Baaaa Baa Baaa
Flash Club entry for the Sheep Challenge19 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a cute and heartwarming story. I saw the news video that merely said the sheep escaped. In your story, I liked the added detail of the sheep following the ram along the highway. I could imagine how that must have looked. You are right. In reality, people would take pictures while some would try to scare the sheep with honking horns. The best part is, the sheep were relocated to a safe home. Great fiction based on facts.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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This is a cute and heartwarming story. I saw the news video that merely said the sheep escaped. In your story, I liked the added detail of the sheep following the ram along the highway. I could imagine how that must have looked. You are right. In reality, people would take pictures while some would try to scare the sheep with honking horns. The best part is, the sheep were relocated to a safe home. Great fiction based on facts.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much.
John
Comment from JT traveller
A truly endearing story with a happy ending. What is not to like? A great choice of illustration to highlight your story. You have created vivid imagery throughout. A great read.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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A truly endearing story with a happy ending. What is not to like? A great choice of illustration to highlight your story. You have created vivid imagery throughout. A great read.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thanks, Jacqueline for stopping to read and share.
John
Comment from Wayne Fowler
And a nice ending, it is. Good work.
the flock were introduced slowly to there new outdoor environment - oops (their)
I watched a couple videos of herding dogs. They are truly amazing!
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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And a nice ending, it is. Good work.
the flock were introduced slowly to there new outdoor environment - oops (their)
I watched a couple videos of herding dogs. They are truly amazing!
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Wayne for reading my post and sharing your thoughts,
John
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi John, your story is sweet and endearing, and it is filled with good imagery. More and more on the News, we are hearing about animals being shipped to slaughter houses, and by the grace of God, one of them escape. There are then saved--it was not his/her time. Thank you for sharing this happy and upbeat story. It made me smile. I especially liked:
"Baaaa .... Baaa .... Baaaa," meant follow me,
(Everyone needs a Leader of the pack. On a different note, "gobble, gobble" means Happy Thanksgiving. Lol.)
Well chosen photo. John, all the farms are disappearing before our very eyes. NJ had some, but even they are going away. So much for living in the Garden State.
A fun story. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hi John, your story is sweet and endearing, and it is filled with good imagery. More and more on the News, we are hearing about animals being shipped to slaughter houses, and by the grace of God, one of them escape. There are then saved--it was not his/her time. Thank you for sharing this happy and upbeat story. It made me smile. I especially liked:
"Baaaa .... Baaa .... Baaaa," meant follow me,
(Everyone needs a Leader of the pack. On a different note, "gobble, gobble" means Happy Thanksgiving. Lol.)
Well chosen photo. John, all the farms are disappearing before our very eyes. NJ had some, but even they are going away. So much for living in the Garden State.
A fun story. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you, neighbor for this great review! Just this morning CBS 5:00am news had a brief clip of a cow escaping from a slaughterhouse in Brooklyn (I think, my age is stopping me from remembering).
Anyway, thank you, Margaret for a fine review.
Baaa? Baaaaaa, means good night!
John
Comment from Wendy G
This was a sweet story - and I am very glad the animals were rescued from inhumane treatment and an untimely death. But I think you must have written it a bit too fast! Sorry - I hope you don't mind the following suggestions to edit.)
Wendy
1. "there" should be "their" (twice).
2. "The dilapidated wood fence, held in its confines ...": remove that comma, and put it after "held"
3. "it's animal instincts kicked in" (no apostrophe, as the possessive pronoun is "its", and "it's" is an abbreviation for "it is")
4. "Whizzed", not "wizzed"
5. "veterinarians" (no apostrophe, as this is a plural)
6. "a week's time" (needs apostrophe)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This was a sweet story - and I am very glad the animals were rescued from inhumane treatment and an untimely death. But I think you must have written it a bit too fast! Sorry - I hope you don't mind the following suggestions to edit.)
Wendy
1. "there" should be "their" (twice).
