Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this post with us. It was scary to read. I'm glad everybody is all right.

With that, she bent down and kissed him goodbye. (you can omit 'down')

Emmie was released from the hospital the next morning. (the following morning)

You find board, and I pray with you, (play??? or is it on purpose?)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Thanks very much, Barbara, for your great response and helpful edits. Yes, the pray was intentional.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Excellent chapter, Jim. We know Eddie loves Littlest Red, and in this case risked his life in order to save hers.two of my grandkids are five (one each from my son and daughter) so I clearly felt the pain and anguish of each charector.

Nicely written.
John

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, John. Although to many he seems rather obnoxious, he really has a heart of gold.

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

I've been away from FS for the better part of a month and don't review a heck of a lot, so I still have a couple of sixes in the hopper. This chapter was certainly up to the standard of a six. You maintained the tension throughout the accident and the following period of waiting. A really great job!
Jay

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Thanks very much, Jay for the great review and the 6 stars.

Now, who is that in the new picture? My guesses:

a) Bob Dylan
b) Leonard Cohen
c) Johnny Cash
d) A younger you
e) none of the above

reply by Jay Squires on 16-Apr-2023

Are you referring to my bio-pic? My ego would love to be confused with a-b-c, but, alas, it's a "d"!

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Yeah, I figured that was the most likely. Gotta love that curly hair.

reply by Jay Squires on 16-Apr-2023

All out of a bottle, my friend, and under my wife's hairdryer.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Eddie really did risk his life for little Claire. He is also being very entertaining the day after his surgery. (You might want to move that to the third or fourth day after the surgery. He would be too uncomfortable to fake friendliness so soon after surgery.) But then he is kind of a wild and crazy guy.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

That probably would be more accurate. Maybe he was just putting a good face on it for little Emily who he adored.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Eddie really did risk his life for little Claire. He is also being very entertaining the day after his surgery. (You might want to move that to the third or fourth day after the surgery. He would be too uncomfortable to fake friendliness so soon after surgery.) But then he is kind of a wild and crazy guy.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Accosted. Loved it's use.
Brentwood - Bushwood
Could Eddie be another Carl Spackler.
Wow. That is an ever lengthening list of characters to follow!?
As for the story it was a good read. Longer than most of our author-reader partnership. I joined your patient and took a nap near the end. Wink-wink.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Yeah, maybe that's where I got the inspiration to call it Brentwood--from Bushwood in "Caddy Shack." Loved that movie. Remember Mr. Havercamp? Click here to see what my golf swing looks like now. See why I quit?

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Interesting event and how it all unfolded. All told from Kenny's POV. The description were well written so the reader could follow things well and could easily "see" the accident and the follow-up. I guess this segment goes to reenforce Eddie's goodness and the connection between he and Emily.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Yeah, Eddie comes across as pretty obnoxious to most people, but he really has a heart of gold. I have a friend who is a lot like him in many ways who served as inspiration for Eddie. I guess I'm like Kenny in many ways.

Thanks for the good review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

This is an exciting post Jim. I'm glad it's not as bad as it could, I guess will have to give up the idea of playing professional golf, and concentrate on being a professional Uncle and creating better ways of cheating at golf, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thanks very much, Roy. You're right, he could have been killed. I guess he should be thankful for that anyway.

reply by royowen on 15-Apr-2023

Good chapter.