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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "She Climbs"
NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest

45 total reviews 
Comment from Heather Knight
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What a beautiful poem! I wish I had a sixer left for you.
I love all the alliterations you use, but my favourite is to climb in curls. It's really quite original.
Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Heather! I truly appreciate that.
Comment from Eternal Muse
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Congrats on your win! I like the cute playfulness of this write, the charming rhyming and the winning presentation. Much enjoyed, was a pleasure to read and review.

A very well deserved win.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your kind words!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Congratulations, Jessica, on your first-place win.
I enjoyed your sweet little story. The alliterations
worked well. Your words were descriptive. I could
see everything you mentioned. Great art choice.
Thanks for sharing a fun poem, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    I appreciate that so much, Jan!
    <3
    Jessica
Comment from sunnilicious
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Congratulations on taking home the winning blue ribbon. I enjoyed your T, C, B, W alliterations running through the first 4 vereses.

Edit note: The poem is in present and past tenses. It's proper grammar even for poetry. Try to stick to one and run with it. So, -ing or -ed.

Nice work :)

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much! I appreciate the feedback and suggestion- I will revisit and revise.
Comment from Brandon Clark
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Absolutely above average and appropriately awarded as alliteration contest winner! Sorry...the use of alliteration was very well considered and not simply a jumble as my opening sentence here! The 7, 7 and rhyme scheme shows the consideration of your alliteration and was a unique way to separate it from others!

Great job and Congrats on the win!
Brandon

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Brandon! I appreciate your awesome review!
Comment from shelley kaye
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it's all about the climb...

great 7-line poem with alliteration
smooth rhyme and flow
nothing felt forced

a happy poem.

thank you for sharing
shelley :)



 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Shelley! That means a lot!
Comment from nomi338
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Excellent, I totally enjoyed the alliterating alliteration. You displayed remarkable skills in your thrilling description of an energetic, athletic youngster having a ball enjoying life through all of the possibilities that the life of a youngster entails and allows.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Nomi! I truly appreciate that.
Comment from Terry Broxson
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No wonder it won the rhyming contest. You have a wonderfully written poem. An excellent picture to illustrate the imagery that goes great together. It reminds me of when I climbed the tree at my grandmother's house with my cousin Sherri. She was a year younger and could outclimb me...seventy years ago. Excellent. Terry.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Terry!! Girls are quite the climbers lol thank you for your review!
    <3
    Jessica
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this tribute to girls writing prompt entry with us. I raised four boys, low and behold my boys have had daughters. I have enjoyed watching my granddaughters climb trees and participate in sports. I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
    I love this! My mother in law has three boys, and feels the same about my two daughters! Thanks so much for your review!
    <3
    Jessica
Comment from estory
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You captured this childhood moment of excitement at the world, a girl reaching out for this bird. It is a strong symbol of reaching out for your dreams. Here the bird image can embody hope, but also the fragility of dreams, how they can be here one minute and gone the next. so it's a complex image. estory

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
    Thank you for another insightful and perceptive review, I truly appreciate your understanding!