Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I wanted to congratulate you on this win. The image is stunning with the 'fragility' and elegance of the words fittingly perfect. The alliteration (which I always love) gave the whole limited form verse depth and cohesion. Well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 06-May-2023

Thanks, Debbie and sorry for the late reply.

Steve

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Congratulations on the haiku contest win Steve and for this emotional write about 'Fragile memories'. This is your second one on this topic I have read this morning, I hope all is well with you and yours.
A beautiful presentation.
Valda

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2023

Hi, Valda. Thanks for the kind review and yes, it was good to get a win under my belt! I can certainly do with the money right now!

Steve

Comment from Julie Lau

Excellent

Congratulations, Steve, on winning the haiku contest. It was well deserved, and the accompanying image is amazing! ....................................................................... Julie L

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks, Julie.

Steve

Comment from mrsmajor

Exceptional

I don't write these very often, but I do know a excellent one when I see it...Picture, message all beautifully done, Steve, Congratulations on the win...Well deserved...Hugs

Warmly,
Victoria

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Hi, Victoria. I don't do a lot of haiku either, but this one just came out well. I have a new recipe to try out for the tea party - Date Loaf. Youm!

Steve

reply by mrsmajor on 20-Apr-2023

Well you did a wonderful job on this
one...

hmmmmm, Date Loaf, sounds good
to me, especially with tea...
looking forward to sipping tea
and having a piece of cake...or
2 pieces...Take Care my friend..
Hugs!

Victoria

reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Yeah, it's an old-fashioned recipe but simply delicious. I made one last week, but then we had the plumbers here and they gobbled up most of it for their smoko. I'll have to make another one just for us!

Steve

reply by mrsmajor on 20-Apr-2023

No fooling around, Steve, I'll
be looking forward to it!!!
Victoria

Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

I read this the other day but intended to review it when I could do so from my computer instead of my phone. Then I forgot so here I am on the phone again. I loved this and admired the way you put the satori line first, as we learned to do from some of our esteemed teachers. It is unusual and brave and certainly effective. In this case, it makes a most beautiful haiku. Congratulations for winning first place. A great choice this was.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Adonna, thanks for the thoughtful words and the extra star - much appreciated.

As for the placement of the satori - that was a bit of a toss-up. I believe I had lines 1&3 the other way around at first. That would have been OK too, I think, but my gut prompted me to put that idea of the fragile memory out there first before linking it to the moth.

I'm just happy the committee agreed with that!

Steve

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Congratulations on your win. This is stunningly expressed and presented.
I am reminded of the many times my own memories rose madly to beat wings against the light... Knowing there was so much more than mere blackness in grief.

Karenina

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks, Karenina, for this lovely response to my haiku. Perhaps especially as we get older we experience these sudden flashbacks which often come out of nowhere - some happy, some sad, some simply unexpected.

Steve

reply by karenina on 20-Apr-2023

Loved it... Great to read you (or anyone!) again, Steve!

Comment from Contests

A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks to the Committee.

Steve

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Ah, a beautiful contrast of the white moth fluttering into the dark night. Great metaphor of those flickering memories from the darkness of the past which is unreachable in the present. Lovely use of alliteration, too! I think this could be the winner!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Thanks again. I'm not a great one for haiku, but I did like how this one turned out.

Steve

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

This is a gorgeous haiku, my friend.

Perfect picture to accompany it.

All in all great presentation.

Good luck to you!


-Kerry

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023

Many thanks, Kerry - glad you enjoyed.

steve

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reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 17-Apr-2023

you're welcome

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 17-Apr-2023

welcome

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 17-Apr-2023

welcome

Comment from Gina Schneller

Excellent

Hello there. Very nicely written. Not hard to paint a picture for the reader in such few words. I also love the picture you chose too! ~ Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us all! ~ Best of luck in your writing journey! :)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2023

Thanks, Gina.
A winner as it turns out!

Steve