Busted
And his own daughter ratted him out39 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, ha, ha, ha. Very cute, very good. A person can always count on children to say the darnedest things. Of special note:
We always hide in the back room.
(Thanks for "outing" daddy. Lol.)
Well-chosen photo. This story made me laugh. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
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Hello author, ha, ha, ha. Very cute, very good. A person can always count on children to say the darnedest things. Of special note:
We always hide in the back room.
(Thanks for "outing" daddy. Lol.)
Well-chosen photo. This story made me laugh. Well done. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good story. Very well written.
Nothing wrong with laughing at the old stuff!
I don't think you needed your last comma, and it would be better with 'in the back room' after 'hide'
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Good story. Very well written.
Nothing wrong with laughing at the old stuff!
I don't think you needed your last comma, and it would be better with 'in the back room' after 'hide'
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Gotcha! And thank you Wayne. Love the feedback. I appreciate your kind comments for my story too, dear friend.
Comment from Faith Williams
Lol... that's too funny, Debi! Yes, children have a way of spreading the truth around no matter what. Thanks for sharing your funny story. It definitely brought a smile to my face.
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Lol... that's too funny, Debi! Yes, children have a way of spreading the truth around no matter what. Thanks for sharing your funny story. It definitely brought a smile to my face.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh goodness, what an innocent child. The image is so cute! I like your short story and image. I can imagine several customers hide from the ice cream man, so they don't have to purchase a product. Hilarious.
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Oh goodness, what an innocent child. The image is so cute! I like your short story and image. I can imagine several customers hide from the ice cream man, so they don't have to purchase a product. Hilarious.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
Comment from jessizero
I laughed at this, and I laughed at your author's notes, too. Children can be honest to a fault. You told the humorous story very succinctly. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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I laughed at this, and I laughed at your author's notes, too. Children can be honest to a fault. You told the humorous story very succinctly. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a fun entry for the humorous 50 word story contest. I smiled when I read the story but when I read the author's notes I chuckled louder. Your daughter's reply... now that was funny. Either way, I'm still smiling. Well done and best of luck in the competition.
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This is a fun entry for the humorous 50 word story contest. I smiled when I read the story but when I read the author's notes I chuckled louder. Your daughter's reply... now that was funny. Either way, I'm still smiling. Well done and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This humorous fifty-word story, Busted, has the proper word count and pinpoints that moment of pure joy as the innocent lead the family to order more frozen entrees.
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This humorous fifty-word story, Busted, has the proper word count and pinpoints that moment of pure joy as the innocent lead the family to order more frozen entrees.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
Comment from Nicki Nance
Your daughter probably outed a lot of people that day. What a cute story. I'm glad your daughter relented and laughed with you. This was a great choice for the humor story.
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Your daughter probably outed a lot of people that day. What a cute story. I'm glad your daughter relented and laughed with you. This was a great choice for the humor story.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
Comment from kahpot
Ha! Ha! there is no hiding the truth from the little ones, gorgeous photo, I can't remember how pushy our ice cream truck person was, but the ice creams were very nice, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Ha! Ha! there is no hiding the truth from the little ones, gorgeous photo, I can't remember how pushy our ice cream truck person was, but the ice creams were very nice, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 50 Word Story contest. The text is a great size. The story is stated with clarity and is easily understood. We have all had instances in which our children have told things we wish they had not mentioned. Your AN is also funny. You did a good job with a few words in telling a solid and relatable story. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a good entry into the 50 Word Story contest. The text is a great size. The story is stated with clarity and is easily understood. We have all had instances in which our children have told things we wish they had not mentioned. Your AN is also funny. You did a good job with a few words in telling a solid and relatable story. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
