Comment from K.I. Betancur

Excellent

Haha, very cute! That does feel like a Dungeons and Dragons story of its own ("You encounter a dragon, but a spider sits above you. Roll to avoid the spider" [Your roll, of course, lowers the spider onto your hand.] "Your fear of spiders has overtaken you, and the dragon burns you to a crisp!")

Thanks for sharing this!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023

Thanks for the review! I appreciate your humorous take on my story!

reply by K.I. Betancur on 13-Apr-2023

Absolutely, thank you for setting up that little story!

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I think I'd knock a hole in the wall and not stick my hand in there. That would be really scary because I don't know what might grab it. In this story, the fairies were left on their own. Maybe they were the trick to lead you into disaster. Bad fairies!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is a cute little story. It is such fun to think of rescuing fairies, who say they are trapped, but a dragon might be better than a spider in your hand. Yuck.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thanks for the review!

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Thos was a fun bit of fantasy flash fiction. The spider thing would have been a deal breaker for me as well. I liked the idea of the closet bring the hidden place for fairies. But my question is, did the fairies lure the protagonist into the closet on behalf of the spider. Thank you for posting. Gretchen

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thanks for your review! My intention was not that the fairies were in league with the spider. My intention was that the spider was the scary monster that the fairies needed help with. I think spiders are scary monster, lol.
Mintybee

reply by GWHARGIS on 16-Mar-2023

I agree. Don't want to mess with eight legs. I am suspicious by nature. Lol. Gretchen

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

What a twist at the end. I was not expecting that! I have found that the FS count includes counting a dash as a word, so I try not to use dashes for flash fiction. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thanks for your review, and the advice!

Comment from Liberty P.

Excellent

Oh, this is fun! I like that the fairies ended up being pranksters instead of leading her into a magical adventure. That is the perfect subversion of genre expectations.
Best of luck to you!

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thanks for your review!

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

I liked this little story. I guess we all have our phobias. I might be willing to fight Balrogs or even spiders, but if I don't want to be confronted by an earwig or millipede! Those things give me the whim-whams! Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

Thanks for your review! I can't stand earwigs either!

reply by Mary Shifman on 22-Mar-2023

You are welcome.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed you whimsical story contest entry til the
spider part, Mintybee. U would have the same reaction
to it. When an entry has to have a specific word count
under 100, I always count by hand. I'm not sure how
the hyphenated words figure in. At one point, I believed
a hyphenated word counted as 1 word, but I'm not 100$
sure.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023

I'm sorry you didn't like the spider part. Yes, I would have the same reaction to it. That's what made it funny to me. I always made someone else deal with spiders, until I had kids and they came to get me when there was a spider. Not for money or glory or pride, but only for my kids would I ever learn to face spiders! Thanks for reading and reviewing, even if you didn't like the twist. I appreciate it.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 16-Mar-2023

No, I don't like spiders. Your twist at the end that included one was ok.

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023

Ah, okay. In that case, I'm glad you liked the story, despite the spider!

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Well, I don't know if I'd ever fight dragons for love. I'd probably be the sissy you run and leave the damsel in distress. LOL. Oh, not really, I hope. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023

Thanks for reading, and reviewing!

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your short flash fiction story, as it immediately captures the imagination with a cry for help. You build suspense as fairies lead the protagonist into a dark corner. This is great storytelling in just a few words. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023

Thanks for the positive review! I'm glad you enjoyed it.