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Guided by Faith

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Can faith guide our path?

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Comment from Ricky1024
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Faith Chapter 7 A
A chapter in the book entitled "Guided by Faith" was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a pleasant evening.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
    Thank you for the kind support.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Downed wires can pose a real threat after a storm passes through.

The Crown Victoria driver's possibly being a threat provides the chapter potential foreshadowing on an event to perchance come.

Why is "setting a plate in front of him" repeated twice in a row? Since the action has occurred, the second does not appear necessary.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
    I have no idea why it's there twice and why nobody else caught and even more so one of my editors read it and didn't catch it. Thank you for the help. I appreciate it.
Comment from hassan nasrallah
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The writing is clear and concise, and the dialogue is authentic and natural. Barbara effectively creates tension and suspense, leaving you wondering what will happen next. The ending leaves you wanting more, and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Great stuff

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
    Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
    Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Sometimes it's hard to admit your feelings to someone, and be comfortable. So, Seth is telling Ace, when Emma needs to hear it from him. LOL. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
    He sure is. I'm positive Ace won't tell the secret. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
    He sure is. I'm positive Ace won't tell the secret. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Soledadpaz
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Another great chapter. A few thoughts and suggestions.

Perhaps: On the way to his bedroom, he stopped at the front window and moved the curtain aside. He (noticed) the burgundy . . .

Perhaps delete: 'at the stove.' And start with: "I hope you like sausage, scrambled eggs, and pancakes," she said, setting a plate in front of him.

This keeps the next para solely in his POV, starting with: "It looks good." And eliminates the first 'he said.'

So the roads are open for deliveries? It seems strange she doesn't question that after he told her the town is closed.

Excellent back and forth between them. They exude chemistry.

Sol

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
    I have wondered about the lumber delivery myself, but have ignored it. You're the only person to address it. I'll do some more thinking on it. I'll probably end up addressing it. Yep, I will. Thank you.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023
    I have wondered about the lumber delivery myself, but have ignored it. You're the only person to address it. I'll do some more thinking on it. I'll probably end up addressing it. Yep, I will. Thank you.
Comment from BethShelby
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Things seem to be going well with these two. It is obvious there is attraction there. Especially from Seth. He likes to tease her about her dog. Most guys seem to like bigger dogs. I wonder if we soon find out more about the guy in the sketch and what he wants.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    I can promise you this stranger will not be a stranger forever. Yes, Seth has a huge German Shepherd, not a little guy. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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It is a good chapter, barbara. You do a good job with the aftermath of the storm. Luckily, the damage wasn't too bad where Emma is living. It is a little before we eat lunch, and the breakfast sounded really good!

Seth is doing a good job keeping a close eye on the stranger and having other people look out for him, as well. It will be interesting to see what that is all about, but he will probably have another plan since he figured that Seth was watching him.

I liked the ending section as Emma is encouraging her plants and also shares about growing them with Seth. I forget what age Seth is, but isn't there a big age difference between him and Emma?

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    Seth will be 30 in a few months and Emma just turned 22. Seth thinks of her as a child because he has a baby sister, the same age as Emma. He's mistaken. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Pam (respa) on 19-Apr-2023
    Thanks for the refresher, and you are welcome for the review.
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi Barbara,
I enjoyed reading this well written and constructed chapter of this story 'Faith'. I'm sorry to say I've only since returned and haven't read the previous chapters.

But in saying that, I see in my mind and read between the lines... and of course, you posting the ending of the previous post was of great convenience to me. Great idea!

I'll be sure to keep a watch out for your postings for 'Faith' as I'm sure there is a great story behind the mysterious burgundy Crown Victoria building, just waiting to reveal itself.

With our thoughts we create...
captured imagination.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    Thank you for dropping by and leaving this encouraging review. Welcome Back!!
reply by Jumbo J on 19-Apr-2023
    My pleasure Barbara and thank you for the 'welcome back', which in itself is rather ironic, because it is my back that causes my time away from being with my Fanstory family. Happy writing.
    Kind regards,
    James.
Comment from prettybluebirds
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I didn't find this chapter too long. The dialogue and visuals kept me interested to the very end. There is just the right touch of humor along with the problems to be solved. Nice writing.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Very interesting story you've got brewing hair and your character are quite vibrant and believable. The way that wait a minute. I get the feeling of familiarity with that one human to another so very good!
How far am I going on in a small space of time here? I sure character Seth and Emma seems to.have much going on!
Your work is definitely interesting catches the app and carried me through from beginning to end. Appreciate imagination and hard work that goes on behind the scenes in writing such a novel so congratulations. I hope you have an awesome evening. I see no issues with your palm grammatically speaking nor do I see anything wrong with your presentation good luck!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
    Thank you for dropping by and leaving this encouraging review.