DARK NIGHT AND DARK DAY
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "DARK NIGHT & Day, Chapter 7"Romance of a new Alaskan
13 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
Six stars for this absolutely perfect post. I did not find a single misspelled word or missing comma or misplaced word or anything I thought should be corrected, other than the word fianc�??�?�© in your introductory notes. I know you can easily fix that if you want to simply delete the messy word and type into this post the correct letters. It will continue to happen if you copy and paste from your computer, for reasons no one seems to understand.
Thanks for sharing this fascinating story. I'm very much enjoying how you incorporate so much of "only in Alaska" bits of captivating detail.
MM
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Six stars for this absolutely perfect post. I did not find a single misspelled word or missing comma or misplaced word or anything I thought should be corrected, other than the word fianc�??�?�© in your introductory notes. I know you can easily fix that if you want to simply delete the messy word and type into this post the correct letters. It will continue to happen if you copy and paste from your computer, for reasons no one seems to understand.
Thanks for sharing this fascinating story. I'm very much enjoying how you incorporate so much of "only in Alaska" bits of captivating detail.
MM
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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THANKS for the big points and for getting me to look at the intro notes. I corrected fiancé in story, but missed that one. I'll keep trying to think of a way to go on this one, MissM.
Comment from Annmuma
Another very entertaining chapter and a deeper look at the characters. I love it. Great word pictures and easy to follow dialogue. I saw no spag and I look forward to the next chapter. ann
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Another very entertaining chapter and a deeper look at the characters. I love it. Great word pictures and easy to follow dialogue. I saw no spag and I look forward to the next chapter. ann
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Ann. I'm also looking forward to settling what will happen on the next chapter. You wish me luck.
Comment from Jim Wile
This is the first chapter I've read, and I enjoyed it very much. The characters were believable, and the dialog was good. I like the way Julie burst out laughing at the bottom of the hill rather than show embarrassment, and Roger laughed along with her. Very believable. I can see a romance brewing. Nice job of writing. Jim
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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This is the first chapter I've read, and I enjoyed it very much. The characters were believable, and the dialog was good. I like the way Julie burst out laughing at the bottom of the hill rather than show embarrassment, and Roger laughed along with her. Very believable. I can see a romance brewing. Nice job of writing. Jim
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Very sweet of you to be encouraging. I'm a lazy writer, but you inspire me to get back at it!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Lol, she didn't expect that, now, did she! And it looks like she found the puppy as well. And as a bonus, (or not) she's wrapped in the arms of a strong handsome man!! Lol. I really enjoyed this chapter, well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Lol, she didn't expect that, now, did she! And it looks like she found the puppy as well. And as a bonus, (or not) she's wrapped in the arms of a strong handsome man!! Lol. I really enjoyed this chapter, well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thanks for enjoying it. You are encouraging to move on to find a solution.
Comment from royowen
I love the easy way you write, as if I'm listening to the most delightful story satisfying my interest and time, and thus entertaining me in the most salubrious way. I love puppies and pets, they have been one of our sources of joy, like our children and grands, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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I love the easy way you write, as if I'm listening to the most delightful story satisfying my interest and time, and thus entertaining me in the most salubrious way. I love puppies and pets, they have been one of our sources of joy, like our children and grands, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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So glad to know you have read this Chapter. I hope to get another one on it way before too long. Many thanks!
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Well done
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great chapter, and I enjoyed reading it. It was kept moving by those puppies. Especially the one that escaped. Is Marj going to overcome her aversion to men before her year is up? Have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Great chapter, and I enjoyed reading it. It was kept moving by those puppies. Especially the one that escaped. Is Marj going to overcome her aversion to men before her year is up? Have a wonderful afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thanks for spotting this chapter. It makes me happy to for your comments!
Comment from forestport12
Love the dialogue. It seemed genuinely authentic and keeps me in the moment, esp. without the tags. Puts you there in the conversation with them. I'm no expert on grammar and the like, but I like to think I know a good story well told when I read it!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Love the dialogue. It seemed genuinely authentic and keeps me in the moment, esp. without the tags. Puts you there in the conversation with them. I'm no expert on grammar and the like, but I like to think I know a good story well told when I read it!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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So nice of your to review this chapter. I very much appreciate your comments.
Comment from Ulla
She tried to raise up = to rise up. Why not just say ' to stand up" Would read so much more naturally. Just a suggestion.
I like this story, and would like to read on. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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She tried to raise up = to rise up. Why not just say ' to stand up" Would read so much more naturally. Just a suggestion.
I like this story, and would like to read on. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Many thanks for suggesting I consider a correction. Appreciate your comments!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really like this story. I am pretty sure Marjorie and Roger will eventually get together. She's protesting way too much. LOL
Marjorie raised her voice. "I'm not going in until you show me all those dog houses." (comma after 'voice')
Julie called out, "I'll go get the soup to boil." (you can omit 'go')
Car lights beamed on her roll to the bottom. Sudden brakes squeaked loud and puppy barking filled the air. A truck door banged shut and the driver grabbed hold of a puppy. (Is it a car or truck? You could say 'Vehicle lights'....) Then you need a space for dialogue
"Hey, what's going on? Wait, is that you, Marj?" (Need a space for the dialogue.)
Sprawled in deep snow, she tried to raise up but couldn't, nor could she control herself. Laughing overtook her. (space)
Roger laughed too. He handed the puppy down to her before wrapping strong arms around a fully snow-covered woman.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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I really like this story. I am pretty sure Marjorie and Roger will eventually get together. She's protesting way too much. LOL
Marjorie raised her voice. "I'm not going in until you show me all those dog houses." (comma after 'voice')
Julie called out, "I'll go get the soup to boil." (you can omit 'go')
Car lights beamed on her roll to the bottom. Sudden brakes squeaked loud and puppy barking filled the air. A truck door banged shut and the driver grabbed hold of a puppy. (Is it a car or truck? You could say 'Vehicle lights'....) Then you need a space for dialogue
"Hey, what's going on? Wait, is that you, Marj?" (Need a space for the dialogue.)
Sprawled in deep snow, she tried to raise up but couldn't, nor could she control herself. Laughing overtook her. (space)
Roger laughed too. He handed the puppy down to her before wrapping strong arms around a fully snow-covered woman.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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It is so much help to learn about words or phrases that need to be changed or reconsidered. Your review gives real help. Thanks.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A very interesting setting and background! The snow and the cold are almost tangible. The introduction of the huskies and racing will appeal to many readers. I look forward to the next chapter!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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A very interesting setting and background! The snow and the cold are almost tangible. The introduction of the huskies and racing will appeal to many readers. I look forward to the next chapter!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thanks for taking time to read this chapter. Your comments manage to encourage me to get dog racing into the next pages.
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Yes, it appeals to dog lovers, adventure
fans and has plenty of dramatic potential!
