Life Decision's at an Early Age
Think it through23 total reviews
Comment from Stephanie Rollins
I simply love concise writing. I think of Mary Higgins Clark, the literary queen. She could weave a tale with few words, making the story enough--nothing more, nothing less.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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I simply love concise writing. I think of Mary Higgins Clark, the literary queen. She could weave a tale with few words, making the story enough--nothing more, nothing less.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Wow. Thank you Stephanie for this great review. I appreciate it very much.
John
Comment from Ed Zeiser
Hi JMDG - I could certainly relate to your story. When I was young, I had a Daisy Red Ryder BB gun. I put up a target in the basement. I never shot it outside and certainly never shot at a bird. The next-door neighbor was different. He shot and killed a bird sitting in a tree. I remember watching it fall.
I loved the ending even if you couldn't brag to your friends about your accurate shooting.
Ed
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Hi JMDG - I could certainly relate to your story. When I was young, I had a Daisy Red Ryder BB gun. I put up a target in the basement. I never shot it outside and certainly never shot at a bird. The next-door neighbor was different. He shot and killed a bird sitting in a tree. I remember watching it fall.
I loved the ending even if you couldn't brag to your friends about your accurate shooting.
Ed
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you , Ed. I am glad you stopped to read my story and could relate to it first hand.
John
Comment from Janet Foor
Economy of words is a talent we can practice and you have done a great job telling the story with minimal words and yet hitting all the high points of the story.
Great story written with great empathy and lessons learned.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Economy of words is a talent we can practice and you have done a great job telling the story with minimal words and yet hitting all the high points of the story.
Great story written with great empathy and lessons learned.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, Janet for a wonderful review.
John
Comment from Sally Law
Way to go, John! I remember the episode of of The Andy Griffith Show where Opie shoots a bird with his BB gun and the guilt that followed. A great reminder in flash fiction--concise and impacting!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Way to go, John! I remember the episode of of The Andy Griffith Show where Opie shoots a bird with his BB gun and the guilt that followed. A great reminder in flash fiction--concise and impacting!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Sally.
I appreciate your reading.
John
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Most welcome!
Comment from Jim Wile
Nice job of writing, John. Very good economy of words. Nothing extra seemed needed.
I can sooo relate to this story. The same thing happened to me when I was 17, and to this day I feel bad about it. I had never shot a gun before, and I was spending the summer in the hills of North Carolina when a hillbilly friend I'd made took me hunting for sparrows one day. I shot a few with him--just for the hell of it--and hit a few. I've never fired a gun since.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Nice job of writing, John. Very good economy of words. Nothing extra seemed needed.
I can sooo relate to this story. The same thing happened to me when I was 17, and to this day I feel bad about it. I had never shot a gun before, and I was spending the summer in the hills of North Carolina when a hillbilly friend I'd made took me hunting for sparrows one day. I shot a few with him--just for the hell of it--and hit a few. I've never fired a gun since.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Same here, just not with a hillbilly.
Thanks, Jim. I appreciate your stopping to read and share.
John
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi John,
Well edited and an interesting story told in just sixty seven words.
It's a gift to know the difference between right and wrong and an obligation to practise it.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Hi John,
Well edited and an interesting story told in just sixty seven words.
It's a gift to know the difference between right and wrong and an obligation to practise it.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Shirley. I?m glad you read this and shared your thoughts with me.
John
Comment from Wendy G
I am glad! Shooting animals and birds for sport is to me abhorrent. (Sorry!) I am glad it's fiction.
Your flash fiction is well written, and well restricted to just the necessary words with a happy twist at the end. Very good writing.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I am glad! Shooting animals and birds for sport is to me abhorrent. (Sorry!) I am glad it's fiction.
Your flash fiction is well written, and well restricted to just the necessary words with a happy twist at the end. Very good writing.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I am in agreement with you on the "sport" shooting!
Thank you for reading and reviewing this one, Wendy. I appreciate it.
John
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a great flash fiction story. It takes practice write using only essential words. You cut your story to 67 words, but a complete story has been told. I usually write my story the way it comes to mind, and re-visit it in a couple of days and cut it down.
I posted a story about my first and last hunting trip. I shot a groundhog and cried.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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This is a great flash fiction story. It takes practice write using only essential words. You cut your story to 67 words, but a complete story has been told. I usually write my story the way it comes to mind, and re-visit it in a couple of days and cut it down.
I posted a story about my first and last hunting trip. I shot a groundhog and cried.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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LJ? first and last. Do you remember when it posted and the title. I?d look it up.
Thank you for reading.
John
Comment from lyenochka
You did a great job whittling away to keep the essence of the story! And I'm so glad you saved the life of the momma bird which also saved her entire family, too! Great story!!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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You did a great job whittling away to keep the essence of the story! And I'm so glad you saved the life of the momma bird which also saved her entire family, too! Great story!!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Helen for reading and the kind words I your review.
Jihn
Comment from w.j.debi
I'm glad the character decided to honor life before pulling that trigger. Her little ones need her so not only was her life spared, but theirs as well.
You built the tension well and I was worried for the poor bird until that lat minute decision spared her.
I see from your notes why you are so compassionate.
I went deer hunting with my father once. He lost his wallet and we spent the entire time looking for it. When I got home I was grateful we didn't see any deer. I don't know how I would have reacted if he would have shot something. I'm glad I didn't find out. I think Disney's Bambi had a big impression on me.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I'm glad the character decided to honor life before pulling that trigger. Her little ones need her so not only was her life spared, but theirs as well.
You built the tension well and I was worried for the poor bird until that lat minute decision spared her.
I see from your notes why you are so compassionate.
I went deer hunting with my father once. He lost his wallet and we spent the entire time looking for it. When I got home I was grateful we didn't see any deer. I don't know how I would have reacted if he would have shot something. I'm glad I didn't find out. I think Disney's Bambi had a big impression on me.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for sharing as well. I appreciate your time and thoughtful review!
John
