Chronic Cyberspace
When too much Cyberspace and Technology take over41 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent message in your poem and in your notes. Between cyberspace and the added Covid pandemic, I feel we may have lost a generation.
Nice use of color in the presentation of this minute poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Excellent message in your poem and in your notes. Between cyberspace and the added Covid pandemic, I feel we may have lost a generation.
Nice use of color in the presentation of this minute poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hi there Janet,
Thank you so much!!
I so appreciate your wonderful comments. You are awesome my very sweet friend.
Comment from Kayliegh
Oh wow, I love the fonts and coloring and photo, it really adds to the whole thing!
Also too true, I think especially with rise of social media kids are using cyberspace too much.
I say.. As a kid... On social media... Lol, but seriously. Too true.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Oh wow, I love the fonts and coloring and photo, it really adds to the whole thing!
Also too true, I think especially with rise of social media kids are using cyberspace too much.
I say.. As a kid... On social media... Lol, but seriously. Too true.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Hello there Kayleigh. I see that you are new here, so I welcome you as I have been trying to meet all the new people and see if I can help them to get more recognized, so that people can review them right from the start.
Also not sure if how we rate has been explained to you, but whenever someone gives a four star rating, they are supposed to tell what it is they didn't care for about it. Or perhaps it was a slip of the finger and that happens to everyone. I have thought I was giving a five, and then my finger slipped. So if that is the case, let me know or else tell what you think I did wrong. Thank you once again and I welcome you. If you have any questions or need anything, I will be happy to help you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an awesome job with your minute poem for the
contest, Mystery Author. I loved the image and the font
colors you took from it. You adhered to the requirements
of the prompt well. Your words were well thought out and
created great and true imagery. Your entry was a sad
commentary on the state of technology where kids and parents
become addicted to it. The kids are addicted, while the parents
allowed them to let it govern their lives. You were right about the
health and well-being of the kids young to adult. There needed
to be a limit set early on for them to have access to computers/
phones with the understanding they needed to have a health
break. They needed to enjoy nature and socialize face to face.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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You did an awesome job with your minute poem for the
contest, Mystery Author. I loved the image and the font
colors you took from it. You adhered to the requirements
of the prompt well. Your words were well thought out and
created great and true imagery. Your entry was a sad
commentary on the state of technology where kids and parents
become addicted to it. The kids are addicted, while the parents
allowed them to let it govern their lives. You were right about the
health and well-being of the kids young to adult. There needed
to be a limit set early on for them to have access to computers/
phones with the understanding they needed to have a health
break. They needed to enjoy nature and socialize face to face.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Always late dear. Can't help it, as I am slower all l am slower all the time with vision and still foggy from the withdrawal, but they said that could take 6 weeks. Thanks so much. I sure appreciate it so much. You are always so kind.
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
A solid entry for a minute poem contest. The rhyming is unforced. And the message and warning in this poem is a good one. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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A solid entry for a minute poem contest. The rhyming is unforced. And the message and warning in this poem is a good one. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much!!
I so appreciate your wonderful comments. You are awesome my very sweet friend.
Comment from karenina
You are preaching to the choir! Amen! As a grandmom, I see my own grandkids so immersed in what is "virtual" I sometimes fear I'll have to pry their little (and not so little) fingers from their devices in order to introduce them to REAL nature!!! Social isolation is a huge problem for these kids. Many have begun to self-harm because they are deprived of true interaction... Not to mention the cyberbullying that goes on! A very important "Minute" poem.
Well done!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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You are preaching to the choir! Amen! As a grandmom, I see my own grandkids so immersed in what is "virtual" I sometimes fear I'll have to pry their little (and not so little) fingers from their devices in order to introduce them to REAL nature!!! Social isolation is a huge problem for these kids. Many have begun to self-harm because they are deprived of true interaction... Not to mention the cyberbullying that goes on! A very important "Minute" poem.
Well done!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thanks Hon, so thankful for you and your kind reviews and comments. You are the best! Yes, those grandkids little minds don't have a chance without grandma. Lol...Actually my two youngest are upstairs watching a little 12in vhs tv that I bought 20+ years ago. They still love that thing.
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Grandma power!
Love that!
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I am just starting to scoot carefully walk up stairs and scoot down. But they were up there for the longest time, and begged me to come up.
