Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "A Problem with Plumbing"Biography/Supernatural
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Comment from Rachelle Allen
The story itself has good bones (that is not a boner joke, just to clarify...) but because I'm reading this chapter out of context with the previous chapters [it was the next in line in the queue of your postings] I became very confused.
It's okay; I'm nothing if not flexible in this life and always eager for a good challenge! So I'm just treating this like a gorgeous quilt, arranging squares willy-nilly, trusting that, when all have been presented and put into their proper order, the end result will be spectacular!!
xoxoxo
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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The story itself has good bones (that is not a boner joke, just to clarify...) but because I'm reading this chapter out of context with the previous chapters [it was the next in line in the queue of your postings] I became very confused.
It's okay; I'm nothing if not flexible in this life and always eager for a good challenge! So I'm just treating this like a gorgeous quilt, arranging squares willy-nilly, trusting that, when all have been presented and put into their proper order, the end result will be spectacular!!
xoxoxo
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your awesome review as well. I have gone ahead and disable those chapters that are out of order. It's time, thank you for that awesome advice. Thank you for this awesome review as always. I appreciate your comments and your a unique way of seeing things have a great night!
Comment from Paul Manton
If this were fiction I would still have given it six stars, but that it is factual makes it twice as amazing. Brilliant control of narrative, Lea - Congratulations on that - and your really excellent vocabulary. I taught English Lit in London half my life, and anyone writing as well as this would get an A* - you are a very accomplished writer. Well done.
Best wishes from Paul
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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If this were fiction I would still have given it six stars, but that it is factual makes it twice as amazing. Brilliant control of narrative, Lea - Congratulations on that - and your really excellent vocabulary. I taught English Lit in London half my life, and anyone writing as well as this would get an A* - you are a very accomplished writer. Well done.
Best wishes from Paul
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Again a real honor and privilege thanks again!
Comment from JT traveller
A fantastically written piece. I loved it. A couple of small errors, "intil ", "waiving".)
I liked how you expressed that the road was indifferent to the driver.
Yep, seen many a testicular defining wound in my time. Nasty. Most motorcycle accidents with tank slaps.
Eerie ending too. Loved it. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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A fantastically written piece. I loved it. A couple of small errors, "intil ", "waiving".)
I liked how you expressed that the road was indifferent to the driver.
Yep, seen many a testicular defining wound in my time. Nasty. Most motorcycle accidents with tank slaps.
Eerie ending too. Loved it. Jacqueline
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you Jacqueline I appreciate your comments in your kind words! Thanks for those little typos i've now correct them. I hope you're enjoying the sun and surf and you are at peace and life is beautiful I have yourself a great day!
Comment from pome lover
Fascinating story. So ... you are a level 2 industrial first aid person and you run a resort in a forest somewhere north where there are caribou.
I am amazed, even with your good care, that the man's "maleness" was in working order after your description of him. But good for you for your quick thinking and treatment! I'm sorry about the loss of the young girl.
You must lead a very interesting and helpful life.
Have to say, from your title, I never guessed what the subject would be. Pretty clever.
I have to ask, the pair of clackers were joints? I've never heard that word.
Again, a fascinating story!
Katharine
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Fascinating story. So ... you are a level 2 industrial first aid person and you run a resort in a forest somewhere north where there are caribou.
I am amazed, even with your good care, that the man's "maleness" was in working order after your description of him. But good for you for your quick thinking and treatment! I'm sorry about the loss of the young girl.
You must lead a very interesting and helpful life.
Have to say, from your title, I never guessed what the subject would be. Pretty clever.
I have to ask, the pair of clackers were joints? I've never heard that word.
Again, a fascinating story!
Katharine
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Lol...hahaha! Clackers are another word for testicles lol. Thank you for your kind comments I really appreciate it very much! I thank you for Kind review as well. Thank you again. Hope your day is great thank you for making me laugh!
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yikes! learn something everyday. feel very stupid, but glad I made you laugh.
Thanks for enlightening me. :)
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No worries.. It's a slang term you don't hear every day. Now you got a new one for your vocabulary L O. L
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right. I'll run it by my granddaughter. :)
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Lol
Comment from JSD
Shiver down the spine stuff. This rushes me along with the narrative, but the use of language is tight and effective. I sense you rushing to write it down. Watch the little errors! I don't think I could put poetry into a prose form, but you have definitely succeeded Lea. Well done. John
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Shiver down the spine stuff. This rushes me along with the narrative, but the use of language is tight and effective. I sense you rushing to write it down. Watch the little errors! I don't think I could put poetry into a prose form, but you have definitely succeeded Lea. Well done. John
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Thank you John You are absolutely right? My brain just wants to go full speed What I lack is a really good word. Processing programs one that does spelling and grammar punctuation all that stuff. So I can run it through that filter. The one on here is OK but it misses a lot of stuff. Thank you again. I appreciate you and all you say.
