Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very cute haiku you have penned for the Cat haiku club. I love the picture of the cat you chose to use. Very good descriptive words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you, Teri!

reply by Teri7 on 16-Apr-2023

You are so welcome!!! love and blessings, Teri

Comment from G0dd0ll

Excellent

LOL I wish I coulda seen that! You created quite a picture. It ends so funny. I'm not much on writing haikus, but you've done a wonderful job here. Congrats!

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you so much!!

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Cats do like to tease dogs and it looks like this one succeeded. The poor dog will get blamed for the shattered mirror and the cat will silently laugh with glee for orchestrating the situation.
Great response to the club prompt. Best of luck in the Haiku contest.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you so much!

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

I adore cats, this really sounds like something they would do. This poem is delightful to read and to picture in my mind, it's a great contest entry. Best of luck to you.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you so much!

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

I enjoyed your haiku. It is cleverly written. While dogs get all the credit for intelligence, cats are also clever. Having had cats, each has shown me how clever they can be from greeting guests to opening doors.
Best wishes
Mary

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Absolutely, Mary! Though I'm more of a dog person, I did have a cat years back. He was a tricky and brilliant little creature. lol thank you so much.
<3
Jessica

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

Jessica, I like your haiku and good luck in the contest. I also love the picture you chose to accompany the poem. I have never tried to write a haiku as I am no poet.

One thought, and it's probably wrong, but what about changing the word "watching" to "fetching."

Excellent work. Terry.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Terry! I haven't dabbled much in haiku before joining in February- But I'm finding it very interesting... and challenging. It's a beautiful way to briefly convey a message. The syllable restrictions help wordy writers (like myself) cut to the chase lol I appreciate your feedback, as always!
<3
Jessica

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Oh, I adore cats and this really appeased me. What a cute poem. And such a darling picture to match. I liked the imagery of feline reflection scaring the dog (smile).

Cats are such unique, elegant creatures, you captured it well in your poem.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you so much!! Cats are brilliant creatures!

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

dog chases cat
cat shatters mirror reflecting
blames it on the dog

great cat haiku!
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest

shelley :)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you, Shelley!!

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Jessica,

Hello,

well done! I love the words imagery and beautiful presentation. Good syllables count. In such short poem, it's better if you don't use the same word more than once. Also, try to keep it as brief as possible.

You could improve the flow.

See what I mean.....

dog chases
cat's reflection-
feline smirks

You can't smirk and nap at the same time. I think smirk is a good word to describe a cat. :)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Thank you so much for your feedback and critique, Gypsy! I've revised with your suggestions in mind. Would you mind letting me know what you think? Whenever you have a minute! Thanks so much!!
<3
Jessica

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Oh my, cats are devilishly smart, aren't they? The beat goes on though, and around and around the dog chases the cat to no avail. Delightful poem and response to the prompt, Jess.

Sending you my best today as always.
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Sally!! I love the new pic!
<3
Jess