Jeep and Ol' Silver and Red
A tale of woe7 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Writing a story is an accomplishment if you know what you are going to write about. Several writers create an outline under the headings; beginning, middle and end. The part where there was a princess was good, because she did not want anything to happen to the other characters.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Writing a story is an accomplishment if you know what you are going to write about. Several writers create an outline under the headings; beginning, middle and end. The part where there was a princess was good, because she did not want anything to happen to the other characters.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Well, that is a unique take on story writing. I think it's touching, cool, enjoyable and awesomely great! It reads like a modern fairy tale, narrated by a child.
Great job. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Well, that is a unique take on story writing. I think it's touching, cool, enjoyable and awesomely great! It reads like a modern fairy tale, narrated by a child.
Great job. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Julie Lau
Yes, that is good. You have written about writing, and made me wince when I recall that two of my last three posts were about kittens. Children are also a popular subject, but perhaps a little less macho than Homer appears to be. Well done for an amusing and entertaining story.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Yes, that is good. You have written about writing, and made me wince when I recall that two of my last three posts were about kittens. Children are also a popular subject, but perhaps a little less macho than Homer appears to be. Well done for an amusing and entertaining story.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A very intriguing story which kept me guessing throughout! Homer's impressive little verse in the middle was completely unexpected and came as a watershed as, suddenly the 'gs' were important anymore and there grew a sense that Homer wasn't going to need his mother's advice after all. His creativity won the day! Thanks for sharing. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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A very intriguing story which kept me guessing throughout! Homer's impressive little verse in the middle was completely unexpected and came as a watershed as, suddenly the 'gs' were important anymore and there grew a sense that Homer wasn't going to need his mother's advice after all. His creativity won the day! Thanks for sharing. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your great review.
But I have to allow that he 'did' need his mother's advice - no cement truck!
Comment from lancellot
This is good or at least I see the irony and the sad truth in it. Sometimes writing or winning a writing contest means writing with your audience or the voters in mind. These things are subjectional so play towards the majority's obvious biases. Sad but true of FanStory.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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This is good or at least I see the irony and the sad truth in it. Sometimes writing or winning a writing contest means writing with your audience or the voters in mind. These things are subjectional so play towards the majority's obvious biases. Sad but true of FanStory.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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You are exactly right. Our fellow members definitely lean toward the touchy-feely, sappy (between you and I, of course).
Comment from pome lover
that is so cute. good family "back and forthing." Cute personalities of all three came out - especially dad and Homer, but mom got some good lines in there, too. Fun participation by parents. Good for them!
Very enjoyable.
Katharine
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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that is so cute. good family "back and forthing." Cute personalities of all three came out - especially dad and Homer, but mom got some good lines in there, too. Fun participation by parents. Good for them!
Very enjoyable.
Katharine
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you. I thought of you when I mis-spelled poem. (I've always pronounced it pome.)
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when I first made pome lover my pen name, misspelling poem was just for fun. some people probably think I can't spell. that's ok. As I get older I find I Google the spelling of words more often, because I'm not sure I've spelled them right. And thank heavens for spell check :)
Comment from jessizero
I think I know who you are. LOL. I enjoyed this story. You did keep my interest, and it made me laugh. Thank you for sharing this story, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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I think I know who you are. LOL. I enjoyed this story. You did keep my interest, and it made me laugh. Thank you for sharing this story, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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In the interest of fair play, I will only say "thank you".
I mean it, too.