Comment from Paul McFarland

Excellent

Another nice effort, Darla. Someday, when I have a little more time, we'll analyze one of your poems. I'm going to wait for one that is really close to having good meter.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

They are not close to having good meter?

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023

My poems aren't close to having good meter?

reply by Paul McFarland on 25-Apr-2023

You're getting there.

Comment from Sarah Das Gupta

Excellent

Two very happy and celebratory poems! The photo illustrates the texts perfectly. The joy of having children can't be overstated if we manage to forget all those sleepless nights!

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

Thanks!

reply by Sarah Das Gupta on 24-Apr-2023

ALL BEST WISHES!

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

😊

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

The image is adorable, I love the way you've coloured this in two parts. The sentiments are lovely and pertinent; the meter count is sound but sometimes the rhyme sounds a bit forced. I actually enjoyed the second poem more which I felt flowed a little better. But both very enjoyable and beautifully presented. Thanks for sharing, Debbie

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

Thanks, I think my rhyming is great.

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 24-Apr-2023

Sorry, I've re-read and you're right. I thought there was something but it's perfect!

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

My poems perfect?

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 24-Apr-2023

I actually meant on closer inspection that the rhyming is actually perfect. Well done!

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

Thanks!