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Lol. I'm a good proof-reader!
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent storyline and very well written and well thought out! The characters interacted perfectly throughout throughout the piece!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Excellent storyline and very well written and well thought out! The characters interacted perfectly throughout throughout the piece!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much Melodie and to you and yours as well! I so appreciate your thoughtful and kind review. Thank you so much for reading and offering your thoughts I hope your evening is great thanks again!
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
An excellently written and expressed story, Lea! This engages you from the start with your beautiful and evocative description of the birds and fish (there is a little edit towards the bottom of para 2 - 'until' ). Then the crisis and the tension so well conveyed. The reader, however, always feels in safe hands with all your medical expertise. But the details nevertheless quite shockingly graphic which is necessary in a story like this. (testes - not testi's). Your prose is skilfully rounded off with the presence of the ghost of the little girl who'd died. You knew she'd be there in that darkness, I think. Well done, Lea! Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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An excellently written and expressed story, Lea! This engages you from the start with your beautiful and evocative description of the birds and fish (there is a little edit towards the bottom of para 2 - 'until' ). Then the crisis and the tension so well conveyed. The reader, however, always feels in safe hands with all your medical expertise. But the details nevertheless quite shockingly graphic which is necessary in a story like this. (testes - not testi's). Your prose is skilfully rounded off with the presence of the ghost of the little girl who'd died. You knew she'd be there in that darkness, I think. Well done, Lea! Debbie
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Yes Debbie once again your insight is astronomical! I knew the young girl would be there and I knew what I had to do to set her free and send her home. So many souls out there especially those in fear of going home. You are very intelligent and highly sensitive I can see so I. Thank you very much for contacting me and for reviewing. I appreciate all you have said I hope your night is great and thank you again!
Comment from jmdg1954
Holy s**t. I'm sitting here with my legs as tightly together as I can get them! Sorry!
I couldn't not, not finish your story. You are a life saver, a quick thinker and s good neighbor!
You never wrote what happened to the joints?
I am sorry to hear about the loss of the young girl. That is devastating!
Thanks for posting!
John
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Holy s**t. I'm sitting here with my legs as tightly together as I can get them! Sorry!
I couldn't not, not finish your story. You are a life saver, a quick thinker and s good neighbor!
You never wrote what happened to the joints?
I am sorry to hear about the loss of the young girl. That is devastating!
Thanks for posting!
John
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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L o l yeah I think i've smoked. . Yes it's true story alright. Another story will be about the girl that died but thank you so much for having a read and offering your kind remarks and your time and for your review. Thank you again hope you had a great afternoon!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow Lea! This is quite a story and I notice that you post it as non-fiction so I take it that this really did happen to you. Are you a nurse? Your reactions seem to suggest you knew exactly what to do in this situation and probably saved this guy from a much worse injury with your quick thinking. Then in your last three lines you turned this into something supernatural. Which ever it is, I was entertained and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Wow Lea! This is quite a story and I notice that you post it as non-fiction so I take it that this really did happen to you. Are you a nurse? Your reactions seem to suggest you knew exactly what to do in this situation and probably saved this guy from a much worse injury with your quick thinking. Then in your last three lines you turned this into something supernatural. Which ever it is, I was entertained and wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Yes this was a true happening and so was the death of the young girl which I'll tell about it another Chapter. Yeah nothing small happens when you live in the bush!
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Oh my goodness Lea, you are a life saver girl x x
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Ty!
Comment from Julie Lau
A good story Lea, but quite a few corrections are needed. Here are the ones I picked up, in order as you go through the text. A lot are to do with commas and apostrophes:
Husband's condition..."No, an...poopooed...such a sight, but...made, holding it...chat, bleed-out...area,...so I...saw two men...I bucked up...stars (no apostrophe).
Hoping this helps, Julie L
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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A good story Lea, but quite a few corrections are needed. Here are the ones I picked up, in order as you go through the text. A lot are to do with commas and apostrophes:
Husband's condition..."No, an...poopooed...such a sight, but...made, holding it...chat, bleed-out...area,...so I...saw two men...I bucked up...stars (no apostrophe).
Hoping this helps, Julie L
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you Julie I'll go through. It have a good one appreciate. Your comments? And fear are you thank you so much have a great night!
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And you have a good day!