I almost cried when I realized that all these years of playing with them paid off. They built a cool fort just like I always did with them. However, now they will sit in it and play a game with their phones back and forth, lol....
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I still love making forts!!! Max asks me to do that every time he visits!
:)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem entry for the Minute Poetry writing prompt contest.
People spend a lot of time infront of a computer or cellphone.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Goodluck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Excellent poem entry for the Minute Poetry writing prompt contest.
People spend a lot of time infront of a computer or cellphone.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Goodluck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hi Gypsy.Thank you so much!!
I so appreciate your wonderful comments. You are awesome my very sweet friend.
Comment from Sally Law
Hello, mystery poet. I certainly understand this one and feel like I come from not only a different generation p, but a different planet altogether. My mother's directive was to me home by supper time. I played outside every chance I got. Walked to and from school and played sports and sang in the chorus. I literally fell into bed at night. Television was a family affair, remember that? Even the news, we all gathered around to watch the news and strained to see if we could sight our Green Beret brother, Steve, in any of the Vietnam War footage. We never did, but it was important to my family to try. I listened to records for hours and read Tiger Beat Magazine. The house phone had a cord that was so long it stretched out the kitchen, down the hall and out the front door!
Good times that these kiddos can't even comprehend. It's frightening really.
Great minute poem. I've never tried one.
Wishing you all the best with this one!
Sally Law :)) xoxo
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Hello, mystery poet. I certainly understand this one and feel like I come from not only a different generation p, but a different planet altogether. My mother's directive was to me home by supper time. I played outside every chance I got. Walked to and from school and played sports and sang in the chorus. I literally fell into bed at night. Television was a family affair, remember that? Even the news, we all gathered around to watch the news and strained to see if we could sight our Green Beret brother, Steve, in any of the Vietnam War footage. We never did, but it was important to my family to try. I listened to records for hours and read Tiger Beat Magazine. The house phone had a cord that was so long it stretched out the kitchen, down the hall and out the front door!
Good times that these kiddos can't even comprehend. It's frightening really.
Great minute poem. I've never tried one.
Wishing you all the best with this one!
Sally Law :)) xoxo
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Awe, thank you sweet Sally. I appreciate your kind words and thank you for your memories, as you brought some back to me. I loved Tiger Beat and had many of the full size pics of Mickey Dolenz, Mark Lindsay, Paul Revere, and a few others that covered the wallpaper in my room. (I bet you were Davy Jones) Without technology we wouldn't't be here, but I even feel it is getting too much for me with too many sleepless nights. Thanks my dear friend for your kind review and sweet words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Line five, seven are out of metre and the contest calls for strict iambic metre in the above prompt? You may need to adjust your poem? Check the rules first.
Kids love their computers these days and rarely leave their homes and go to the park, it is a pity. My daughter insists on her children getting out and enjoying exercise in the fresh air. A poignant write.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Line five, seven are out of metre and the contest calls for strict iambic metre in the above prompt? You may need to adjust your poem? Check the rules first.
Kids love their computers these days and rarely leave their homes and go to the park, it is a pity. My daughter insists on her children getting out and enjoying exercise in the fresh air. A poignant write.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly, I do appreciate that. I somehow missed that part and this was the first one of these I entered. So thank you again.
Comment from nomi338
Those of us who become more and more chained, bound and locked into our chairs. We run the risk of becoming one with our seats, using our eyes, our hands and our brains, until one day we have no usable bodies any longer, we are just hands, brains, and eyes.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Those of us who become more and more chained, bound and locked into our chairs. We run the risk of becoming one with our seats, using our eyes, our hands and our brains, until one day we have no usable bodies any longer, we are just hands, brains, and eyes.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you dear Nomi for your very kind review. As always I certainly appreciate it so very much. You are a gem, and I can't thank you enough my very dear friend.
Comment from rjuselius
This is an Important social commentary dear anonymous! Children lead a life of a hermit these days. They rather have virtual relationships than face-to-face interactions.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings with hugs and kisses,
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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This is an Important social commentary dear anonymous! Children lead a life of a hermit these days. They rather have virtual relationships than face-to-face interactions.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings with hugs and kisses,
Rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Awe Rebekka, as always, you just couldn't be any sweeter. I do appreciate your very kind review and yes technology serves a purpose as where would we be without it here? Not here, I guess. Lol.. thanks again my dear friend.
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My pleasure entirely dear friend!<3
