Growth
essence poem15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
It's easy to see why you won this contest. You've written a terrific essence poem here. You've got the inner rhyme and ending rhyme with six syllables/line. And your message is successfully delivered, that pain leads the way to gain when it comes to getting in shape or staying in shape.
I know this theory from personal experience. I ran almost 2000 miles on the Grand Bay Trail between 2005 and 2012. I was 55 when I started and 62 when I stopped because of a narrowed aortic valve. But I missed it so much, I started walking the trail a couple of years later, heart attack or no heart attack. This year, so far, I've walked 308.3 miles since early April. I've done 3 miles in 47 minutes, but most of the time it's closer to 55 minutes. My goal is 500 miles by year end.
I guess the saying I've heard over and over goes like this: "No pain/no gain."
Late congrats!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Hi Bill,
It's easy to see why you won this contest. You've written a terrific essence poem here. You've got the inner rhyme and ending rhyme with six syllables/line. And your message is successfully delivered, that pain leads the way to gain when it comes to getting in shape or staying in shape.
I know this theory from personal experience. I ran almost 2000 miles on the Grand Bay Trail between 2005 and 2012. I was 55 when I started and 62 when I stopped because of a narrowed aortic valve. But I missed it so much, I started walking the trail a couple of years later, heart attack or no heart attack. This year, so far, I've walked 308.3 miles since early April. I've done 3 miles in 47 minutes, but most of the time it's closer to 55 minutes. My goal is 500 miles by year end.
I guess the saying I've heard over and over goes like this: "No pain/no gain."
Late congrats!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Kimbob. Keep up the moving. God bless you.
Comment from patricia dillon
A sentiment one recoils from but which we all need to have some reflection on sooner or later. It is also a very appropriate entry for this Easter season.
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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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A sentiment one recoils from but which we all need to have some reflection on sooner or later. It is also a very appropriate entry for this Easter season.
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Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Patricia.
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You're welcome
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A very profound and memorable essence poem with skilful rhythm and perfectly placed rhyme. Well done in the contest. Worthy winner. Best wishes Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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A very profound and memorable essence poem with skilful rhythm and perfectly placed rhyme. Well done in the contest. Worthy winner. Best wishes Debbie
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Debbie
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your essence poem has good internal rhymes with gain and pain, and the end line rhymes of know and grow. Unfortunately I think this is true we need to experience pain to realise, later, what we have gained. I wish you luck in the contest, cheers.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Your essence poem has good internal rhymes with gain and pain, and the end line rhymes of know and grow. Unfortunately I think this is true we need to experience pain to realise, later, what we have gained. I wish you luck in the contest, cheers.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Valda
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the essence poem contest. The internal and end rhymes work well and the message itself is reflective and true. A thoughtful write. Well done and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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This is a good entry for the essence poem contest. The internal and end rhymes work well and the message itself is reflective and true. A thoughtful write. Well done and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you, DD.
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, very true and an insightful message here. It is well presented, with a good choice of image to accompany your words. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Yes, very true and an insightful message here. It is well presented, with a good choice of image to accompany your words. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Wendy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Essence poem contest. Good form composition.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Excellent entry for the Essence poem contest. Good form composition.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Gypsy
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a truthful poem. Pain helps us grow, we cannot avoid it or try to cover it up with distractions. It's there for a reason. Embracing our wounds and paying attention to them allows them to heal faster.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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What a truthful poem. Pain helps us grow, we cannot avoid it or try to cover it up with distractions. It's there for a reason. Embracing our wounds and paying attention to them allows them to heal faster.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Rosemary
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Is this pain in a loving relationship or pain from exercise? Not sure, but experience teaches us to navigate life and avoid these painful situations, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Is this pain in a loving relationship or pain from exercise? Not sure, but experience teaches us to navigate life and avoid these painful situations, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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An old adage of no pain no gain is implied here.
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An old adage of no pain no gain is implied here.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and good presentation.
-You met all of the requirements for the poem.
-Effective description and required rhyme.
-You also have a good message about gain
and how sometimes it means going through pain
in order to grow.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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-Nice image and good presentation.
-You met all of the requirements for the poem.
-Effective description and required rhyme.
-You also have a good message about gain
and how sometimes it means going through pain
in order to grow.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Pam
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You are welcome.
