Busted
And his own daughter ratted him out39 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Children are so honest--sometimes, like in this story, to the embarrassment to the parent. Hiding in the back room, huh? Excellent artwork to support the story.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Children are so honest--sometimes, like in this story, to the embarrassment to the parent. Hiding in the back room, huh? Excellent artwork to support the story.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Hi Debi, are you wondering about the hiding in the back room? It is because salesmen are pushy and my husband used to take my Daughter in the back so they wouldn't; have to go to the door. Our Schwansman used to be so pushy that no matter how much you ordered he would keep asking if you needed other things. I hope that answers your questions. Thanks for the kind review dear friend.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
By the title and the line above the title I thought this was about a daughter ratting out her father for some sordid affair but when it came to the end of this story it was innocently about the ice cream man and how the two of them hid from the salesman in the backroom. I don't get it. I do not understand the humor in this nor do I appreciate the implication of a sordid affair between a father and his daughter.
The humor I am sorry to say is lost for me.
Jesse
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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By the title and the line above the title I thought this was about a daughter ratting out her father for some sordid affair but when it came to the end of this story it was innocently about the ice cream man and how the two of them hid from the salesman in the backroom. I don't get it. I do not understand the humor in this nor do I appreciate the implication of a sordid affair between a father and his daughter.
The humor I am sorry to say is lost for me.
Jesse
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Jesse, shame on you then for letting your mind go there. Wow, that is the last thing in the world that I would have expected anyone to think. Fifty words aren't many, but I haven't heard from anyone else who didn't think it was cute, funny and innocent. And for sure from anyone who thought on those lines. That's horrible. I can understand you not understanding, but what I can't and wont' understand is that you thought for one movement it was even jokingly supposed to hint or sound that way. It would take a warped mind to write such a thing, especially about your own child and husband. Maybe if you read again without the warped part on your mind, you could see that the humor was about the dad making excuses that they haven't been there for so long and my daughter innocently ratting him out by saying no we haven't been gone. We have been avoiding opening the door so we don't have to deal with pushy salesmen. Which our Schwan's men are very pushy. I wish I could add an lol, but I can't . You just way overthought or had your mind in the wrong place on this one, my friend.
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I apologize, but, I don't live in a cutesy world. I live in the real world where these things happen from time to time and when they do people write about them in the news and on social media.
I don't see it as funny when these things happen and I still don't.
My mind is not in the gutter, it is those people whose minds are in the gutter.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
I like this post because it is refined and subtle fun, and I even have an intuition that this might be a lived experience!!
Great job, and Good Luck for the contest
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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I like this post because it is refined and subtle fun, and I even have an intuition that this might be a lived experience!!
Great job, and Good Luck for the contest
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Oh Mario, it is not only true, they hid from anyone they didn't want to open the door to. I do admit our Schwan's man was so pushy that no matter how much you bought, he kept trying to get you to order more. And if they didn't hide, and he saw them in the house he would knock until they opened . Lol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
From the mouths of babes. LOL Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I had fun reading and smiled.
"sorry, seems we're always gone." Then our honest three-year-old spoke up and announced,
"no, we aren't daddy. We always hide from pushy salesmen, in back room." (TRY - "Sorry, seems we're always gone."
Then our honest three-year-old spoke up and announced, "No, we aren't daddy. We always hide from pushy salesmen, in back room."
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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From the mouths of babes. LOL Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I had fun reading and smiled.
"sorry, seems we're always gone." Then our honest three-year-old spoke up and announced,
"no, we aren't daddy. We always hide from pushy salesmen, in back room." (TRY - "Sorry, seems we're always gone."
Then our honest three-year-old spoke up and announced, "No, we aren't daddy. We always hide from pushy salesmen, in back room."
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thanks Barb, I have a bad habit of forgetting to capping those words since I don't use much in poetry. And that is what I am mostly using. It just amazes me that after spending $130. a year for Grammarly, that it doesn't point that out. However, you are such a great reviewer. You have always been one of my faves,w a nice word to say, but awesome feedback too. Lol, I just have to tell you that every time I use the words, the following morning, I think of you. So your reviews are priceless dear friend. Thanks.
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Thank you for the encouragement. I really enjoyed reading this.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is very funny and hilarious. Excellent work! Nice job! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck!
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is very funny and hilarious. Excellent work! Nice job! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
Out of the mouths of babes! Your husband, I'm sure was slightly embarrassed, but that won't stop Schwan from appearing weekly. LOL Great piece! Best, JohnC
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Out of the mouths of babes! Your husband, I'm sure was slightly embarrassed, but that won't stop Schwan from appearing weekly. LOL Great piece! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Haha! Leave it to a toddler to tell the truth. And, you can't tell them 'not to tell.' They'll say, "Daddy said not to tell you." This is a funny and cute story. Best wishes in the contest.
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Haha! Leave it to a toddler to tell the truth. And, you can't tell them 'not to tell.' They'll say, "Daddy said not to tell you." This is a funny and cute story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
Comment from Jim Wile
This was very humorous and makes a good point: Don't rely on a little kid to corroborate an untruth. They are too honest and guileless and will make a fool out of you. Like the title of the old Art Linkletter show, kids say the darnedest things.
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This was very humorous and makes a good point: Don't rely on a little kid to corroborate an untruth. They are too honest and guileless and will make a fool out of you. Like the title of the old Art Linkletter show, kids say the darnedest things.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
Comment from Shirley McLain
OK, right now you have my vote. This reminds me of my kids. I was in line at Walmart, and a dirty looking person was in front of my three year old, who was in my arms and asked me in a loud voice "Why does that man smell so bad? I could've crawled under the counter. You never know what will come out of their mouth. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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OK, right now you have my vote. This reminds me of my kids. I was in line at Walmart, and a dirty looking person was in front of my three year old, who was in my arms and asked me in a loud voice "Why does that man smell so bad? I could've crawled under the counter. You never know what will come out of their mouth. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Oh Shirley, I just learned never to take a drink while reading reviews because I just sprayed my whole keyboard with water, from laughing so hard. That was hilarious. If you aren't in this contest, you should be with that story. Hahahahaha! Thanks Hon, for the greatest review ever.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, out of the mouth of babes, right, Mystery Author?
I enjoyed your fun contest entry. The picture was perfect.
I liked the fancy font and the formatting of the lines. You
gave readers great information before the twist at the end.
Your words were descriptive. I could envision this as I read.
Thanks for the laugh and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Haha, out of the mouth of babes, right, Mystery Author?
I enjoyed your fun contest entry. The picture was perfect.
I liked the fancy font and the formatting of the lines. You
gave readers great information before the twist at the end.
Your words were descriptive. I could envision this as I read.
Thanks for the laugh and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thanks Jan. Yes, my husband would rather hide from the Schwan's man than put up with the pushy salesman. Thanks for reading, reviewing and your fun comments.
