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Ghost

Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Attempt"
Biography/Supernatural

18 total reviews 
Comment from LateBloomer
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Lea, a horrific and deeply personal story. No child should ever experience what you did. I don't know what it is, but somehow, these sex abusers find/choose children/victims that come from homes of neglect. Homes where no one is watching or caring. This is something that I've noticed about clergy who sexually abuse children. They know the children in their community who come from "problem" homes, and then they victimize them even more. Why? Because they can. Because no one will believe the child. Because there's no one at home who cares
about the child, or they are too many other problems at home, that a lot of things get overlooked or ignored. All of this is my humble opinion and watching, hearing, and reading about such things.

My dear Lea, you are, and have, probably suffered from PTSD. Not all PTSD is war related. I hope writing this story will help you recover and leave some of the horrific things that happened to you in the past.
You did an excellent job of telling the story, making your points, and still doing it in a "tasteful" way--not that you have anything to be ashamed of, but some reviewers may shy away from stories like yours.

I can understand how writing this is emotionally exhausting, and it takes a lot out of you. I'm saying this as a mom, try to do more than exhale, and give your mind and body sufficient time to mend in between chapters. FS members will still be here waiting for you.

Today you wrote something brave. God bless you, and may you find inner-peace. Margaret ~ LateBloomer

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
    Thank you again for this wonderful review I truly caring and thoughtful one and for this fine honor that you have given me I'm truly humbled enjoy your evening!
Comment from Reece Gibson
Excellent
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I am sorry to hear these things happened to you and I hope you can get some peace from writing. Pain can be a powerful tool for writing and some find writing to be healing.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
    Hi Reese thank you very much for reading for offering your comments so for taking the time to do so is an honor and a privilege to receive I thank you for your you're fine writing and for your insight I hope you have the best evening thanks again!
reply by Reece Gibson on 06-Jan-2024
    Thank you as well, Lea.
Comment from Julie G1
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So well written, a tale that continues. The writer's choice of apt imagery is very effective, and worked well for this reader. This story evokes the language of a survivor. I anticipate reading more such stories, keep on writing.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
    Thank you Julie so happy to have your reading I appreciate this so very much! And thank you for taking the time to have a read and provide your comments these are gold to me so thanks again I hope your evening is grand and you have everything you wish for in 2024!
Comment from lyenochka
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Was the father of the young Japanese boy your mother's new husband?
Were your siblings born at the time?
I guess all that abuse that you experienced made you fearless and perhaps even welcome that horrible accident. At least, in the hospital you didn't have to deal with those neighbors.
A heart-wrenching recalling of those horrible times.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
    Yes and yes answers to your two questions. Thank you so very kindly for your review and you're kindness. I'm always appreciating it and for your time especially best of all thank you again! I hope you have a wonderful holiday season And it's filled with love and joy! Thank you again!
reply by lyenochka on 20-Dec-2023
    You're gifted writer, Lea! I'm sorry I don't have the time to review your whole book as life will get busier for me. Also, the topic is very heavy. May God bring you full healing of those memories of the past as you bring them to light in writing. Blessings on your Christmas and all through the New Year!
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Well, like most cowboys, so late in the week, I'm all out of bullets. I'm referring to stars. It's hard for a normal person, if any of us truly are, to imagine what kind of monsters would mistreat a child, much less a five-year-old. But sadly, freaks constantly scavenge for the innocent. Makes me wish I could be the pervert exterminator.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
    That would be cool, be like an anti hero and take out all the pedophiles in the world! Thank you Ric for reading once again very happy to see you here! I appreciate your well well wishes and your kind comment. I want to wish you a happy holiday and hope your New Year's great, even if it's on our own, we gotta try and make it great anyway, so I'm cooking a Turkey dinner regardless, all who wanna come over. Come on over and I'll be a bit of a journey for Somerville, LO. L thank you again my friend!
Comment from patcelaw
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My heart really goes out to you with the story. I am impressed with your ability to write so well about a very disturbing time in your life. I wish that had never happened to you, but you seem to have overcome a great deal and have made something of yourself in spite of the difficulties. May God richly bless you and may others who read your story come to understanding their own problems. Patricia.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2023


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
    Patricia thank you again! I really appreciate your insight and your empathy. I also appreciate your fine review your great writing and your time. Above all I hope that you have a wonderful holiday too!
Comment from Gunner Lil
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Thank you for an easy read. This short chapter has very good flow and pace, Very good showing rather then just telling.
You keep the reader wanting to ask for more and makes them think.
Good job.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much for reading. I really appreciate your opinion and your thoughts on the matter. Your review is awesome. I thank you for your night be grand!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
Comment from T.A. Walk
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To start I noticed a few missed punctuations, a few misspellings... I did not note them.

No notes as I was captivated by your story. Well delivered and detailed. I am sorry for your experiences, but I am glad you are using your voice.

I am on a different path, yet eerily the same. I speak on my PTSD for others, as you are doing here.

Good luck, I wish you all the best with this.

STAY;

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much, I appreciate you reading. I'm a new writer. My first book sometimes messed up on pumptuation. So when anyone sees it and points it out. I'm always happy to see comments and make corrections. I appreciate you reading. I understand some can be difficult. So thank you very much and thank you for your review. Hope you have a great night!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is extremely well written and I'm out of sizes already because I've been reading through the night. You deserve more than sixes anyway. You serve a trophy.

With these horrible memories you have you can and will change this for other young girls. You could save yourself then but you can save yourself and others, now. Girls will one day read and tell on those hurting them. Mom's will read and realize their new boyfriends or husbands need to leave! You are doing a lot of good by writing this!! Keep going!!

With love & friendship,

Alexandra

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
    Alex, thank you, you are amazing reviewer, so good at it. Your inside is spectacular because you've been there. And you also know something about mental health too. Which is another connection we have thank you again my friend enjoy your night!
Comment from T B Botts
Exceptional
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Hello Lea,
I applaud you for having the bravery to put your story out where others can read it. I know all too often abuse occurs to the innocent. They make great targets, and all the more so when the people who were meant to protect them, don't. I'm so sorry that you suffered with such wide spread abuse. No child should go through what you did. I hope that writing this experience will be therapeutic and that you'll heal and find the peace that God intends for you.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
    Tom that such a wonderful review! Thank you very much, I also thank you for your fine rating. You're wonderful compassion, your insight, and your support. They are very much like gold to me.
    And I shall write about more of what has happeneding. How I managed to get out. I appreciate you reading I know. It's a hard read in places, but also know. It's a must read for Sam. This is part of a book I'm writing called ghost. It's in my portfolio if you wish to read, please do so. Thank you so much again. I really appreciate this and I hope you have the best of days!