2. "The dilapidated wood fence, held in its confines ...": remove that comma, and put it after "held"
3. "it's animal instincts kicked in" (no apostrophe, as the possessive pronoun is "its", and "it's" is an abbreviation for "it is")
4. "Whizzed", not "wizzed"
5. "veterinarians" (no apostrophe, as this is a plural)
6. "a week's time" (needs apostrophe)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Yikes? how embarrassing! Sorry about that.
Thank you for reading and correcting! I do appreciate it very much?
John
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Very welcome. That's what we are meant to do - help each other. I just didn't want to upset you.
W
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I have thick skin, no worries. I respect you and your reviews!
John
Comment from damommy
I'm glad the others were smart enough to follow the ram. They had the good sense to stay off the road. Now, they live out their happy lives in a sanctuary.
- with [their] phones.
- honked [their] horns
- slowly exited [their]
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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I'm glad the others were smart enough to follow the ram. They had the good sense to stay off the road. Now, they live out their happy lives in a sanctuary.
- with [their] phones.
- honked [their] horns
- slowly exited [their]
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and correct. I appreciate it.
John
Comment from BethShelby
I like stories with happy ending. I know it isn't realalistic to hope for ending for all animals, especially if you are a meat eater. I could easily live without meat and mostly do, so I appreciate you letting these fictional animal escape.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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I like stories with happy ending. I know it isn't realalistic to hope for ending for all animals, especially if you are a meat eater. I could easily live without meat and mostly do, so I appreciate you letting these fictional animal escape.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Beth. I enjoyed your review.
John
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your club entry, John. I enjoyed
reading it and was hoping the sheep would be safe. Your
words were descriptive in that I could see this little caravan
following their leader. I loved the way you had them talking.
Of course, they all understood. I loved the ending. Loved the
picture.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Cars and trucks were wizzing [ whizzing ] by. Some slowed down to look and take photographs with there [ their ]phones. Some slowed and honked there [ their ] horns in
Each officer, quietly and slowly exited there[ their ]
In a weeks[ week's [ time, the flock were introduced slowly to
there [ their ] new
title has some of those weird characters.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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You did a great job with your club entry, John. I enjoyed
reading it and was hoping the sheep would be safe. Your
words were descriptive in that I could see this little caravan
following their leader. I loved the way you had them talking.
Of course, they all understood. I loved the ending. Loved the
picture.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Cars and trucks were wizzing [ whizzing ] by. Some slowed down to look and take photographs with there [ their ]phones. Some slowed and honked there [ their ] horns in
Each officer, quietly and slowly exited there[ their ]
In a weeks[ week's [ time, the flock were introduced slowly to
there [ their ] new
title has some of those weird characters.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you for reading and correcting. I can?t seem to get these same mistakes corrected. Thick headed!
I appreciate it very much.
John
Comment from royowen
I do enjoy a happy story with a happy ending. Initially confined in a clandestine place, where sundry slaughtering takes place, animals treated poorly and starved and imprisoned, a clever ram leads, (where was the shepherd?) and they are humanely and tidily captured and are now in a safe place to see out their days joyfully, well done John, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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I do enjoy a happy story with a happy ending. Initially confined in a clandestine place, where sundry slaughtering takes place, animals treated poorly and starved and imprisoned, a clever ram leads, (where was the shepherd?) and they are humanely and tidily captured and are now in a safe place to see out their days joyfully, well done John, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate your kind words.
Jihn
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Blessings
Comment from lyenochka
This was really cute and could be a good children's story (if you want to tell the kids what a 'slaughterhouse' was.) I liked that you enlisted a sheepdog, too! And you covered every bit of the story from beginning to the final retirement home for the sheep! Great job!
it's animal instincts kicked in. (its)
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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This was really cute and could be a good children's story (if you want to tell the kids what a 'slaughterhouse' was.) I liked that you enlisted a sheepdog, too! And you covered every bit of the story from beginning to the final retirement home for the sheep! Great job!
it's animal instincts kicked in. (its)
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Helen. These club challenges are just that!
I?ll take care of the correction. Much appreciated.
John
