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Comment from Paul McFarland
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This is nicely rhymed, Darla. This poem would be a good one to try to work on your meter. Most of the lines can be iambic pentameter. Do you want to give it a try?

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    No Thanks anyway.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A beautiful scene of Autumn here, is it Autumn where you are? Are you in Australia, those scenes look beautiful and I enjoyed your descriptions, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    I am in Ogden, Utah.
Comment from shelley kaye
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*last stanza - typo? did you mean it to be 4 lines?

other than that, this was a very nice creative poem about fall and preparing for winter - smooth rhyme and flow

one suggestion i have is maybe try a dark brown background and an orangy font to blend in with the cool picture?
just a thought ;)



thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)






 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    Thanks!