Speed and Agility
8-word poem: predator attack by a big cat.19 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
Well done, Lisa May. "Striped lightning" is an excellent description of a leaping tiger, and "in a flash" beautifully continues the metaphor. Good luck in the contest. We're up against each other again, but I never mourn losing when it's to good poetry.
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Well done, Lisa May. "Striped lightning" is an excellent description of a leaping tiger, and "in a flash" beautifully continues the metaphor. Good luck in the contest. We're up against each other again, but I never mourn losing when it's to good poetry.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
Comment from Debra White
Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
Great description of the tiger and the way it moves. Nice use of alliteration and I also like the striking presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra
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Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
Great description of the tiger and the way it moves. Nice use of alliteration and I also like the striking presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Great long 'i' assonance in 'striped' and 'lightning,' added to 'f' alliteration with 'forth/flash.' Then the long 'i' assonance comes back in 'Tiger' at the end. The action words 'leaps' and the idea of lightning definitely convey a sense of quick motion. I think you did a great job with the black and yellow color combination, too. Good luck in that contest.
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Great long 'i' assonance in 'striped' and 'lightning,' added to 'f' alliteration with 'forth/flash.' Then the long 'i' assonance comes back in 'Tiger' at the end. The action words 'leaps' and the idea of lightning definitely convey a sense of quick motion. I think you did a great job with the black and yellow color combination, too. Good luck in that contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
Comment from Eternal Muse
A perfect poem for the contest. You fit volumes in these 8 words! Leopards are the most gracious, elegant and gorgeous creatures, albeit killers in the wild.
Great metaphors used, excellent imagery, visuals, presentation and the artwork fits here like a glove.
Good luck in the contest. Fondly, EM
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A perfect poem for the contest. You fit volumes in these 8 words! Leopards are the most gracious, elegant and gorgeous creatures, albeit killers in the wild.
Great metaphors used, excellent imagery, visuals, presentation and the artwork fits here like a glove.
Good luck in the contest. Fondly, EM
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
Comment from royowen
The cat family are the most beauteous family made, superb killing machines, the smaller versions making excellent pets, and calming influencers in our lives, beautifully written My friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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The cat family are the most beauteous family made, superb killing machines, the smaller versions making excellent pets, and calming influencers in our lives, beautifully written My friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lisa,
These eight words describe the artwork well. Both the metaphor of the first line and the action in the second are well done.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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Hi Lisa,
These eight words describe the artwork well. Both the metaphor of the first line and the action in the second are well done.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This eight-word poem, Speed and Agility, has the proper formatting and gives a snapshot description of the tiger that covers all from Tigger to Shere Khan.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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This eight-word poem, Speed and Agility, has the proper formatting and gives a snapshot description of the tiger that covers all from Tigger to Shere Khan.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Your review brought back childhood memories to me Bill, with mention of Shere Khan. That Bengal tiger terrified me as a child when my father read Kipling to me.
Comment from Eleri
This is a very descriptive poem that really covers what a tiger is and does - well done. I like the connection with lightning and flash and the poem describes action very well.
Good luck with it
Eleri
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This is a very descriptive poem that really covers what a tiger is and does - well done. I like the connection with lightning and flash and the poem describes action very well.
Good luck with it
Eleri
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image and nice presentation, Lisa.
-You have used your eight words well with a good topic.
-A very good image with "striped lightening" that "leaps forth..."
-You capture the essence of the tiger very well.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Great image and nice presentation, Lisa.
-You have used your eight words well with a good topic.
-A very good image with "striped lightening" that "leaps forth..."
-You capture the essence of the tiger very well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
Comment from Wendy G
Perfect image and very apt presentation. In a few words you have conveyed his strength and power. Good play of words with both "lightning" and "flash". Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Perfect image and very apt presentation. In a few words you have conveyed his strength and power. Good play of words with both "lightning" and "flash". Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
