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Beautiful Imayo poem, Jessica. Thank you for participating in the Japanese poetry club event. Great entry with a good connection between lines and an imayo poem form. Beautiful presentation.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Beautiful Imayo poem, Jessica. Thank you for participating in the Japanese poetry club event. Great entry with a good connection between lines and an imayo poem form. Beautiful presentation.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is much sadness in this write Jessica as we leave behind our grief and mourning in the past and a childhood that was less than happy, a poignant and emotional write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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There is much sadness in this write Jessica as we leave behind our grief and mourning in the past and a childhood that was less than happy, a poignant and emotional write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Dolly! Xo
Comment from Ricky1024
This club entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This club entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Cherish Adams
I am not familiar with IMAYO poetry formats. I will be sure to look that up. However, with that being said I really enjoyed your poem. Very few words but the message is clear. Well done. Thank you for sharing. Cherish
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I am not familiar with IMAYO poetry formats. I will be sure to look that up. However, with that being said I really enjoyed your poem. Very few words but the message is clear. Well done. Thank you for sharing. Cherish
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Cherish! Xo
Jessica
Comment from Sally Law
Jess, This is fabulous poetry. Yours looks better than the online examples. Perfectly split at 7/5 syllables per line. I like the pause it creates. I must try this!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the poetry challenge.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Jess, This is fabulous poetry. Yours looks better than the online examples. Perfectly split at 7/5 syllables per line. I like the pause it creates. I must try this!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the poetry challenge.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Sally! I am loving Japanese poetry since signing up for this club. It's all very new to me, but I find I really enjoy it!! Thank you for your kind words! Xo
Jess
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Most welcome! :))
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is a gorgeous poem and a gorgeous entry. I love the presentation pictures and colors even the font you chose I quite enjoy as well.
I quite enjoy your word choices as well quite delightful.
I see no issues with your poem grammatically speaking nor do I see any issues. Aesthetically is it quite pleasing to the eye. I find no errors and I find this to be a wonderful submission to the contest and I wish you best of luck. Thanks and have a great day
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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This is a gorgeous poem and a gorgeous entry. I love the presentation pictures and colors even the font you chose I quite enjoy as well.
I quite enjoy your word choices as well quite delightful.
I see no issues with your poem grammatically speaking nor do I see any issues. Aesthetically is it quite pleasing to the eye. I find no errors and I find this to be a wonderful submission to the contest and I wish you best of luck. Thanks and have a great day
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Lea!!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
When I see your name in my PM box, I smile because I know I am going to get to read a good poem. I was not disappointed with this club entry. I am NOT a poet and I'm sure this will mess up the syllable count, but I read this line as: "welcomed by stone steps" (welcomed by steps of stone) Like I said it probably messes up everything.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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When I see your name in my PM box, I smile because I know I am going to get to read a good poem. I was not disappointed with this club entry. I am NOT a poet and I'm sure this will mess up the syllable count, but I read this line as: "welcomed by stone steps" (welcomed by steps of stone) Like I said it probably messes up everything.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Barbara, first of all thank you for the compliment, it made my day! And second of all- are you sure you're not a poet? I was stuck on that one line for quite a while, and I absolutely love the sound of "steps of stone". Honestly, it's those little details that make such a difference, I find... Yes, you are correct about the syllable count (has to be 5) but I genuinely love your suggestion and think it's worth working in... What do you think of...
"Met by steps of stone"
Or
"Steps of stone welcome"
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I really like both of them, but I think I like the first one a little more.
Comment from Evelyn Hopkins
Well, this is really cool I like the imagery and how your memories feel uneasy and the picture and color of the background works well good luck in your future. Hope all is well. Have a good day!!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Well, this is really cool I like the imagery and how your memories feel uneasy and the picture and color of the background works well good luck in your future. Hope all is well. Have a good day!!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
A very interesting poem. I can picture the house rather well, thanks to the first three lines and the last line makes me wonder what happened within to leave the memories shattered.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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A very interesting poem. I can picture the house rather well, thanks to the first three lines and the last line makes me wonder what happened within to leave the memories shattered.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!