Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Coffee For Men"NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
18 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
What an adorable poem for your "sweets-loving sweet husband". Love your humor, rhymes, meter and cadence, fantastic visuals and presentation.
This stood out and brought a big smile on my face:
His tall, dark, and handsome looks; not to mention- he reads books
Good luck in the contest if it's still running.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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What an adorable poem for your "sweets-loving sweet husband". Love your humor, rhymes, meter and cadence, fantastic visuals and presentation.
This stood out and brought a big smile on my face:
His tall, dark, and handsome looks; not to mention- he reads books
Good luck in the contest if it's still running.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Minglement
What a fun, inspiring little write about what brings and keeps us together, often a sense of humor. My honey likes his extra light as well - with honey! Who knew. Thnks for sharing ;)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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What a fun, inspiring little write about what brings and keeps us together, often a sense of humor. My honey likes his extra light as well - with honey! Who knew. Thnks for sharing ;)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you! I appreciate that so much :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Coffee for Men, reminds me a bit of my wife's take on me. She looks for fault and can only find things like the things I drink or the banks I rob. I look like a Shrek doll.
I like your poem.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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This poem, Coffee for Men, reminds me a bit of my wife's take on me. She looks for fault and can only find things like the things I drink or the banks I rob. I look like a Shrek doll.
I like your poem.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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lol women. Thanks so much!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, how lucky are you to have a man who enjoys coffee as a "special treat" - I thought only women felt that way, lol!
And he still looks like a Ken Doll. Even better!
Really enjoyed this sweet treat of a poem.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Well, how lucky are you to have a man who enjoys coffee as a "special treat" - I thought only women felt that way, lol!
And he still looks like a Ken Doll. Even better!
Really enjoyed this sweet treat of a poem.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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lol thank you, Pam! I am lucky.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, your husband sounds like a delight. As a coffee lover myself, I can appreciate his fondness for the product. However, I don't use any sugar, but I'm sure his brew is perfect.
Of special note:
To add to his odd favor, he adds caramel flavor
(I, too, love caramel coffee, but the coffee grinds have caramel flavor.)
I know that your husband has good taste. He chose you, or perhaps, you chose him. Wink-wink.
Your poem reads and flows well, and is a perfect entry for the light and sweet contest. Well done. Good luck in the voting booth. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Hello author, your husband sounds like a delight. As a coffee lover myself, I can appreciate his fondness for the product. However, I don't use any sugar, but I'm sure his brew is perfect.
Of special note:
To add to his odd favor, he adds caramel flavor
(I, too, love caramel coffee, but the coffee grinds have caramel flavor.)
I know that your husband has good taste. He chose you, or perhaps, you chose him. Wink-wink.
Your poem reads and flows well, and is a perfect entry for the light and sweet contest. Well done. Good luck in the voting booth. LateBloomer
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much! I appreciate that!!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What a sweet poem about your sweet-loving man. It's easy to see the added sugar scoops, but the caramel and whipped cream is over the top, unless you are me! What a great job you did with the rhyming and rhythm of this piece.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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What a sweet poem about your sweet-loving man. It's easy to see the added sugar scoops, but the caramel and whipped cream is over the top, unless you are me! What a great job you did with the rhyming and rhythm of this piece.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much!
<3
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi.
I like the internal rhyme in each line. It could have been written in rhyming couplets. I sort of reads that way anyway.
He sounds like a good man with a major sweet tooth. It seems he really doesn't like coffee if he needs so many sweet additions. Why not just make a coffee flavored milkshake?
One error I found is whit should be wit.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Hi.
I like the internal rhyme in each line. It could have been written in rhyming couplets. I sort of reads that way anyway.
He sounds like a good man with a major sweet tooth. It seems he really doesn't like coffee if he needs so many sweet additions. Why not just make a coffee flavored milkshake?
One error I found is whit should be wit.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Joan! I appreciate the catch, I made that edit:)
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You're welcome, Jessica. Glad I could help.
Joan
Comment from Kerry Foley
Hi my friend, this is an adorable poem you've penned. It has great alliteration and rhythm. I can see the sweetness and happiness in your relationship. That's a blessing in my friend.
Laughter is good for the soul.
I love lots of sugar in my coffee and all the bells and whistles and whip cream lol
-Kerry
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Hi my friend, this is an adorable poem you've penned. It has great alliteration and rhythm. I can see the sweetness and happiness in your relationship. That's a blessing in my friend.
Laughter is good for the soul.
I love lots of sugar in my coffee and all the bells and whistles and whip cream lol
-Kerry
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Kerry!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A real sense of humour is seen here! It does seem somehow odd for a man to have a sweet tooth. If this is his only fault, well she is very lucky!
There are many worse faults which may seem more 'masculine'!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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A real sense of humour is seen here! It does seem somehow odd for a man to have a sweet tooth. If this is his only fault, well she is very lucky!
There are many worse faults which may seem more 'masculine'!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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I completely agree! I am quite lucky. I just couldn't pass up an opportunity to tease him, though ;) thank you for your review!
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Best wishes from UK!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your rhyming within the sentences, but then I like poetry rhyming. The poem's story is a great example of life, love, and laughter. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Like your rhyming within the sentences, but then I like poetry rhyming. The poem's story is a great example of life, love, and laughter. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much! <3