In Portman Square
Rondeau ~ Sad poetry15 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
It is difficult to understand how cities allow the homeless to ravage a city's landscape, regardless if it is in London, or San Francisco or New Delhi but they do with too great regularity.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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It is difficult to understand how cities allow the homeless to ravage a city's landscape, regardless if it is in London, or San Francisco or New Delhi but they do with too great regularity.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Hi Tom... I agree that urban communities really have a challenge with the homeless and the drug culture that is also part of it. Thanks for the great review!!
Melissa
Comment from BeyondtheShadows
Congratulations! This is truly a sad poem indeed. Too much truth lies within your words and I know first hand how drugs can destroy lives. It is depressing to witness. Again a beautiful poem!
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Congratulations! This is truly a sad poem indeed. Too much truth lies within your words and I know first hand how drugs can destroy lives. It is depressing to witness. Again a beautiful poem!
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your empathetic review and understanding :)
Melissa
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
So perfectly captured in poetry and so sad for them and all of humankind
that life becomes so pointless.
Every word fits perfectly and reality unfolds with each word, sentence and stanza.
****** virtual six
Congratulations
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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So perfectly captured in poetry and so sad for them and all of humankind
that life becomes so pointless.
Every word fits perfectly and reality unfolds with each word, sentence and stanza.
****** virtual six
Congratulations
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you Shirley!! I'm so glad you were empathetic to the unfolding of the sadness found at these locations. It seems every urban city can lay claim to at least one of these locations. It is sooo sad.
Melissa
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Well done. It flowed well and it has nice rhythm.
You do well painting a picture of a park being abused.
Just a suggestion, what if you ended your poem with, " in Portland Square"?
Thanks for the great read.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Well done. It flowed well and it has nice rhythm.
You do well painting a picture of a park being abused.
Just a suggestion, what if you ended your poem with, " in Portland Square"?
Thanks for the great read.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Hi Rebecca. Thanks for your suggestion. Since this was a rondeau, it did require a repetitive phrase from the first line... I chose 'beneath a bench' because it portrayed a baseness of living that you wouldn't get in 'in Portman Square'. So glad you liked it, even though it is sad.
Melissa
Comment from Wendy G
Well written, insightful, authentic and very thoughtful. It is very sad - and sad too for the families and for all who see with aheart of compassion that they are lost and alone, without strengthto battle their addictions and make a change. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Well written, insightful, authentic and very thoughtful. It is very sad - and sad too for the families and for all who see with aheart of compassion that they are lost and alone, without strengthto battle their addictions and make a change. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much Wendy!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Powerful and well-crafted, Mystery Writer.
And the scene that you portray is, sadly and realistically, occuring on every city and state throughout America...
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Powerful and well-crafted, Mystery Writer.
And the scene that you portray is, sadly and realistically, occuring on every city and state throughout America...
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much sweet Diane!!
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Oh my goodness, Mystery Writer!
It's been a long time since anyone has termed me "sweet!" :) :)
Best Wishes!
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Haha...I'll have to PM you about this after the contest is closed... lots to say :)
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Oh! I would love that, Mystery Writer! :)
Comment from lyenochka
This is a beautifully written rondeau! And it is not only sad for the people who resort to drugs to feel some sense of worth. But what's even greater is the compassion of the poet who doesn't judge them.
Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is a beautifully written rondeau! And it is not only sad for the people who resort to drugs to feel some sense of worth. But what's even greater is the compassion of the poet who doesn't judge them.
Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much, sweet Helen!
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I don't know who you are but you got my vote! Beautiful poem!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the SAD poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. You use great descriptions for the homeless drug addicts in this urban area. Your poem looks squeezed into the poem box. Expand the box by dropping the first line down one space and going to the last word in the poem and hitting enter once. Great spacing enhances the presentation. Your visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the SAD poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. You use great descriptions for the homeless drug addicts in this urban area. Your poem looks squeezed into the poem box. Expand the box by dropping the first line down one space and going to the last word in the poem and hitting enter once. Great spacing enhances the presentation. Your visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much, Sandra!
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You are welcome.
Comment from LyndaS
A very powerful post! Even though it's excellent in form and presentation, it's still depressing as hell. Which was the point. Your words and phrasing capture the bleak situation beneath this bench. Love the title. You should do well in this contest. Well done!
Lynda
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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A very powerful post! Even though it's excellent in form and presentation, it's still depressing as hell. Which was the point. Your words and phrasing capture the bleak situation beneath this bench. Love the title. You should do well in this contest. Well done!
Lynda
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, Linda!!
Comment from Sally Law
Oh, mystery poet, this is truly sad and one I can relate to, unfortunately. My dad was ruined by addictions. I think the devil lives within these things.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Oh, mystery poet, this is truly sad and one I can relate to, unfortunately. My dad was ruined by addictions. I think the devil lives within these things.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much, Sally!
